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Name: Aisling Connolly

Nickname: Ash

Age: 17

Birthday: March 1

Sign: Pisces

Gemstone:  Amber

Blood Type: B-

Fav. Food: Shepard's pie, preferably homemade

Hated Food: Raw spinach

School:  St. Magdalena’s Seminary

Hobbies:
Volunteering || While Aisling doesn't dedicate herself to any particular cause or banner, she does enjoy going out and volunteering. She likes to do little things to help make her city that much better, especially in the wake of all the crime that seems to be happening. She prefers direct-action volunteering: she would rather actually be helping people than doing little things. So picking up litter isn't her speed, nor is running a donation drive or bake sale to earn money, but actually going to a nursing home to talk to/interact with the patients, or handing out food at a soup kitchen, would be what she would want to do.

Singing || Aisling has a fairly decent singing voice, and she has been taking voice lessons since she was young. It's something she truly loves to do, and she has been known to break out into song at random moments. Ash will sing from most any genre, from screaming along with Mettalica to tapping along to Celtic Woman. She has participated in both school and out of school choirs, though choral activities tend to be the first privilege she loses or is threatened with losing if she's in trouble since her parents know how much she loves it.

Debate || As much as her preferred approach to disagreements tends to be "talk to the fist," she does enjoy a good verbal debate. Her skill at it tends to surprise people who've dealt with her face to face. She hates opponents that try to resort to distraction or dirty tactics, and prefers to keep her debate points entirely and purely on the facts. She will often play Devil's Advocate on any topic, especially if someone seems to have a strong opinion that's not backed up by the facts.

Virtues: 
Honest || Aisling is not one to lie, cheat, or steal. She also hates gossip and rumor-spreading, seeing both as nasty, pointless wastes of time. She is also very open about herself - what you see is what you get. There is no "hidden" side to her. This extends even to relationships. she sees no point in playing games. If she likes you, she likes you and you will know it. If she doesn't, you will find yourself very swiftly turned down.

Dependable || If Aisling says she's going to do something, consider it done. She will never run out on obligations or cancel on plans, barring some extreme emergency. She hates the thought of letting people down, as it feels dishonest to her to make plans and cancel later. On those rare occasions when for whatever reason, she truly can't complete an obligation or make it to an engagement, she tries to let the other person know as early as possible rather than cutting out at the last minute.

Activist || Aisling wants to fix the world. She sees the potential for a better place, and she does everything she can to make it so. She wants the world, and people, to be the ideal place that it ought to be, and so she volunteers and goes to rallies and sometimes just stands on the street corner with leaflets to get people's attention. She wants to do everything she can to improve the world and the people in it.

Flaws: 
Hot-Tempered || Aisling is very, very temperamental. She gets angry extremely easily, and forgives very slowly. Her usual response to being angered is to punch first and talk later, and as a result she gets into fights a lot. She rises quickly to provocation and insults, and also to any sort of bullying behavior. This is the major reason she's at St. Mag's - apparently hitting people in order to shut them up is frowned upon in most school establishments.

Blunt || Aisling will call it as she sees it, if this means telling you that you'd a jerk, or that you do in fact look fat in that dress, she will say so. Why sugarcoat things? It's another form of dishonestly in her mind, and she hates dishonesty.

Bitter || Aisling is trying to fix the world, but deep down she feels very firmly that she should not have to. If people didn't suck so much, there would be nothing for her to fix. People are liars, cheats, lazy, and unreliable, and while she tries to be the exact opposite, that doesn't change what she expects. No matter how much potential for good they have, most are going to waste it and take the "easier" road by being petty, nasty, and cruel. She sees it all around her, and she hates what she sees, so she works as hard as she can to fight against it.


PHYSICAL DESCRIPTION

Eyes: Green, almond-shaped

Hair: Red/ginger, about chest-length with sidebangs, partially in front and partially back - Visual

Face: Heart-shaped, freckles all over her cheeks

Clothes: St. Magdalena's uniform, rectangular glasses (similar to Gaia's Emo Glasses)

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I'm gonna try my hand at an actual crit for Aisling! She sounds fantastic, and when you get her I'd deffo like some RP. c; In the meantime, here we go:

Getting into fights: I'd love some more elaboration on this one! Does she only get into fights when the other person provokes it (ie taunts, bumping into her, something) or does she actually go looking for them herself? If so, how? Are there people she wouldn't try to fight with / does she try to fight with everyone / does she have any 'standards' for her opponent('s skill level / age / etc)?

Volunteering: Is there any specific kind of volunteering she goes for? Does she prefer donation drives or bake sales, cleaning up the streets or helping the elderly? What are her favourite volunteer jobs? Does she just go for the first one she sees?

Singing: Does she have a favourite genre? Has she ever gone to choir or has she always taken music lessons by herself? If no to choir, why not?

