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AMITYVILLE ACADEMY ENROLLMENT FORM

Name: Alice Marie LaToure
Nicknames: Ali (It's a bit childish, and highly dislikes it.)
Gender: Female.
Age: 15, though she looks younger than her presumed age.

Faction: Undead
Race: Western Vampire

Natural Ability:
xxxxxx • Heightened Senses: A Western vampire can enjoy a sharper sense of sight, smell, and hearing. It's helpful in remembering classes, friends names, and knowing of what to do in situations.

Personality:
xxxxxx • "Can I help you with something?" Alice may look as cold as ice, and feel like it as well, but she can't help but help others when they need their help with things. Wouldn't other students do that same thing? By helping their fellow classmates?

xxxxxx • "...." Alice gives off that cold feeling in different ways. She tends to stare at people, making it seem as if she is annoyed of you, when if fact she's trying to remember you face or name. She also tends not to talk much about herself or almost subjects, giving the thought that she's doesn't want to be with people, when she is just shy to new people. Also, she insists to do everything by herself, thinking she can handle it herself. It's more of she's not used to others helping her.

xxxxxx • "I.... Um.... Why hello there." Alice might look completely solitary and not enjoy people's company, but she just has strong emotions about them, and not in a good way. The emotions that made her like that was one that fills her mind of being mistreated and making her feel terrible. Either way, it might take a while for her to warm up to her friends when she gets them, but once she gets to know you more, she turns out to be completely friendly and kind.

xxxxxx • "It's not a good thing to daydream during class." Alice cares about the other students a lot more than she looks. Everyone came there to become better, and everyone needs a little help once in a while. Whether it is a slight argument, or a friendly disposition, she would like everyone to get along with others.

xxxxxx • "I don't break promises that I make." Alice is quite loyal to her friends, especially when she makes a promise to them. She thinks that a friend's trust and loyalty matter greatly in a relationship, and keeping a promise until it is accomplished is the thing she does whenever she can.

xxxxxx • "Think of something that you enjoy. It helps." Alice tends to be very calm in certain situations. Very level headed, you would think. Once in a while, when things get really bad and nothing is going right, she tends to start to break down and goes into a sleep mode, in which she does nothing. No moving, no talking, nothing. She won't remember anything that happens when this occurs, and it's uncertain as to how long it would last. To make sure that this doesn't happen, she goes on walks or plays a tune on the violin or piano, though she doesn't recall how she knew how to play them, or what they even were, to clear her thoughts.

xxxxxx • "May I try?" Alice likes to learn things, especially since she can't remember anything about her previous life. She enjoys knowing the history of things, and reads a lot to increase her understanding of anything she is interested in. Though she didn't know that much when she arrived in Halloween, she is quite intelligent, but still wants to learn more about everything, including herself.

Why are they enrolled in Amityville Academy?
Alice wanted to come to Amityville Academy after she had heard about the school from other ghouls and boils around Halloween. She had heard many good things about the school, and she wanted to go. She thought she might meet some new faces, while also learning to better control her FEAR, and her trust with others.

FEAR Ability:

The Barrier
xxxxxx • Bloody Thorn: Alice's attack is a bush of red and white roses. The attack is used as a defense. The defense makes a barrier between herself and her opponent, but can only last for a short amount of time. The problem with her FEAR ability is that it can easily be cut, and can only go a distance of a couple of feet.

Physical Description: 5'4 feet tall and weighs roughly about 105 lbs. Lean and nimble body, and short for her guessed age. Limbs look quite frail and delicate. Appears to look like a doll, or child.

