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Lilbabe808

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PostPosted: Fri Aug 12, 2011 6:05 am


Race: Human
Stage: Witchling
Gender: Female
User ImageBiography: Asti doesn't know who her real parents are. She was given to a widowed woman who had been a former teacher at Makai Royal Academy named Serafina Goldfluff. So Serafina took her in and raised her as if it were her own daughter since she herself had never had any children. As soon as Asti was old enough to understand, Serafina told her the story of how Asti came in her care and why they didn't share the same last name.

Serafina had sat down in her favorite chair. It was a very antique looking rocking chair made of a red colored wood, she did not know what type of wood. Asti had seated herself in front of Serafina, looking up with curiosity at the woman she had come to call Mama Sera. Serafina had smiled softly down at her before starting.

"It was on a night with no moon. The air was crisp and cold because it was winter time. A knock sounded on my door. I had wondered who it could be. It was so late at night that at first I didn't get up to look. But the knocks began to sound frantic so I decided that it must be very important. Little did I know it would be one of the most important decisions of my life." She had brushed her withered fingers along the top of Asti's head then.

"There was a woman in a black cloak, so black that it seemed to blend in with the night. I couldn't discern any features on her face except for those eyes, those eyes like blue flame. I believe that woman was your mother because your eyes are almost like hers. She had whispered to me to take you and quite suddenly, shoved your little form wrapped in a thick black blanket into my arms. The only other thing she told me was that your last name was to be Jager. You know, I've heard of Jager's before but they were Witch Eaters so I think perhaps she was unrelated to them. Not to worry, my dear, you are not a majin." Asti's face had been one of disbelief and horror that she may be a majin. But Serafina had reassured her that she was a human.

"Of course, I agreed to take you in. How could I deny a baby? I would have asked her more but she disappeared into the night. It was only after she was gone that I noticed the blood stains outside my doorway. I've never seen her again or heard from her. It is my greatest fear that she has passed away but I am sure that no matter where she is, she is happy that she left you with me." Asti had cried then. She would most likely never know her real parents and the story, her story, had made her quite sad. Serafina had rocked her in the chair till she had fallen asleep.

Mama Sera raised Asti with a lot of love and patience. It was evident that Mama believed she would go to Makai when the time came and was overjoyed when she discovered her voice. Asti has a voice that is incredibly beautiful and she has a big range. Mama Sera encouraged her to sing and practice and become better. All the while, she would instruct Asti in enchanting, Mama Sera's specialty and what she taught at Makai. Now that the time has come for Asti to go to Makai. Mama Sera couldn't be anymore proud of her adopted daughter and is glad she lives in the town around the Academy since it will allow easier visitations.

Ability Concetration/Theme: Asti has a hypnotic voice. She is very good at singing and if she puts in the effort, she can affect others with her voice. Of course, being so young, she's only been able to affect small creatures. Mostly it just attracted the animals to her and not much else. To people, her voice just sounds really nice. Her mama has been working with her on her enchanting abilities and thinks it will help with her developing her natural abilities with her voice.

Visual References: Asti has very long, straight, lavender #e17df0 colored hair. It falls all the way to her hips. She has a small braid on each side. She has blue #0055e8 eyes and wears white stockings.

Everything else, I leave up to the artist.

Art by ATh e a r t
PostPosted: Fri Aug 12, 2011 6:19 am


Personality: ✤ Kind/Caring
Asti is a very kind and caring person because that is how Mama Sera is and she looks up to Mama as if she were the sun and the moon. She is never mean to someone even if they are mean to her and always helps others when she can.

✤ Trusting
Most of her life, Asti was surrounded with really nice people including Mama Sera. Mama's friends would come to visit and rather than play with the other kids, she liked to play in the house and listen to the old women talk with each other. This caused her to be very trusting of people older than her. This only applies to those older than her by about 5 years or more. She just naturally believes that older people are to be trusted at their word. Of course, if one is mean to her from the start, she won't go on trusting them.

✤ Impulsive
Asti can be impulsive when it comes to things that she wants. Whenever Mama Sera would take her shopping, instead of thinking a choice through, she would get the first thing that caught her interest. This affects a lot of aspects of her everyday life like what book she'll read next, a new recipe to try, or what material she'll use to sew a stuffed animal.

