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 Posted: Wed Mar 14, 2012 12:04 am
AMITYVILLE ACADEMY ENROLLMENT FORM Name: Catriona Maisie Moira McRae Nicknames: Cat, Kitten Gender: Female Age: 16 Faction: Demon Race: Cat SidheNatural Ability: Shapeshifting. She can shift into a rather large black cat with a white vaguely heart shaped spot on her chest. Personality Vain
Her appearance must be perfect before she leaves her room. If she's having a bad hair day, she will put her hair up in a bun and cover it with a scarf. She is always in dresses and heels, and will only wear pants if it's mandatory.
Curious
She wants to know everything about everything she possibly can. She does, however, know when she should and should not ask questions.
Ambitious
She wants to be the top of everything. She wants to be famous and good at what she does. She hasn't quite decided what her main goal in life is, other than to be comfortable while doing it, of course.
Organized
Everything she owns has a place, and everything is in its place. She absolutely hates when her things are disorganized and will always notice if something is out of place. This makes her a very precise person and she's careful about her work, especially schoolwork. She doesn't like to do things incorrectly, and will correct it whenever possible (even if it's just correcting it for herself).
Easily Angered
An only child, Catriona is used to getting her own way and she can be very quick to temper. Little things can set her off, like her things being out of place, or people constantly mispronounce things.
Hedonistic
She loves to be comfortable. But her kind of comfortable. For example, lush blankets, tons of pillows, and Egyptian cotton sheets on her bed. She enjoys every luxury she can possibly have. She's able to afford this because she comes from a fairly wealthy family. Her father inherited some money from his parents, then invested it and multiplied it several times for his family. QuirksShe HATES her middle names.
She will never speak them aloud and refuses to answer if called by her full name or just her middle names.
She hates when people mispronounce things.
And she has no problem correcting them. At all.
Has to sleep next to a wall.
Or something similar. She will toss and turn all night long and get no sleep unless she is pressed against the wall. Why are they enrolled in Amityville Academy? She wants to learn everything she can in order to become a successful demon. FEAR Ability: Swift Strikes - Her claws extend and she does her best to land cuts meant to weaken and/or distract her opponent. Physical Description: Eye Colour: Bright green Hair Colour/Style: Red, wavy, down to her hips. Skin Colour: PALE. Clothing Style/Colours: She prefers styles from the fifties, but with a gothic flair. She wears dresses with full skirts. She loves accessories with paw prints on it. Her favorite jacket to wear with the sleeveless dresses is a thin, lacy thing with a spiderweb pattern in the lace. Extra: She has delicate fangs in her upper jaw, small kitten ears, and a tail that's usually hidden beneath her skirts. References: Getting a ref <3
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Posted: Wed Mar 14, 2012 3:44 pm
References of AppearanceDress Styles[xXx]Patterns include flowers, polka dots, VERTICAL stripes, paw prints. Favorite Colors to Wear[xXx]Shoe Styles[xXx]Shoes will ALWAYS match her dress color. Hair Color[xXx]More red than black. Hair Style[xXx]To her hips. Eye Color[xXx]Skin Color[xXx]
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Posted: Wed Mar 14, 2012 5:49 pm
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Posted: Thu Mar 15, 2012 8:23 pm
Annnd this will be the open for crits post |D
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Posted: Wed Mar 21, 2012 10:44 am
Hallo! Some crit for you~ C: First of all, since I see you're a bit unsure, how about her FEAR? smile There's a guide with all the information on different types of FEAR, and the guide in general should explain a bit more about how FEAR attacks work and how they are used. The FEAR ability you already have seems fine - it could work with several types of FEAR as listed in that guide. For example, if you used Battle Cry (a standard damage-dealing attack), her FEAR ability might be: her claws grow longer and she delivers a single powerful swipe to her opponent. Or you could use Swift Strikes, which implies multiple hits - in that case, perhaps her claws grow longer and she surrounds her opponent in a flurry of angry cuts? If you have any questions on this, please feel free to ask in the Q&A thread here! Or you can quote me in response here and I can assist further~ whichever you're more comfortable with. smile Onward: focusing on her personality, I can see the outline of the character there! But at this point, it feels a bit... shallow, to me? In that there's a definite outline there, she has some good strong traits, but there's not a whole lot of depth. Still, I can see the potential! A few things I'm wondering about, the answers to which might help you deepen your character: - Why is she ambitious? Does she want power? Money (to support her hedonistic/luxurious lifestyle that she's accustomed to)? Fame and fame alone? What are her ambitions, specifically, or is she still looking for a solid life goal? - With her desire for organization and dislike of mispronunciation, she seems like a very precise person. Is she very careful and perfectionist in her work? What happens when she does something and it turns out less than perfect? - With her hedonism: how much luxury can she actually have? Is she from a wealthy background, and is used to having nice things as a way of life? Or are her comforts hard-won? Has she pulled herself up from a difficult life? Does she save up for nice things and control her finances tightly? I have the 'dots' of her personality: awesome! But if you connect them, she will grow and be more fully realized. smile
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Posted: Wed Mar 21, 2012 2:07 pm
Thanks so much for the crit! I added a little more to her personality and fixed her FEAR ability in regards to your suggestions, but I'm not sure that I added enough >.> So if you wouldn't mind looking her over with what I added, I'd appreciate it :3 Thanks again~!!
