Hello bunny!
Congratulations on getting that amazing custom, Hopeite is really cute. There's a few things I feel need to be worked on before she can be stamped though.
As a minor note though, you may want to consider changing your font to be the standard size as some people have difficulty reading smaller text. There's also a quite a few grammatical errors. I suggest you read through your profile aloud to yourself once, and that'll likely help you. Or alternatively you may want to ask a friend to proof-read it for you. I know I make a lot of typos and such myself, and reading things over carefully later you'll probably notice errors you can't believe you made. Proofing will just help give it more flow.
On to actual crits! Which I think I'll do by section.
Hobbies:
-Thrifting is fine! No real issue for me there.
-Tobacco: My only issue here really is the fact you say that Abbott picked up the hobby because she thought it was cool, and yet she thinks teenagers who do it to be 'cool' aren't. That's pretty hypocritical. Although that could easily be fixed if Abbott had hypocritical as a flaw. Can you perhaps say why Abbott thinks smoking is cool, and why someone who is picking it up for the same reasons she did might not be?
-Coffee Shop Bands: This is a neat hobby, and I just think it needs a little bit more explanation. Is there a real reason that Abbott likes listening to coffee shop bands (I'm going to assume acoustic guitar type bands) over other local bands that might play at a bar? If she likes both, you might want to rename the hobby 'Indie Music Scene/Lover' or something like that. Does Abbott like these bands because few people have heard of them and their not main stream?
-I really like the Blog hobby! Does she have one of her own? What type of blogs does she read (personal? celebrity? fashion? diy? cooking? tv/movie?)
Virtues:
I find both Hard Working and Independent to be very harshly worded. I realize that these are traits which would normally be considered virtues, but the way you describe them is quite negative. They both involve how Abbott thinks she's superior to others (mostly independent though, however saying she thinks 'lazy people should just die' is pretty negative). Try to cut back on the negative aspects of those traits, since you already have the mirror-versions in flaws! What makes it GOOD that Abbott is independent? Right now Independent reads entirely as a flaw.
Friendly also needs a bit of work, especially since I feel that Friendly is conflicting with Selfish. These two traits can appear together, but I need to hear more about them. Friendly implies to me someone that is caring, and seeks to make friends. Sociable seems like a better fit. So you could say something like "Abbott is not shy when it comes to interacting with new people or making small talk." Then explain how or why that is.
Since you have 3 virtues and 4 flaws, you should consider either adding another virtue or removing a flaw to keep them balanced!
Flaws:
Workaholic: Conversely the problem you have with virtues, this flaw doesn't sound flaw-ish enough! At least not to me. You should explain how her workaholic/hard-working nature is a hindrance to her! Does she often miss out on fun things like going out with friends? Does she get so wrapped up in working she forgets to have regular meals? Why is working hard a problem? Gotta know this!
Ego/Perfectionist/Selfish seem fine to me. Selfish might need another couple sentences to define how that works with her friendly virtue. Is she unapologetic about it? What about friends and family, does she budge a bit for them? To what degree is she selfish? If she was out christmas shopping, would she spend as little as possible on gifts for others and use the rest of her money to buy things for herself?
Powered Form:
The progression of Hopeite's weapon doesn't make that much sense to me. You're going from a cigarette ( a cylindrical shape with a burning edge) to a small sword... to a bigger sword that's hot?
It's the captain stage just doesn't make much sense to me! And you need to be careful about having sharp/pointy weapons at that stage. Your captain weapon should be a moderate step up from the Lt. instead of a giant leap! My suggestion for a captain weapon would be a
fire-poker with a lightly hot end, like a cigarette, or perhaps a staff. Then for the general stage you can advance to a real sword (or perhaps something more slender like a spear, perhaps a
halberd, which has a similar shape to a poker) that has a burning sensation or feeling!