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Posted: Thu Feb 03, 2011 10:47 am

So. Zane challenged me to a contest of darkness. This is the thread for it. Zane will post his work as I will post mine, and you my mad friends will be the judge smile

Posted: Sat Feb 05, 2011 10:18 am

shinigamithekidd

So. Zane challenged me to a contest of darkness. This is the thread for it. Zane will post his work as I will post mine, and you my mad friends will be the judge smile

The winner shall be named the true Prince Of Darkness and may the best man win so vote truely either the baby god Shini or Zane "Dark Prince" Caline (Shini lets have fun wink )

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Posted: Sat Feb 05, 2011 10:53 am

Bleeding out the eyes
But I will never cry
Listening to lies
But I see through your clever disguise
I will never die
This is your surprise
Im headhunting
Like a sniper im scoping
Words like bulllets
My mind just keeps reloading
Your body I rip open
Gouging out your eyes
Tearing out your spine
There is no god behind you
Becuase I tore down the heavens
I Killed earth in one day
Were it took god seven
Just to make it
Ill erase it
Never fake it
I will take it
Then I'll shake it
Like an hour glass
And when the ask what happend
You'll say why'd you have to ask
Zane took it
Then he shook it
Wrang it out
Then unhooked it
And when they ask what
You'll just say
My life of course
I'm just the prey
That stops an pray
To be saved
From the Predator
I AM ZANE
Listen up
I'm your king
And during my rein
I will treat earth life
Like a football game
Nothing but Names and Numbers
Clash of the titans
Ringing out like thunder
And everytime I speak
Boy my voice just Sunders
Make you wonder
Were the darkness came
Well heres the story
Of Tiger Zane
I let the darkness play games
From the shadows
They will call your name
Then shoot out from
Under your bed
As you start to shake and shiver
Bottom lips will quiver
And They will watch and ask
"Are you afraid of the dark"
Like the ghost of
Chrismas past
They will drag you under
Burn your flesh off
Like a Poisin Ivy Rash
Bash your skull in
Just for a little cash
Boy I run the under
Worlds of earth
While you stay
At home all safe
In the night
Secret fights
To the death
When at best
And terrible
Things can happend
If you let
Your gaurd down
Around the darkest
Parts of town
In the night
To my delight
I participate
In these fight
And I kill
For what little
You would steal
If you get the call
You must come
Because you can never run
We will only follow
Theres no escape
Shini Loseing
To me is just your FATE
-ZANE CALINE > wink YOUR MOVE SHINI

Posted: Sat Feb 05, 2011 5:35 pm

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shinigamithekidd

So. Zane challenged me to a contest of darkness. This is the thread for it. Zane will post his work as I will post mine, and you my mad friends will be the judge smile

The winner shall be named the true Prince Of Darkness and may the best man win so vote truely either the baby god Shini or Zane "Dark Prince" Caline (Shini lets have fun wink )

There can only be once prince of darkness and that good sirs is Ozzy f****ing Osbourne lol

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Posted: Sat Feb 05, 2011 6:59 pm

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shinigamithekidd

So. Zane challenged me to a contest of darkness. This is the thread for it. Zane will post his work as I will post mine, and you my mad friends will be the judge smile

The winner shall be named the true Prince Of Darkness and may the best man win so vote truely either the baby god Shini or Zane "Dark Prince" Caline (Shini lets have fun wink )

There can only be once prince of darkness and that good sirs is Ozzy f****ing Osbourne lol

im darker then ozzy he even admited it at his last concert but i give you probs ozzys fckin amazing lol

Posted: Sun Feb 06, 2011 7:10 am

Zane Gray 305

Bleeding out the eyes
But I will never cry
Listening to lies
But I see through your clever disguise
I will never die
This is your surprise
Im headhunting
Like a sniper im scoping
Words like bulllets
My mind just keeps reloading
Your body I rip open
Gouging out your eyes
Tearing out your spine
There is no god behind you
Becuase I tore down the heavens
I Killed earth in one day
Were it took god seven
Just to make it
Ill erase it
Never fake it
I will take it
Then I'll shake it
Like an hour glass
And when the ask what happend
You'll say why'd you have to ask
Zane took it
Then he shook it
Wrang it out
Then unhooked it
And when they ask what
You'll just say
My life of course
I'm just the prey
That stops an pray
To be saved
From the Predator
I AM ZANE
Listen up
I'm your king
And during my rein
I will treat earth life
Like a football game
Nothing but Names and Numbers
Clash of the titans
Ringing out like thunder
And everytime I speak
Boy my voice just Sunders
Make you wonder
Were the darkness came
Well heres the story
Of Tiger Zane
I let the darkness play games
From the shadows
They will call your name
Then shoot out from
Under your bed
As you start to shake and shiver
Bottom lips will quiver
And They will watch and ask
"Are you afraid of the dark"
Like the ghost of
Chrismas past
They will drag you under
Burn your flesh off
Like a Poisin Ivy Rash
Bash your skull in
Just for a little cash
Boy I run the under
Worlds of earth
While you stay
At home all safe
In the night
Secret fights
To the death
When at best
And terrible
Things can happend
If you let
Your gaurd down
Around the darkest
Parts of town
In the night
To my delight
I participate
In these fight
And I kill
For what little
You would steal
If you get the call
You must come
Because you can never run
We will only follow
Theres no escape
Shini Loseing
To me is just your FATE
-ZANE CALINE > wink YOUR MOVE SHINI

