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Posted: Thu Feb 02, 2012 9:22 pm
Character Name: Sadira Dust Essence: Lotus Blossom Gender: Female Powers: Euphoria: biggrin efensive: The smell of a Lotus is said to be powerful enough that it sought after for both perfumes and candles. When Sadira is frightened, she is able to release a form of that scent. The air around her becomes heavy with a sweet fragrance that fills the senses of anyone close enough to inhale. Once in the person’s system, they begin to feel happy and joyful to the point of pure ecstasy. Sadira uses this as a chance to run.
Appearance: How does one describe the beauty of a flower? Sadira was born with a looks more commonly found in the Far East. White hair comes forth from her head and as it passes her shoulders, it begins to turn a soft pink. By the time it ends at her lower back, it has turned fully pink. Looking at her face, one would see a pair of soft golden eyes that blinked with child-like inexperience. Between them, her small nose and soft lips shaped like a little cupid’s bow. Her skin has a pink under glow that appears to soften her body as if looking at the petals of a lotus itself. Finally taking her body, one would see soft folds of fabric covering her modestly. The clothes would be seen as silk Chinese garb colored with pinks, whites, and accented in green. Coloring Inspiration: [x][x][x][x][x] Clothing Inspiration: [x][x][x][x]
Distinguishing Features: …
Personality: Shy, Perfectionist, Peaceful, Polite
Sadira’s soft appearance is matched by her quiet nature. The child dislikes loud noises or animated individuals so when she comes across someone that is full of energy, the little Lotus girl will run away and hide. Normally she wants to dive under a table or behind a basket but in situations where even such won’t make the bad noises go away; she will take to running down the streets in distress. Sera has had to run after her charge several times when events take place in the middle of town as Sadira does not pay attention to where she is going when in this state. What Sera has taken to doing is slowly trying to redirect Sadira’s anxiety. After noticing this a few times, she has taught the child to close her eyes whisper the something she learned after leaving home: I must not fear. Fear is the mind-killer. Fear is the little-death that brings total obliteration. I will face my fear. I will permit it to pass over me and through me. And when it has gone past I will turn the inner eye to see its path. Where the fear has gone there will be nothing. Only I will remain*
Yet if the tone has not reached its peak yet, Sadira does have a hidden bravery within that allows her to move between the two parties. The child wants peace in the world and has yet to understand that some people just cannot get along. She sometimes sees small debates as preludes to a fight and will step in the middle just to change the topic. Normally she won’t say anything but just look with sad eyes towards everyone. This causes her ‘mother’ a bit of embarrassment when she has to come up and politely remove Sadira. But her love of the girl keeps her from too much anger.
The one thing about the child Sera is more than grateful for is that this little girl does not seem to have the childhood desire to ask a thousand and one questions. Sure Sadira will look at her mother for clarity and sometimes even mumble a soft ‘What are they doing?’ but nothing loud, over the top, or annoying such as the endless strings of ‘why why why’.
That lack of a voice is rather worrisome though. Sadira is a quiet child not just out of fear of loud noises but just in general. She seems to speak more with her eyes and hands than the voice Sera knows is there. It makes a mother worry that her child might never speak of things she has seen or experienced and leaves her praying that nothing ever happens to the young girl for if it did, she might never gain a voice.
For all her quiet means and soft nature, there is one single moment that brings her out of the shell surround her. The child HATES a mess! Dirty, mud, dust and clutter seem to be her mortal enemy and she will rage a silent battle on them from dawn to dusk until the war has been won. Her ‘mother’ can already see signs of OCD cleaning starting to form. While she might be slightly worried about how it will develop, it does mean she never has to worry about the dishes being done after dinner.
*taken from Dune
Likes/Dislikes: Likes: Sweet Smells, Everything clean, Honey, Candles, Koi Fish Dislikes: Violence, Mud, Chaos, Tomatoes, Frogs, Darkness
Hobbies: Playing the Flute Arranging Flowers
Anything Else: Bottle Being Found: Sadira’s bottle will be found in the mud. Thrown like litter. Her guardian will find it and go to throw it away before finding that it had a soft, pink look to it. Something that just made her smile.
Name: Sera Alexander Age: 23 Gender: Female Description: Hair Color: Blonde – just above her shoulders Eye Color: Blue – large eyes Skin Color: Pale Tan Height: 5'5'' Weight: You ask...you die Attire: Depends on the day but she always has a gold and sapphire ring on her right hand
Personality: Sera is what one could call a jagged edged sword. Thought lovely to look at and admire, she is not an easy woman to get along with. Stubborn to a fault, a deep perfectionist, and just a tad bossy, she is not the type of woman people enjoy working for. However, her employers love what she does because they know that she won’t short change them on quality.
