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PostPosted: Sun Dec 19, 2010 12:34 pm


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Name: Pravoski

Nicknames: Peaches
Breed: Short-hair Moggie.

Attached to: no one

Alignment: Senshi

Fav. Food: I r can has cheezeburgur?

Hated Food: No pickles on mai cheezeburgur plz?



Hobbies:

Plumbing; 'Cats in your lavatory, that's where they're going to be foooor noooooow~'
Pravosky is fascinated with plumbing. He can often be found in the bathroom and he doesn't see, or care, why he can't or shouldn't be totally invading your privacy while you're in there. Pravosky grew up in the sewers as a stray, and never ceases to be totally fascinated with water, drains, pipes, etc. No one really knows why. Not even the cat himself.

Hanging out in the sewers; There is no place like home, right? He doesn't care that they are smelly, nasty, etc. Although you won't find him hunting down sewer rats, you can bet your knickers that if you're a sewer worker he's gonna be underfoot and paying close attention to what you're doing. In fact, some of the workers have come to expect the cat's presence, although it is only by sheer luck that he manages to be in the same area as them.

Dumpster Diving; Pravosky isn't one for chasing mice or birds. Instead, he likes to see what treasures he can scrounge up from the dumpsters. He particularly likes to hang out around cheap burger joints. Humans are such wasteful things, he's sure to not go hungry. He doesn't just look for food though. He likes to find some cool toys too. Well, what a cat considers a toy. Which could be pretty much anything. Pravosky's taste's can be pretty eclectic.



Virtues:
Trust Your Instincts!; Some might call it luck, but Pravoski hase the purest faith in the deepest subconscious part of himself called his 'instincts.' Provoski isn't the brightest kitty out there, but when things are tough and a decision has to be made, or maybe there's just no time to think at all, he always trusts his gut instinct to get him through. It can land him in some interesting situations, but they've never steered him wrong! When others can't decide on a course of action, he always tells them to trust their instincts, or follow their heart, and to not be afraid to go against the grain!

Viva La Vie Boheme! Pravosky lives a rather Bohemian lifestyle. He is a roamer, doesn't adhere much to normal behavior, and considers his street smarts to be an art. He is also very laid back. He's not the kind of guy who is gonna make a fuss if your gay, straight, bi, have never touched a razor in your life, don't wear D.O., live in a box, etc. He's pretty much friends with anyone. Even Negas if you're nice!(it helps if there are cheeseburgers involved!)

Lean on me~ The fact that Pravosky doesn't judge makes him a good person, err,...cat to confide in. He isn't gonna go around telling everyone what you said if you spill your guts to him, because really he doesn't care, but he'll lend an ear whenever necessary. He'll take whatever emotional baggage you want to throw at him. He is a good venting buddy who isn't gonna get you worked up by joining in on the venting, simply because he isn't the kind of guy who gets worked up over things. All in all, talking to him does about as much good as talking to a brick wall, but hey - you can't cuddle a brick wall.


Flaws:

Spite Without Malice; You want him to do what now? Oh, no thanks, I think I'll go do the opposite. Don't lay on your socks you just left on the floor? Lolnope, they're my bed now! Pravoski doesn't do it to be mean, in fact, he thinks he's being quite the funny guy! But he often will turn around and do the exact opposite of what you want him to do. He doesn't quite get why some people don't find it as funny as he does, but so long as he is having fun, everything is cool, right? Of course, some times he lands in trouble because of this - Oh crap, so that's why I wasn't supposed to come down this dark scary alley this time of night..

That uh, that, that THING! You know? Pravosky often has a hard time articulating. He knows what he wants to say, has the image in his head, but just often fails to get it out, or just can't think of the word that the time. It is a horrible hindrance when trying to say something in a pinch. It is also quite often annoying to the people he is trying to talk to, unless they are the really patient type.

Invasive; Personal space and this guy are...non-existent. As stated in his hobbies, he'll totally walk in to the bathroom with you, try and hold a conversation with you while you're getting dressed, lay in the bed while you're trying to seduce that special someone... This makes him quite annoying, if not a little creepy. He just doesn't care. So long as he is happy, he really doesn't see why it should bother anyone. Just suck it up and go about your merry way!


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Challenge: Uh, guyz, cheezeburgurs are dis wai~?



Appearance:
He is an orange and white short hair moggy. White base with orange blotches, and a pink, pink nose. His eyes and star on his forehead are gold.

In human form, he has short peachy-orange hair and tan skin, and again, gold eyes. His outfit looks almost like something from Lion King on Broadway.
PostPosted: Mon Dec 27, 2010 1:16 pm


Open for crit


OP-Yuna

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shibrogane

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PostPosted: Thu Dec 30, 2010 1:47 pm


In ur base, crittin ur evul cat

First off, he seems adorables <3 I like how catlike he is--it's not even that he's derpy, it's that the disregard for rules or behavior is such a cat thing * n*

However, I do think Viva La Vie Boheme could stand to be moved into your virtues section? It doesn't read as a hobby as much as a character trait. * n*

Virtues look good! * u* and his flaws make pretty good sense too. I don't really have that much to say B|a I think you could devote a flaw to his ignorance, though, and explain why exactly that is. And a virtue could be made out of the fact that he's relaxed?

