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Holy Amati

PostPosted: Sat Jun 25, 2011 8:43 pm


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An Espeon is extremely loyal to any trainer it considers to be worthy. It is said to have developed precognitive powers to protect its trainer from harm.

Character Name: Fasha

Type: Pokemon

Species: Espeon

Gender: Male

Height: 5'6

Age: 23

Hair Color: Lavender, streaked with dark blue (inside of ears)

Eye Color: Royal Purple

Skin Color: Pale Caucasian

Other: A circular red gem in the center of his forehead, clean shaved, Espeon tail ^-^ It would be awesome if he had silver rings in his ear cartiledge

Nature: Mild

Ability: Synchronize

Skill Set:
.....Psychic
.....Swift
.....Reflect
.....Morning Sun

Personality:
Positive

Loyal: Like many Espeon, Fasha is a fiercely loyal creature, his Psychic powers actually stemming from a desire to protect his Trainer from future threats. He actually runs the Psychic shop for his Trainer, who was injured and is unable to Train actively anymore. He will never be parted from his Trainer, or any that he so chooses to dedicate himself to, but he won't pledge himself lightly, as he'd gladly give his life for those that have been chosen.

Composed: Fasha is always composed, and nothing seems to surprise him or catch him off guard. This has been carefully cultivated to appear completely natural, and indeed it has rather become part of his personality. Part of this always-composed trait comes from the fact that he is a psychic - he always has a general idea of what's coming at him. As such, he appears unshakable and always well in-control of himself and his emotions, no matter what the situation throws at him.

Neutral

Honest: While this may seem like a positive trait, with Fasha, its not necessarily so. While he will never tell a falsehood, he may also not tell someone everything he has discovered. If asked his opinion on a topic he finds distasteful, he's more likely to simply avoid the topic than say his true feelings, should they be offensive. Basically, he'd rather say nothing than say something that isn't true, especially with the intention to flatter or manipulate. Only if angered or severely irritated will he let his feelings out honestly and not dodge the topic.

Negative

Vain: Fasha is rather vain, always worried about his appearance and quite the pretty boy. He is definitely one to hold a grudge against anyone that helps to ruin an outfit of his, especially if it was preventable. He is always impeccably clean, which is a good thing, but anyone not admiring his good looks gets on his bad side. He refuses to do any task that may dirty him, or that he feels he is improperly dressed for. He'll take hours to get ready for a special event, but at least he's always stunning.

Egotistical The world doesn't revolve around the sun, or anything other than Fasha, for that matter. Anything happening in his world was either directed at him (rain ruining an outfit, for example, is the world being against him), or happened because of him (he predicted it, thus, it happened). He loves being the center of attention because, face it, he's the center of everything! His ego is so large, he could probably cover all of Entra with ease x.x

Strengths: honest, loyal, steadfast

Weaknesses: vain, egotistical

History:
Fasha started with his Trainer as a little Eevee, with the capability of turning into one of many different Pokemon. Unlike some trainers, Fasha's Trainer was letting his Pokemon decide what he wanted to be. For the longest time, Fasha didn't really have a preference; as long as he had his Ben, he didn't really care. One day, after Ben got him a massage, he was so happy to see him again that he evolved on the spot into the Psychic-type, Espeon. Ben was overjoyed, as Fasha was his only Pokemon and they had finally achieved something noticeable together.

They continued on their journeys, traveling and battling and sightseeing, Fasha keeping them mainly out of trouble. Still, sometimes it's the things that are least expected that cause the biggest problems. Ben was visiting with family, with Fasha in the day care for the day so he could relax, when Ben was in a freak car accident, making him a paraplegic. Fasha was beside himself in the day care, but what could he do? Ben's mother came to get him once Ben was stable in the hospital, and upon seeing his beloved friend barely unable to move from the waist down, he simply had to find a way to help him.

Thankfully the hospital allowed Pokemon, so Fasha was able to stay by Ben's side all night, every night. Still, Fasha knew that once they left the hospital, their life would be very different. He wished he could help Ben more, that he could be his legs and fetch things for him. Ben's family was having trouble paying the medical bills, and things looked glum all around. That night, he had a strange dream in which a Musharna came to him, asking him what his greatest desire was. His immediate answer was, "To be able to help Ben." Even if it meant being human? Well, he'd be much more helpful to Ben as a human than an Espeon.

An espeon had fallen asleep at his Trainer's side that night, and the next morning, a Gijinka was at Ben's side, as loyal and faithful as always, ready to help his partner in this new life they had ahead of them.
PostPosted: Mon Jun 27, 2011 4:25 pm


Immediate concern... "Telling the future" is considered god-moding. A psychic pokemon possesses psychic attacks but they cannot be all-knowing. I would encourage you to reconsider this strength or revise it, the alternative is to replace it with another that's more suitable.

With that in mind you'll have to look more closely at the "honest" trait as it implies his ability to tell the future is genuine in that respect. There's nothing to stop him withholding information as a tarot reader etc as they can read cards, see the meaning and then decide if they want to explain it. The rest of the 'honest' trait is fine though, if you removed the fortune telling completely it would still be completely reasonable as a neutral trait.

In terms of his history - this is done well, it clarifies why Fasha wants to be a Gijinka while being clear and concise. I don't have any immediate remarks on this bit!

Epine de Rose


Holy Amati

PostPosted: Tue Jun 28, 2011 3:58 pm


Oh, I had never meant it as he'd be all-knowing. The idea in my head was that he could see glimpses of what would/could happen in the immediate future, enough to seem legit, but not really being all-knowing. Still, I went ahead and revised that bit. I was thinking "Future Sight" when they anticipate an attack, what, two turns in advance? But it'll still work. I'll have to do some research on tarot cards and the like once he's approved so he can ply his trade accurately ^-^
PostPosted: Sun Jul 10, 2011 2:18 am


Personality:
Several times you use 'absolute traits' Never, always. People will never always act or react with absolutes completely 100% all the time. |D re-word these, and provide some examples of exceptions.

The way egotistical trait is written runs counter to his history and the personality I see in that. Also it runs counter to why he became human if the first place. To care for another being.

History: Fine, maybe add more to how they are living life now as two humans, did their relationship change? You mentioned a store. how does that fit in? Try writing a bit on how they lived after.


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