✤ Slightly anti-social
Asti can be a little anti-social when it comes to her peers. It's not that she goes out of the way to avoid social situations. It's more like she just doesn't go out of the way to be social. If someone talks to her, then she'll have a conversation with them but she definitely won't start it. If someone asks her a question, she'll answer but she won't try to ask them questions.

✤ Disciplined
Despite Asti's impulsiveness on making decisions, once her mind is made up, she becomes very disciplined on finishing that task. Once she starts cooking, she won't get distracted by other things and will keep working till she is finished. This is what allows her to finish a book in a day because she may not put it down while eating or doing other necessary things.

Hobbies and Interests: ✤ Reading
Mama Sera had always pushed Asti to read at least two books a year. It wasn't until she turned 12 that she really started to enjoy reading books. After that, her reading speed improved to the point that she could read a book in a day if she wanted to.

✤ Cooking
Asti enjoys cooking and always helps Mama Sera in preparing meals. She likes to try new recipes and finds it fulfilling when others enjoy her food.

✤ Singing
To say that singing is something that Asti does would be a lie. Singing is Asti. Her voice is a part of her and singing comes so naturally to her that it's like growing hair, she doesn't think about it, it just happens.

✤ Sewing
Asti learned how to sew from Mama Sera and she finds it very relaxing. She isn't too brilliant at it but she's good enough. For the most part, she just makes pillows and stuffed animals. Clothes are a little too advanced for her.

Likes and Dislikes:
+ Shopping
+ Animals (real and stuffed)
+ Swimming (this is a leisurely thing not a hobby)
+ Listening to stories
+ Sunny days

- Bugs
- Animal cruelty
- Being cold
- Being teased
- Witch Eaters

Plans for Asti: I hope that she'll be able to become a better singer and use the power of her voice. I plan to slowly get her out of her shyness shell and be more open.

Lilbabe808

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Lilbabe808

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PostPosted: Fri Aug 12, 2011 9:19 pm


Okay, I finished editing and she should be finished. Any help, suggestions, or questions are welcome!
PostPosted: Mon Aug 15, 2011 5:17 am


Bump! heart

Lilbabe808

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Dakka Domi

PostPosted: Mon Aug 15, 2011 9:01 am


hiii. now, I'm no expert at critiquing, but allow me to put in my two cents.

A few facets of her personality seem like they're conflicting. If she's shy and has a hard time around people, it seems a bit odd that she would be a trusting person. Wouldn't her anxiety at meeting strangers give her a hard time with taking them at their word?

At the same time, if she's shy and introverted, is she self-conscious? I know that the majority of people I know who are shy around people are introverted, and have difficulties doing things in public like shopping. It seems to me like the impulsiveness would be an odd facet of her personality, because it would conflict with her fear if, say, the cashier looked a little intimidating. It might even conflict with her caring nature if she laid eyes on some incredibly pricey item that she'd ask Mama Sera to buy for her.

now, these are just some suggestions on my part. If you think I'm full of it and totally just misreading your character, you may want to try filling out the personality section a bit more to clear up the ways her personality applies to various situations in life. It doesn't have to be perfect, but if there's one thing I've learned, it's that you want it all to mesh, and right now, it seems like you have four very disparate personality facets all thrown together into one person.
PostPosted: Mon Aug 15, 2011 12:42 pm


Dakka Domi

Thanks for that advice! I'll go over her personality and see if I can clarify it a bit more. I see where you're coming from and what you mean, so if it still doesn't mesh well, then I'll just change it.

Lilbabe808

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Lilbabe808

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PostPosted: Mon Aug 15, 2011 1:06 pm


Okay, I've changed Asti's personality a bit. I hope her personality traits mesh better now.
PostPosted: Tue Aug 16, 2011 6:08 am


Still here! If anyone would like to leave a crit, feel free to. ^^

Lilbabe808

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Lilbabe808

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PostPosted: Wed Aug 17, 2011 12:29 pm


Good night bump.
PostPosted: Thu Aug 18, 2011 7:37 am


Good night bump.

Lilbabe808

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Lilbabe808

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PostPosted: Fri Aug 19, 2011 11:35 am


Good night bump!
PostPosted: Tue Aug 23, 2011 4:34 am


Bump! Crits please!

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PostPosted: Thu Aug 25, 2011 2:34 am


Bump! heart
PostPosted: Sat Aug 27, 2011 7:12 am


Good night bump! heart

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PostPosted: Wed Sep 07, 2011 3:01 pm


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