You still the exceptional and unique writer that I knew, zane.
I think this challenge is an interesting one.... Good luck on you, both, shini and zane.. Whatever you'll come up with, I think you both are doing your best. May the best man wins. ^_^

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Posted: Mon Feb 07, 2011 5:59 am

*clears throat* For this piece, which by the way I am writing on the spot right now. I will use the epic/freeverse writing style made popular by homer...

Posted: Mon Feb 07, 2011 6:09 am

Darkness looms... Like a forbidden cloak
one wrapped around the confines
of this place they locked me.
Days, weeks, years all seems the same
when your locked with scarce food, little water
"for the good of our people"
they would say
"he is unfit to live"
others would bark
but they just dont understand.
The fatal attraction to watch the blood
trickle down, pale virgin skin
without a care, without a thought
another death that I have brought
one of 7 under my belt, one of 3 they found
they call me insane, a mad man
An artist of our time
painting in the blood of my victims
with my fingers
with my fingers...these fingers..
wrapped around her throat...
watching the life pass...slowly...
like sleep that comes over the children..
so many children...so much blood...
Thats were they found me and I wait
I wait for capital punishment to treat me just...
metal clanks...doors open...every day in this tower..
metal on stone assures me the blade will cut sweet
maybe they will use my own..to paint a mural...a mural..
of me...

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Posted: Mon Feb 07, 2011 7:56 am

Zane Gray 305

Bleeding out the eyes
But I will never cry
Listening to lies
But I see through your clever disguise
I will never die
This is your surprise
Im headhunting
Like a sniper im scoping
Words like bulllets
My mind just keeps reloading
Your body I rip open
Gouging out your eyes
Tearing out your spine
There is no god behind you
Becuase I tore down the heavens
I Killed earth in one day
Were it took god seven
Just to make it
Ill erase it
Never fake it
I will take it
Then I'll shake it
Like an hour glass
And when the ask what happend
You'll say why'd you have to ask
Zane took it
Then he shook it
Wrang it out
Then unhooked it
And when they ask what
You'll just say
My life of course
I'm just the prey
That stops an pray
To be saved
From the Predator
I AM ZANE
Listen up
I'm your king
And during my rein
I will treat earth life
Like a football game
Nothing but Names and Numbers
Clash of the titans
Ringing out like thunder
And everytime I speak
Boy my voice just Sunders
Make you wonder
Were the darkness came
Well heres the story
Of Tiger Zane
I let the darkness play games
From the shadows
They will call your name
Then shoot out from
Under your bed
As you start to shake and shiver
Bottom lips will quiver
And They will watch and ask
"Are you afraid of the dark"
Like the ghost of
Chrismas past
They will drag you under
Burn your flesh off
Like a Poisin Ivy Rash
Bash your skull in
Just for a little cash
Boy I run the under
Worlds of earth
While you stay
At home all safe
In the night
Secret fights
To the death
When at best
And terrible
Things can happend
If you let
Your gaurd down
Around the darkest
Parts of town
In the night
To my delight
I participate
In these fight
And I kill
For what little
You would steal
If you get the call
You must come
Because you can never run
We will only follow
Theres no escape
Shini Loseing
To me is just your FATE
-ZANE CALINE > wink YOUR MOVE SHINI

No offense but i think this is more gorey then dark. darkness is about more then death.