For personality, the only thing that really strikes me is that there seems to be some disrepancy between Idealistic and Bitter.
The way I read it is that Aisling believes that people are basically good (Idealistic) but then she also believes that they aren't (Bitter). This doesn't quite connect for me - the two traits seem to be saying opposite things right now. Does she actually expect people to be bad/not want to change, but wishes they would? Some clarification here would be awesome - I think you can definitely make the two traits work together, but I'm just not seeing it atm.
And out of curiousity, how does she justify fighting people with her idealistic views? Is she trying to beat some sense into them or is fighting a guilty pleasure?

Your knight magic sounds great and I love Corbenic's outfit! All in all, Aisling sounds like a really interesting and fun character; I definitely think you're onto something really good here, and you already have a very solid base, all it needs is a bit more information added and you're gold as sunshine. <3

Hello, Song!

Let’s go ahead and get this quest on its way toward acceptance! Overall you’ve got a good concept here! There are just a couple of relatively minor things I think need to be taken care of!

THE CIVILIAN

First, her hobbies!

These are looking pretty solid as far as “volunteering,” “singing,” and “debate” goes. The only thing I’d like to ask here is, what sorts of things does she like/prefer to debate about? Or will she argue anything and play Devil’s Advocate just for the fun of it?

Her “getting into fights” hobby is where I’m seeing an issue. This is reading more like a flaw to me, especially since you’ve stated that it’s not really a hobby and it doesn’t seem as if Aisling particularly enjoys it. It is certainly possible for fighting to be a hobby, but I believe there’d need to be some level of enjoyment in it! I don’t know if that’s something you’d like to change, otherwise I’d suggest removing it and adding some of this information about the fights she takes part in into her flaws, especially “hot-headed” and “bitter.”

Now for her virtues and flaws!

I’m pretty satisfied with what you have for her! I think for the most part her virtues and flaws work really well together! I’d like to see a liiiittle more expansion on “dependable,” such as what does she do on those rare occasions in which she can’t fulfill an obligation or has to cancel on someone. I’d also like to see “hot-tempered” expanded upon a little more, particularly when it comes to her habit for getting into fights!

The only other issue I see here is in “idealistic” vs. “bitter.” I seem to be having the same problem Ephebe had above! XD Now, I’m not saying someone can’t be both. I think everyone has ideals they’d like to see in action but they don’t necessarily have to think it’s possible for one reason or another. The way you have “bitter” written out just makes it seem as if she’s already so jaded she might have trouble believing in a person’s inherent goodness. I think it’s that last sentence in “idealistic” that’s creating the conflict between the two. You might want to consider writing her “idealistic” virtue more like a “dreamer” or a “visionary” virtue, like she enjoys thinking of a better world and doing what she can to make that happen (hence her volunteering), but she might not believe in the inherent goodness of man, because humans are flawed and so on so forth, leading into her “bitter” flaw!

THE POWERED SIDE

Both of your attacks read very well to me! However, I think saying that all of her allies are affected by it is a bit much. You might want to change this to an AoE attack, in which case her magic could work on allies within a ten foot radius. Or it could affect one person at a time, depending on who she’s focusing her magic on.

I’d also suggest adding another effect to her magic in her knight stage! You’ve increased her magic pool, but it doesn’t seem as if the magic itself is any stronger from squire stage to knight stage; therefore, adding another effect would be perfectly acceptable! Perhaps they are not only filled with heroic virtue, but they’re also given a bit of a boost defensively and are able to withstand attacks better? You’re more than welcome to come up with your own ideas here, but I figured a suggestion might help give you a bit of direction!

And that’s it! Once you’ve finished the edits, or if you have any questions about anything, feel free to quote me and I’ll give this another look!

You're very welcome!! <3

Your edits to her attacks looks great! I don’t see any other areas of contention there!

I’m still looking at her “Dreamer”/idealism virtue versus her “bitter” flaw, though, and am feeling a bit conflicted over it, even though I know people can be both (and even though I initially suggested the change to “dreamer”). Being both quasi-idealistic but also rather bitter myself at times, I definitely see what you’re trying to do here, but I’m unsure if it’ll pass through to acceptance.

So I’d like to make another suggestion! 8D;;; What would you think of changing “dreamer/idealist” to something like “activist”? With her volunteering, Aisling definitely seems to be the sort to fall into this category. She wants to help people, she wants to make the world better so that it actually reaches her ideal, and she does what she can to make that possible. At the same time, she could still be very bitter, as she sees the downside to everything and seems to have some tough experiences as far as her getting into fights is concerned. Almost like… if the world had been a good, decent place to begin with she wouldn’t have to fix it because there’d be nothing to fix.

I think that reads much better now! I can definitely see more of a balance between the two!

Everything looks good to me now! Which means it's time for a trial stamp! Good luck!! <33