Although I do have a question. Why would they have corrupted Peaches instead of killing him right off? Is there a particular skill he has which would have made this attractive? (Is that his sewer exploration skill?)
PostPosted: Thu Dec 30, 2010 2:09 pm


"Muffin Button" doesn't exactly work, since it boils down to 'lucky,' and that has two problems inherent in it: the first is that the traits under virtues and flaws are strictly PERSONALITY traits. The second is that it's juuuust a little bit twinkish / comes off as a deus ex trait. Courtesy-breaking is not a good idea. XD


However, easy fix suggestion: how about instead of this going off of luck, Peaches just has really amazing reflexes / reaction speed? E.g. he's conditioned into being able to dodge and weave through all sorts of situations... but on the intellectual front, still not very impressive. In other words... he's a jock.

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PostPosted: Thu Dec 30, 2010 2:48 pm


Gotcha! Fixed some stuff up, and will do more tonight. =D Thankies.
PostPosted: Thu Dec 30, 2010 6:07 pm


Added a 'Non-conformist' flaw, since it really goes with the whole bohemian thing.

Still brainstorming on how he'd get in to the Negaverse, though I'd like to sorta somehow blame the non-conformist flaw for a bit of that. I think him becoming a part of the Negaverse would take some RP work maybe. Hmn....


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PostPosted: Thu Dec 30, 2010 6:29 pm


Villingly-corrupted cat is interesting, actually, I don't think it's been done yet ? Well, im not sure about Grendel, but pretty sure Caine was against his will.
PostPosted: Tue May 17, 2011 4:12 pm


Decided to go the normal route instead of corrupted. Moar crit? =D


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PostPosted: Sun May 22, 2011 12:16 pm


I like him as a normal cat. I'd be a little sad and jealous if the bad guys got him lol.

The only thing I can think of for crit is maybe the 2nd personality virtue. It seems less like a part of his personality and more like a talent, or a bit of knowledge he's picked up by living his life. But it definitely still has a place in your profile, especially if it's under the umbrella of a personality trait. It could even go under the 'dumb jock' trait since that talks about how he's got more street smarts/survival instinct than intelligence - having to live life roaming around the city, having to always watch your back and know what you're getting into, running from dumpster to sewers to alleyway, it would give you a great mental map of it (or its sewers) wouldn't it?
PostPosted: Tue Oct 25, 2011 9:26 am


So close to being able to get him~ Doing some more fixing up on this!


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PostPosted: Sun Nov 20, 2011 8:16 pm


Did more tweaking, looking for crits.
PostPosted: Mon Jan 16, 2012 4:16 pm


Still looking for crits. (and dun worry, I dun plan on putting him in the upcoming competition. lol)


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PostPosted: Mon Jan 16, 2012 6:16 pm


His sewer hobby seems vague and too similar to the plumbing one. I see potential, though. Like maybe he likes exploring it, studying the layout, hanging out with the DSW employees, etc.

Overall, he sounds like a really appealing character. He reminds me of an actual cat. My sister's like to stare at me in the bathroom. It's so believable.
PostPosted: Sun Mar 04, 2012 4:22 pm


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Alright, just a couple things here:

Quote:
Dumb Jock, Street Smart; Quick witted? No. Smart? That's relative. Pravosky isn't the brightest crayon in the box. However what he lacks in wit he makes up for in physical ability - speed, reaction time, reflexes, etc. When he has to act quickly in a situation he doesn't think he just acts, and is often left with a 'How did I manage that?' look on his face. Although he is pretty, well,...dumb, he knows the city, and what it takes to survive in the urban jungle. He grew up as a stray and in order to survive you need to have a little street smarts. He especially knows the sewer system! He knows what manhole comes up where, etc. He is an efficient guide, even if the smell of the sewers are likely to kill your nose. He is more than willing to help Senshi or Knights to ninja about the city that way.

This is a lot of interesting information here, but it doesn't really fit as a trait. Physical ability doesn't tell me much about his motivations or behavior, and knowing the sewer system so well counts as a hobby (which you already have covered, obviously.) So, What's supposed to be the positive aspect of his personality here? If he's willing to go through somewhere as unpleasant as the sewer system and do whatever else it takes in order to survive, would it be his tenacity? Or since he's naturally quick to act in a stressful situation, is it a willingess to trust his gut when goings get tough? Whichever you end up going with, you need to rewrite this trait around a single aspect of his personality, since right now it reads off like a mix of different things without any focus on a virtuous trait of his.

Quote:
Non-Conformist; If it is popular, Pravosky will turn his nose up at it, or do the opposite. 'Everybody is doing it!' isn't a good enough excuse for Pravosky...unless you're trying to get him to do the opposite. Sometimes he does this just to spite someone or just royally piss them off - quite like a cat, actually! Sometimes it of just purely in his own taste - he likes to be unique, and once something he likes gets too popular (except cheeseburgers!) he'll drop it and go on to something else. Or he waits until the fad is passed to finally jump on the bandwagon. Sometimes his non-conformist attitude gets him in a lot of trouble - especially when he finds it in him to take a stand.

This trait is more of a quirk than a flaw, since refusing to go with something just because it's popular and/or trying to be unique by going against the grain is something that is as likely to be admirable or beneficial as it is to reflect poorly on him. You need to rework this trait to make it more overtly negative, or replace it with something else. If the point is that he does this purely to mess with people, then you can change this into a Mischievous Streak and expand it to situations beyond his response to trends -- I can see him being the type who's inconsiderately persistent on getting a cheap laugh, not understanding why others don't always chime in and laugh with him when they realize it's a joke, etc.

cibarium

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PostPosted: Sun Mar 04, 2012 5:04 pm


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Whewt Thanks! I editedededed~
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