Posted: Mon Feb 07, 2011 3:55 pm

Furrie Princess Nala

Zane Gray 305

Bleeding out the eyes
But I will never cry
Listening to lies
But I see through your clever disguise
I will never die
This is your surprise
Im headhunting
Like a sniper im scoping
Words like bulllets
My mind just keeps reloading
Your body I rip open
Gouging out your eyes
Tearing out your spine
There is no god behind you
Becuase I tore down the heavens
I Killed earth in one day
Were it took god seven
Just to make it
Ill erase it
Never fake it
I will take it
Then I'll shake it
Like an hour glass
And when the ask what happend
You'll say why'd you have to ask
Zane took it
Then he shook it
Wrang it out
Then unhooked it
And when they ask what
You'll just say
My life of course
I'm just the prey
That stops an pray
To be saved
From the Predator
I AM ZANE
Listen up
I'm your king
And during my rein
I will treat earth life
Like a football game
Nothing but Names and Numbers
Clash of the titans
Ringing out like thunder
And everytime I speak
Boy my voice just Sunders
Make you wonder
Were the darkness came
Well heres the story
Of Tiger Zane
I let the darkness play games
From the shadows
They will call your name
Then shoot out from
Under your bed
As you start to shake and shiver
Bottom lips will quiver
And They will watch and ask
"Are you afraid of the dark"
Like the ghost of
Chrismas past
They will drag you under
Burn your flesh off
Like a Poisin Ivy Rash
Bash your skull in
Just for a little cash
Boy I run the under
Worlds of earth
While you stay
At home all safe
In the night
Secret fights
To the death
When at best
And terrible
Things can happend
If you let
Your gaurd down
Around the darkest
Parts of town
In the night
To my delight
I participate
In these fight
And I kill
For what little
You would steal
If you get the call
You must come
Because you can never run
We will only follow
Theres no escape
Shini Loseing
To me is just your FATE
-ZANE CALINE > wink YOUR MOVE SHINI

No offense but i think this is more gorey then dark. darkness is about more then death.

its all darkness no offense taken but death is not only my darkness its the no escape as well as the lingering shadows when i write i make you think about it smile

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Posted: Mon Feb 07, 2011 3:56 pm

shinigamithekidd

Darkness looms... Like a forbidden cloak
one wrapped around the confines
of this place they locked me.
Days, weeks, years all seems the same
when your locked with scarce food, little water
"for the good of our people"
they would say
"he is unfit to live"
others would bark
but they just dont understand.
The fatal attraction to watch the blood
trickle down, pale virgin skin
without a care, without a thought
another death that I have brought
one of 7 under my belt, one of 3 they found
they call me insane, a mad man
An artist of our time
painting in the blood of my victims
with my fingers
with my fingers...these fingers..
wrapped around her throat...
watching the life pass...slowly...
like sleep that comes over the children..
so many children...so much blood...
Thats were they found me and I wait
I wait for capital punishment to treat me just...
metal clanks...doors open...every day in this tower..
metal on stone assures me the blade will cut sweet
maybe they will use my own..to paint a mural...a mural..
of me...

um i write my stuff on the spot to so wth dose that mean and also i must say pretty good my turn again however

Posted: Mon Feb 07, 2011 4:18 pm

Star falling down from space

Like a god descending from the heavens

Crashing into the darkest part of Hell

May the oceans abyss swallow you

Hades rip and tear your flesh to bone

Shadows linger and stalk you at night

Omniouse winds chill your spine

The Reaper is calling

The bell tolls for thee

Deaths at your door...Will you answer

His chilling touch stiffens you

The darkest part of your soul awakens

The door slams open and you get sucked in

Sucked in deep to parts unknown

The dark side of the moon

The back of your mind

You can"t fathom an escape

There is none

No were to run

No were to hide

Illusions and Delusions

Little girl singing and dancing

You can't save her

She can't save you

She sticks out her hand with a rose

But first .....

You'll grab it and die

You age rapidly

Your very being unearthed

Your eyes turn to ice

Your skin into stone

Bones into sand

And finally.....

Wither away as your souls dragged out of you

-ZC never said i was done wink i went soft first time sorry shini but ill just keep advanceing

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Posted: Mon Feb 07, 2011 5:19 pm

In my opinion this is all a load of crap. <.> The only Prince of Darkness is Ozzy.

But aside from that Shini's got my vote. This may not be over but so far so much better (than Zane).

Posted: Mon Feb 07, 2011 6:17 pm

BattleAxePirate

In my opinion this is all a load of crap. <.> The only Prince of Darkness is Ozzy.

But aside from that Shini's got my vote. This may not be over but so far so much better (than Zane).

Constructive criticism is highly welcome too. May i know ur reason for ur choice? ^_^

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Posted: Mon Feb 07, 2011 6:20 pm

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Darkness looms... Like a forbidden cloak
one wrapped around the confines
of this place they locked me.
Days, weeks, years all seems the same
when your locked with scarce food, little water
"for the good of our people"
they would say
"he is unfit to live"
others would bark
but they just dont understand.
The fatal attraction to watch the blood
trickle down, pale virgin skin
without a care, without a thought
another death that I have brought
one of 7 under my belt, one of 3 they found
they call me insane, a mad man
An artist of our time
painting in the blood of my victims
with my fingers
with my fingers...these fingers..
wrapped around her throat...
watching the life pass...slowly...
like sleep that comes over the children..
so many children...so much blood...
Thats were they found me and I wait
I wait for capital punishment to treat me just...
metal clanks...doors open...every day in this tower..
metal on stone assures me the blade will cut sweet
maybe they will use my own..to paint a mural...a mural..
of me...

good words and imagery.. nice work too, shini.. its like readers can feel the words too. ^_^

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