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Posted: Wed Mar 21, 2012 4:38 pm
Strawberri Stardust Thanks so much for the crit! I added a little more to her personality and fixed her FEAR ability in regards to your suggestions, but I'm not sure that I added enough >.> So if you wouldn't mind looking her over with what I added, I'd appreciate it :3 Thanks again~!! You're welcome! And there really is no threshold of 'enough' when it comes to personality! It's really subjective, of course, and your quest character will probably grow and change as you think about her more. Every so often the shop will have an event where quest characters can be actively roleplayed - I'd encourage you to join in the next time that happens! Keep an eye on the Event subforum here in the guild, and on the shop front page. smile As for her FEAR, seems fine! You can give your FEAR attack a special name if you'd like - for example, one of my characters has a Swift Strikes-type attack using scalpels, so I named it Scalpel Rain. Just a bit of added fun. XD
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Dragon Berri rolled 5 10-sided dice:
10, 2, 4, 5, 8
Total: 29 (5-50)
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Posted: Thu Apr 05, 2012 1:35 pm
For the Charms and Incense Class, Assignment One (I missed the first day, so Cat's doing her homework!) Catriona cursed her own bad habits as she stared at her desk. She'd missed the first day of Charms and Incense class, but was relieved to find she'd be able to make it up as homework. With a sigh, she read over the directions first. Work smart, not hard, she thought. It was something her parents always said, but they'd allowed her to do as she wanted for the most part. With nose twitching at the scent coming from her batch of ingredients, she set to work grinding them together. She let her mind wander as she did this, thinking about what kind of scent they would make together. Her family had never really done much with incense that she knew of, though the scent of rose petals made her think of the baths her mother liked to take. She would soak for hours in water covered over with rose petals, saying it made her skin smell delicious. Her father seemed to like it as well, though his own scent was closer to the vervain. Once she came to herself again, she realized she'd crushed the ingredients as far as they could possibly be crushed. Mixing the dust around a little she smirked, pleased with herself. Next was the add charcoal. She took a pinch of the black dust and sprinkled it in...then added another pinch. She supposed that would be enough, thinking perhaps so may ingredients would produce a strong scent that would be better off not lasting very long. Next came the Gum of Arabic, and she wrinkled her nose at the way it felt, but added what she thought to be an appropriate amount. She worked the mix in her fingers until it felt dry enough to her and she started bonding it to the incense stick. Lucky for her, it was just enough Gum and the mixture adhered to her stick. The last thing to do was wait. Ugh. Cleaning up her desk, she moved to her bed and curled up in the pillows with a book. Of course, she ended up falling asleep. Jerking awake sometime later, she checked her incense and decided it would be good enough. Tomorrow she would head to class and hope she hadn't missed too much... Step 1 Result: What Ingredients did you use? Batch one: Frankincense, Myrrh, Benzoin, Sandalwood, Cinnamon, Rose petals, Vervain, Rosemary, Bay What number did you roll? 10 Step 2 Result: What number did you roll? 2 Step 3 Result: What number did you roll? 4 Step 4 Result: What number did you roll? 5 Step 5 Result: What number did you roll? 8 Wasn't sure if I still needed to quote you here since I also linked it in the class thread, so I left it >.>
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