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MsRetroGeek

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PostPosted: Fri Apr 27, 2012 7:42 pm


So here's a piece that's been stuck in my head in a while I hope you guys enjoy.

Staring at the puddle in front of her, her crystal bluish white eyes gazed into her reflection. Tears fell from her eyes, as she continued to look down. Her back was towards a brick wall. "Why? Why did older brother have to tell me this now?" Sobbing to herself as she covered her eyes, with her hands. Panting slowly, she thought about her parents. "Why couldn't I remember this?! Why..." Looking up towards the sky she sighed. "I need to at least get over this.. It's no use crying over this" Slowly getting up she dashed off into a random direction as she continued to weep for her deceased parents. Feeling someone behind her, she quickly turned to try and see who was behind her. She was still in the alley she had been crying in. "Hello? Is anyone there?" Questioning what she had just heard a while ago, as her heart beated rapidly. Wrapping her arms in front of her chest, she felt a slight breeze ruffle her hair touching the back of her neck. Landing of feet from about a story up was heard behind the girlm Coming to her senses she took off running, but a hand grabbed both of her wrists. Trying to kick whoever had grabbed her. The girls wrists were being twist. Screaming out in pain, a man with black sunglasses with a black leather jacket and blue jeans approached me. His hair was spiked. Laughing was heard all around her, as she began to sink towards her knees. Being pulled right back up, getting struck into a wall. 'Defenseless' That word was the first thing that popped up into her head. The second guy that must have jumped down from the building. Had a crow bar in his hand. The other she had first seen had a pistol in his hand. Violating her space, they shot bullets deep into her arms and chest, the other struck his crow bar at my ribs making sure most of them were cracked. Coughing up blood was the result from their beatings. The restrain on the back of her arms were let go as she fell face forward on the ground. Her body had completely shut down, as she found herself blacked out.
PostPosted: Sat Apr 28, 2012 1:58 pm


Maylin_C


You're going to continue this story right? Because it's awesome! I want to read the rest. XD The one thing I want to point out is in some spots you talk about her and other times you talk about me.. 3rd person or 1st? Other than that it's very interesting!! <3

Tyjaay
Captain


MsRetroGeek

Shy Cutie-Pie

PostPosted: Sat Apr 28, 2012 3:00 pm


Tyjaay


Haha XD thank you for liking my mini story. And I should fix that right now. Oh and hmm I'll continue to think of new ideas for this. OO! Just thought of one.
PostPosted: Sat Apr 28, 2012 11:16 pm


Switching P.O.Vs


Awakening, the pain I had felt earlier vanished suddenly. However I was encased in some sort of white and neon blue armor. Looking all around me, I felt like I was being watched. "Hello?" Hearing talking close by to me, I fell off a metal table that I must have lied on. Trying to get up once again, the armor suit forbid me to. Crashing right onto the floor with a loud BANG. "So are you positive that she's the one?" A young guy who sounded to be about 18 asked the question. The voice he was using sounded demanding and a bit frustrated. "Yes Taichi she is the one"Another voice responded. The man sounded to be in his late 30's. The tone in his voice sounded agitated. Their foot steps were coming closer. Noticing the room I was in, it was a white room with a metal table in the center, to the far left of the room was a metal door. 'Who were they? What did they want with me? Why am I dressed in this armor? But how did I get here' Those were my main concerns as I heard their foot steps get closer and closer to this room. A hand grabbed the door knob as it turned opening the door. Fear seeped through her, as she saw the door open revealing a yellow light entering the blank room.

MsRetroGeek

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MsRetroGeek

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PostPosted: Sat May 05, 2012 12:39 pm


(I'm gonna take a break from my current story. But now I'm gonna go do another story. I thank the leader for giving me this idea. I'm gonna base this off of the webcomic/anime/manga Hetalia. If you have not seen it, you must check it out. Now onto my story)

