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 Posted: Tue Jul 27, 2010 2:26 pm
 Please no bad mouthing style. Open for Critique and Comments! Enjoy~! <3
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Posted: Tue Jul 27, 2010 3:07 pm
Nice, good job replicating the xxxHolic/Tsubasa style. I loooove the smoke-effect going on.
Three things. The hands are posed a little awkward. To make it feel natural, I'd either straighten the pointer finger (on his left hand), or straighten out the pinky. The other hand has very long fingers, but barely any palm. I know it's a style choice, but it needs to be consistent; the left hand has a longer palm than the right hand's.
The hair draping over the shoulder doesn't feel naturalistic. It feels more like straw rather than hair. Clump the larger strands together, and the thinner strands coming out of the larger strands. Think of the hair as a shape, and then deviate from that.
I'm having a bit of a problem reading the legs. Even with the baggy pants, it's hard to tell where the knees are. Make sure to draw the bare legs first in your sketch before throwing on the clothing.
Excellent job on the lineart, by the way. Excellent line variation.
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Posted: Tue Jul 27, 2010 3:19 pm
I see what you mean for the hands and the hair, though the hair was a bit difficult for me to do after it got past the nape of the neck. Did not want it to look too similar to Yuuko, but I understand what you mean. Didn't have much grip on the pens either.
The legs are supposed to be spread out a bit, and from the point of vision one is going left while the other is more or less facing the audience.
Thank you very much on the critique and comments, much appreciated C:
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Posted: Tue Jul 27, 2010 3:35 pm
The hand to the far right looks...odd. I think the pinky's as long as the other fingers, which just looks strange?
Dig the style though.
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Posted: Wed Jul 28, 2010 8:26 am
very nice, much like Clamp. the only problem i have with it is the arm and hands. I agree with the left hand's pinky being a bit too long, and the right arm seems a bit shorter than the left arm. other than that, looks great
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Posted: Wed Jul 28, 2010 10:46 am
I think everything Kupocake said was right on. I think the arm on our right (his left) looks really thin, and may be too long, longer than the right arm. The lineart is great, though, and I wish I could draw traditionally like that these days. 
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