Don’t be mistaken though. Even if a stone glare can cause a grown man to shut his mouth, Sera does have her soft spots. The woman is one of the biggest animal lovers one can meet. She will fight any one if they wish to destroy a home of another living creature (other than people since that’s just business).
It should also be noted that Sera has a bit of a short fuse. Being a perfectionist making that fuse even shorter when it comes to her work. Slightly vain, she knows that being attractive can sell when talent fails.
History: Being the youngest of a very old fashion family never mixed well with Sera’s developing nature. She comes from parents who believed in the old saying ‘a woman is to be seen, not heard.’ Add to this to three older brothers, a workacholic carpenter of a father, and a mother whose only wish was for her daughter to bring wealth to their suffering and you have the makings of a final break down. Thirteen was the magic number.
It was on a rainy afternoon that Sera felt the last thread of patience snap within. She was tired of being bruised for things she could not do. Never once had her parents praised her for how clean she kept the siblings rooms. One could count on their left hand how many times she had been told she was loved under this roof. So with a bleeding left arm from where her mother’s own needles had stuck, Sera threw down the shirt she had been mending and stormed out of this house.
She would never speak about what happened to her from the time she was thirteen until eighteen but most thought she was dead. However, against all odds, she had found herself as a student to an architect. Top in her class and working small projects here and there, the now young woman had moved herself away from her family home. This was where work is more plentiful and she can be a woman, not a porcelain doll.
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Posted: Fri Feb 03, 2012 8:37 pm
Name: Sera Alexander Age: 23 Gender: Female Description: Hair Color: Blonde – just above her shoulders Eye Color: Blue – large eyes Skin Color: Pale Tan Height: 5'5'' Weight: You ask...you die Attire: Depends on the day but she always has a gold and sapphire ring on her right hand Profession: Architect
Personality: Sera is what one could call a jagged edged sword. Thought lovely to look at and admire, she is not an easy woman to get along with. Stubborn to a fault, a deep perfectionist, and just a tad bossy, she is not the type of woman people enjoy working for. However, her employers love what she does because they know that she won’t short change them on quality.
Don’t be mistaken though. Even if a stone glare can cause a grown man to shut his mouth, Sera does have her soft spots. The woman is one of the biggest animal lovers one can meet. She will fight any one if they wish to destroy a home of another living creature (other than people since that’s just business).
It should also be noted that Sera has a bit of a short fuse. Being a perfectionist making that fuse even shorter when it comes to her work. Slightly vain, she knows that being attractive can sell when talent fails.
History: Being the youngest of a very old fashion family never mixed well with Sera’s developing nature. She comes from parents who believed in the old saying ‘a woman is to be seen, not heard.’ Add to this to three older brothers, a workacholic carpenter of a father, and a mother whose only wish was for her daughter to bring wealth to their suffering and you have the makings of a final break down. Thirteen was the magic number.
It was on a rainy afternoon that Sera felt the last thread of patience snap within. She was tired of being bruised for things she could not do. Never once had her parents praised her for how clean she kept the siblings rooms. One could count on their left hand how many times she had been told she was loved under this roof. So with a bleeding left arm from where her mother’s own needles had stuck, Sera threw down the shirt she had been mending and stormed out of this house.
She would never speak about what happened to her from the time she was thirteen until eighteen but most thought she was dead. However, against all odds, she had found herself as a student to an architect. Top in her class and working small projects here and there, the now young woman had moved herself away from her family home. This was where work is more plentiful and she can be a woman, not a porcelain doll.
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Posted: Fri Feb 03, 2012 8:55 pm
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Posted: Wed May 02, 2012 11:04 am
Hi! I'm gonna give you a few crits for this now c:
The way you described the appearance is a bit abstract. I'd rather you describe her by features and not by saying that she has a natural beauty--since that is very much relative to the person looking at her. Does she have delicate, big eyes? Pouty lips? That sort of thing. I do really like the clothing inspiration very much! I can see those kinds of clothing really do fit her.
The powers of Sadira are quite general. I'd really like to see something specific to the essence that she has c: Like here, it speaks of the fragrance and effect the flower might have, even something connected to the lotus being very edible! And here, I read something about it opening and closing in reaction to the sun--and also you can play with the fact that the lotus flower actually prefers growing in lakes and ponds.
For the personality, I would also really like you to explore other facets of her character c: I understand she's very innocent and delicate save for the times that her sort-of-OCD comes out though. But yeah, I do want to know more about how she reacts to meeting people, befriending them, what are things she likes to do? And what if later on in her life--teen stage even, how would she handle a demon?
For the guardian--I don't really see much things to crit! I like the dynamic of the dust and Sera. And especially the fact that her family is very traditional in their views of women. I just want to know what she does for a living, and that's perfect c:
So yes, that's all for now, good luck! : D
and please quote me and chrystali when you want us to go over and approve this.