Eye Colour: A bright scarlet, like the color of blood-red roses.
Hair Colour/Style: White colored hair with loose curls that go down to the middle of her back, and straight bangs that go down to about her eyebrows. Hair is parted in the middle.
Skin Colour: Olive-colored skin.
Clothing Style/Colours: Clothing style is a mixture of victorian, gothic lolita, and edwardian era apparel. Color choice are the usual reds, black, and the occasional white.
Normal outfit consists of a black jacket that goes to upper chest/collarbone area, with collar going around neck with skull buttons on the left side. Sleeves are puffed slightly, with a small cuff in the middle of upper arm. Red corset with black lace with a pattern of roses and vines, with matching tights/stockings.. Black skirt starts about at the knees from the front, while the back goes to feet. Skirt has ruffles at the end of the dress in the front and back. Has bright, red roses on both sides of the skirt, with one large rose on each side, with smaller ones around them. Black victorian boots, with two skull buttons on the outside of each shoe. Lack lace gloves that are same pattern of corset and stockings, within gathered at the wrists. Black headpiece on left side of head, consisted of red roses, and very small skulls around them.
Extra: Has larger pupils than most, with longer lashes to compliment them. Her fangs are hidden well, and only appear when angered.
References:
Alice Marie LaToure Reference.

Fright Night Pass: A record of being there.

Alice's Minipets:




Rose - Alice named her that because of the patten on her side. It resembled a rose. This Minipet was a prize from one of the Fright Night Booths. It's one of Alice's favorite pets. Rose loves to cuddle, and insists on being petted when someone is around.



Lace - Alice got Lace from going to the Silk Webs booth during Fright Night. Lace likes to sleep, and will hide from unknown visitors until she is used to them around.



Jack - Not sure how she came up with the name, but it stuck to her like glue. She also got him during Fright Night as a prize from one of the booths. He loves to play, along with chewing and nibbling on anything. She just hope he doesn't decide to eat her homework.

Congrats on the custom slot and welcome to TiH~ Mort's happy to see more undead around! Just a couple of things that stuck out to me:

FEAR: I'm a little confused by the wording by whether you mean the bushels create an actual barrier or if the vines wrap around the opponent's legs to stop them from moving, since those would have two different effects in battle and each attack can only have one. It'll definitely help if you consult the mechanics behind each school of Fear so that when it comes battle time the opponent knows how to react.

Backhistory: Just a teeny note: in TiH, vampires aren't actually turned from the human world: they're either born naturally as vampires from a family (ie. one parent or both are vamps) or when a reaper collects their soul and brings them to Halloween they wake up a vampire. Either way is up to you! The memory loss is still total if you choose to do it the second way, though undead/ghosts can retain strong emotions even if they can't remember the reason behind it. If my explanation's confusing or inadequate, you can always consult the undead guide!

Personality: It says Alice dislikes being frustrated, but what frustrates her specifically? What exactly pushes her buttons?

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IDK how much you have changed since Ol-j's crit but I will try not to touch on the same things they do.

Just what makes a western vampire vrs... a normal vampire?

Nat ability- I would say do a wording change.
'A Vampire can enjoy a sharper sense of sight, smell, and hearing. Very little can escape a vampire's notice, making them excellent diplomats or socialites. '
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'A western vampire can enjoy a sharper sense of sight, smell, and hearing. This isn't a good as say an eagle's vision or a hound's nose, but it's enough to give them a better insight to their surroundings.'

Saying how very little can escape their notice and then tacking on the fact they're diplomats and such comes off as overpowered for a yr1 natural ability. A change to phrasing can make a world of difference.

personality wise-

A large part of her personality says she comes off as cold- but very little explains how people might view her as cold. She's helpful to everyone, tries to get along with everyone, loyal, calm under stress, and a willing learner. Very little points to how she might be cold aside from how she is slow to warm up. Try to go into how she might rub people the wrong way or make them dislike her. If a person views her as X, might they? In being cold, does she not tell people about her self? Does she not talk to people? Does she respond badly to friendly advances? It seems to be an underlying theme of her personality, but without making it an equal part to her 'virtues' you end with a sort of one sided view.

FEAR ability- Small thing, but in being the barrier skill- It would be protecting her, having it wrap around her enemy's feet treads into doing to much. Just remove that bit and it's fine.

backstory- idk if you have edited yet so I won't comment on it for now~

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