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 Posted: Sun Jul 10, 2011 9:01 am
{{ Quest: Witch Eater }}
{{ Status: Closed - Finished and Moved to Journal }}
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Posted: Sun Jul 10, 2011 12:59 pm
Race: Majin
Stage: Witch Eater
Gender: Female
Ability Concentration/Theme: Lightning. However, for some reason her lightning comes out black, instead of the expected blinding white. It's possible that it's because she's Majin, however, Rosel thinks it's likely a manifestation of her inner self: forbidding, violent, and dark.
Visual References: First incarnation (years and years ago), latest incarnation
Song: Danzig - Mother
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Posted: Sun Jul 10, 2011 1:08 pm
Biography: Unable to conceive, Rosel's parents turned to a dark witch to force conception. Nine months later, a bouncing baby girl with eerie green eyes was born. Her family was a wealthy one, on the outskirts of Moonfall. Despite their desperation to have a child, the Rosel was all but estranged from her parents, growing up with tutors and maids. She had great talent, which, in the eyes of her tutors, overshadowed the darker qualities ripening in her psyche. In addition to the electrical shocks she could produce, Rosel discovered she could draw energy from those around her, primarily her tutors. When she finally left for Makai, she left her tutors as doddering, wasted, old men. As was expected of her, she was well read by the time she left, and knew perfectly well what she was.
She learned her first year that she could not hide her violent tendencies behind her talent, and by the time she graduated, had learned that craft and deception were better disguises. It was after her graduation that her parents finally stepped back into her life and asked that she do the "proper" thing and marry. The knowledge that a rich husband would keep her from needing to find employment was one of the few reasons Rosel deigned to accept an offer from another wealthy family connected to her own. The man in question was weak and simpering, and after the years of academia, the notion of ruling her own household appealed.
What she didn't expect was that the house was already under the strict rule of new husband's grandmother, a powerful witch of forceful character, even in her old age. The grandmother didn't take kindly to the young Rosel trying to usurp her power, and the household was a volatile one. Underhanded insults turned into threats, and people were less than surprised when Rosel's wing of the house went up in flames one night.
Servants reported hearing raised voices between the grandmother and Rosel, then a strange sound like the sharp break of a length of wood. When the flames were finally under control, both the grandmother's and Rosel's husband's bodies were beyond recognition. Rosel herself escaped, by nothing short of a miracle, some said.
Rosel's parents sent flowers. Rosel burned them and left the remains of her erstwhile home, now a widow...and an heiress.
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Posted: Sun Jul 10, 2011 2:36 pm
Personality: Secretive and extremely prickly, Rosel draws a very hard line between 'acquaintances' and 'friends'. Her first thought upon meeting anyone is how she could possibly benefit from knowing them, even if only to discreetly feed on them. She'll rarely enter into a full conversation unless she feels some kind of connection, meaning you are either of some use to her, or have shown an affinity for her kind of darkness. Her family ties are nonexistent at this point, and are not something she's seen evidence of needing to regret.
She has no qualms about lashing out at someone that's made her angry, but will be underhanded about it if open violence will draw attention to herself. There's a sadistic streak in her that's usually taken out on insects and pests, though if she's feeling particularly nasty, she'll lure in a thief or two. After graduation from Makai and the incident with her in-laws, she's yet to find herself in a situation over her head. Whether this is due to her power and willingness to resort to extreme violence, or sheer luck, remains to be seen.
On the bright side, she loves shiny things. Her beautiful clothing and jewelery were lost in the fire, and while she's given in a couple times to buy a dress or diamonds, she can't ignore the practicality of dressing down. She has great fun defending herself against thieves, but the novelty wears off if she has to do it all the time. Traveling gives her plenty of novelty in itself, and she has a weakness for stopping into seedy bars to mingle with the lowlifes that are occasionally just as twisted as she is.
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Posted: Wed Jul 13, 2011 3:27 pm
Love the reasoning behind the black lightning; very cool.
You have a great background; very thorough and I liked reading it.
BUT.
You have a very long, nicely detailed background.
And a very teeny, tiny personality blurb.
IF YOU'VE SEEN ALADDIN:
"PHOENOMINAL COSMIC POWERRRR"
SO YEAH. I'd like to see more expansion on her personality. You say she doesn't make friends easily; does she just distrust most people on principle?
I can't really say much, because there's not really anything to go on, except the negative traits. Does she have any positive traits?
tl;dr > more personality, less background.
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Posted: Sat Jul 23, 2011 9:44 am
Very belated thanks for the crit, Kuro! You're totally right, I have a tendency to write very extensive backgrounds to compensate for the fact that I hate writing personality blurbs >_<
I've cut down her background, and actually changed it a bit. On rereading, it didn't seem fair to me that Rosel got to skip out on Makai, so she's a former student now. Referring to the murder of the grandmother, I tried to make it less blatant that she's the killer, since she's the only one who really knows what happened that night. The crack of wood is actually the crack of a lightning bolt, and it seems obvious to me, but then again I'm the one who wrote it.
Anyway, thanks again for your critique!
Edit: I'm calling this chickadee done. Don't have a complete grasp on her personality yet, but enough of one to start roleplaying and really figure her out.
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