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Posted: Fri May 18, 2012 11:53 pm
Sorry for the delay but I gave Sadira the well needed overhaul. I think she is much better. ^_^ Hope you enjoy the powers
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Posted: Wed Jun 13, 2012 7:56 pm
Powers I'm going to have to say these wont stand for the lotus (the Defensive one can be worked with, but I wouldn't allow the tea leaves). It's not much of a problem as we're going to remove powers as a whole from the quest process, but I just wanted to let you know. C:
Appearance You don't have to change this now, but when you get your journal, I'd ask that you improvise on your wording. Phrases such as 'natural beauty' and 'lacking imperfection' shouldn't be used, nor should perceptive words like 'innocence' (in regards to describing something). I would suggest that you use your own power of words to describe what you think is natural beauty or lacking imperfection. For example, you could instead say 'Sadira was born with an exotic appearance from the far East' and 'Her skin has a pink underglow, giving her skin an opalescent sheen as smooth as a lotus petal.' Changing 'innocence' is as easy as describing why she's regarded as innocent, such as '...one would see soft golden eyes blinking with a youthful inexperience...'. Otherwise, I'm sure BP has plenty to work with. I think her hair is fabulous!
Personality I am ALL for personality changing with RP, but I'd like to note that the keywords you pick should be unmoving, permanent parts of her personality. The things you have listed seem pretty set in stone (IE, most people who are shy are like that their whole life, and perfectionists rarely settle for less in anything no matter what, etc), so I'm not sure what the note is for! Unless it's the descriptive part, but we don't expect that to stay the same! ;3
The running down the streets thing is a bit extreme, I think! I'd almost say her Guardian is subjecting her to torture if it's something so continual that it happens all the time! Rather than expressing something that would happen only a handful of times (I'd sincerely hope the Guardian would think of ways to help her child rather than ignore the problem!), I'd advise that you include some clever way that she will deal with the issue, something that can develop into a quirk in her personality or a nervous habit. For example, maybe Sera teaches her a song to focus on when she feels anxious and now, she hums the song and squeezes her eyes shut when she's nervous, trying to block out the sounds. Something like that. C:
The second paragraph -- well, I have to point out that this is true of almost anyone. It's not unusual to try and seek peace or to step outside of one's comfort zone for a greater purpose, so you don't need to tell us that she'd do that in that position. Someone who is shy but can be outgoing in the right situation, or who doesn't like loud noises but will brave them to stop fighting, is kind of what we'd expect out of most individuals. It's only really worth noting if she wouldn't do what is normal and morally right. You demonstrated that excellently with her tendency towards silence and not pestering with questions. >v<
I love the cleaning quirk. I find that adorable and can imagine her clearly stomping through the house if Sera tracked in mud on a rainy day and stubbornly cleaning each muddy foot step in serious silence. XD
Likes, Dislikes, Hobbies, Other These are find and can obviously be expanded on as she gains experience. >v< I really like how her bottle will be found!
Guardian Sera's info is all fine~
Overall, I'd say all I'd like to see fixed is a few things in the personality section and the wording issue/powers will be worked out when you get your Dust. C: Let us know when you've updated the information and we'll give you another go! <3
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Posted: Sat Jun 16, 2012 9:07 pm
Those powers gave me issues....but from what I have seen, sounds like everyone has problems....<3 I decided to work a bit more on the appearance. Each place is different and I know so shops like more abstract while others more details in it for the artist. Maybe this is better? BP had asked me questions about her dealing with later run in with demons. That's why I had it there. ^_^ Very cleaver idea. I was trying to get the nerves across but didn't think of that. *writes in solution and development* I left the second paragraph because I wasn't sure if you meant I should take it out or not.... Hope it's better. heart
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Posted: Sat Jun 16, 2012 9:08 pm
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Posted: Sun Jun 17, 2012 10:09 am
Ah, I understand! Yeah I just (personally) feel that descriptions are so much more powerful when we can actually spell out beauty without using the word itself. :9 It's not a make-or-break deal so it's no worry. >v
Oh okay! I should have probably read her crits too, ahahaha. /guiltyface
Yesssss~ I understood she was scared/the nerves were in play but I still wanted to see how you'd handle the situation. /sneakybastard/ And what you did is lovely, so no qualms there!
And no need to take it out, it was more like an observation. :9 You CAN take it out though and your description wont be any less for it, though. C:
ALRIGHT. I'll say this quest is approved and talk with BP to make sure. I'll change the title and lock the thread if she agrees! Congratulations!
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Posted: Sun Jun 17, 2012 10:14 am
Thank you Chrystali!
For being as sneaky as you are, I value the crits!!!
<3
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