The day I felt the presence of the dead that was the day that changed my life.
I was apparently born with the gift. I told my Kuya England about the encounters I had gotten. He told me I was a medium, and that I should treasure the gift. We were the only two that knew about my gift. I could sense all of the ancient countries around me. The Byzantine Empire Greece's mom was so proud of him. She was happy that he was continuing discovering the old ruins from her time and the teachings from his child hood about the Greek gods and goddesses and the myths. Germania was another she felt he was proud of his grandsons to see them growing and becoming stronger. That's what he had wanted them to do ever since he raised them. But one stood out to me my older brother Italy and a spirit named Holy Roman Empire. They were close that's what I knew from asking around Austria and Hungary. I noticed how he would always fake a smile and pretend to be cheerful whenever he was around company but I knew deep inside he wasn't. That's when I knew I need to help my brother.
PostPosted: Sun May 06, 2012 2:31 pm


i LOVE your story keep writing

-iskylinesi-


MsRetroGeek

Shy Cutie-Pie

PostPosted: Sun May 06, 2012 2:32 pm


XXdemon_child102XX
i LOVE your story keep writing


Lolz XD which one?
PostPosted: Sun May 06, 2012 2:34 pm


Maylin_C
XXdemon_child102XX
i LOVE your story keep writing


Lolz XD which one?


the very first one ^^

-iskylinesi-


MsRetroGeek

Shy Cutie-Pie

PostPosted: Sun May 06, 2012 2:38 pm


XXdemon_child102XX
Maylin_C
XXdemon_child102XX
i LOVE your story keep writing


Lolz XD which one?


the very first one ^^


Lolz XD thank you. And I'll continue it sometime today
PostPosted: Sun May 06, 2012 2:40 pm


Maylin_C
XXdemon_child102XX
Maylin_C
XXdemon_child102XX
i LOVE your story keep writing


Lolz XD which one?


the very first one ^^


Lolz XD thank you. And I'll continue it sometime today


i wish i could write like you
im jealous XD

-iskylinesi-


MsRetroGeek

Shy Cutie-Pie

PostPosted: Sun May 06, 2012 3:03 pm


XXdemon_child102XX
Maylin_C
XXdemon_child102XX
Maylin_C
XXdemon_child102XX
i LOVE your story keep writing


Lolz XD which one?


the very first one ^^


Lolz XD thank you. And I'll continue it sometime today


i wish i could write like you
im jealous XD


Lolz XD wait like me? I never considered my writing to be good. But thank you ^_^
PostPosted: Mon May 07, 2012 5:03 pm


Maylin_C
XXdemon_child102XX
Maylin_C
XXdemon_child102XX
Maylin_C
XXdemon_child102XX
i LOVE your story keep writing


Lolz XD which one?


the very first one ^^


Lolz XD thank you. And I'll continue it sometime today


i wish i could write like you
im jealous XD


Lolz XD wait like me? I never considered my writing to be good. But thank you ^_^


well for me is really good ^^

-iskylinesi-


MsRetroGeek

Shy Cutie-Pie

PostPosted: Mon May 07, 2012 5:06 pm


XXdemon_child102XX
Maylin_C
XXdemon_child102XX
Maylin_C
XXdemon_child102XX


the very first one ^^


Lolz XD thank you. And I'll continue it sometime today


i wish i could write like you
im jealous XD


Lolz XD wait like me? I never considered my writing to be good. But thank you ^_^


well for me is really good ^^


Lolz XD Awwwz thank you. And right now I'm trying to think of some ideas for my story to really develop. Do you have any ideas to make this story better?
PostPosted: Mon May 07, 2012 6:08 pm


(Here's a continuation of my story)

Entering the room were two guys. The first one looked like to be about 18. He was dressed in an armor suit like mine, but it was a combination of black and red. His hair was spiked, skin was a tannish tint, and his eyes were brown. However when I looked up, he was glarring at me with a dark look upon his face. However the blonde man right next to him, swatted the back of his hand with his hand. Giving an audible slap sound. "No glaring at your new partner Tai" Speaking in an omniscient tone, as he gave him a warning look. The guy that must have been Tai nodded. The blonde man extended his hand out towards me, grabbing onto it he gave a firm hold on it as he swung me up. "EEEEP!" Those words came out of my mouth as I was now standing in place. The blonde man laughed at me joyfully. While Tai just kept silent behaving himself as he eyed me in a kind of weird way.

MsRetroGeek

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tsukiiinu
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PostPosted: Tue May 08, 2012 2:32 pm


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