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PostPosted: Mon Jul 05, 2010 8:16 pm


Username: TheGalaxyTrooper

Character Name: Vom Himmel (Isaac Amor)

Character Race: Wastelander

Character Age: 32

Character Gender: Male

Character Height: 6' 3"

Character Weight: 190 (mainly muscle mass)

Character Alignment: ( Evil/Neutral/Good & Chaotic/Neutral/Lawful [If both selections are neutral, put it as True Neutral.) True Neutral

Character Occupation / Trade: (required for non combat elements of RP, so things like Warrior, Archer, magic user etc. not acceptable as they come under skill sets) Trades scraps found in his wandering.

Personality: Shy and very secluded. Stays away from people. Suffered from severe amnesia, so he does not remember his history.

Character Race Traits: (If Any) None.

Current Levelling Points LP: 0

Current Level: (All start at Level 1 = Beginner [Novice] {Nobody}) 1

Description of Appearance: (This can be Either Written or A Picture) Brown Hair, Turqoise Eyes, Face and head covered by shadow of hood, wears robes and leather armor
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Skill Set: (see levelling system thread) Holy Magic.

Weapons Carried: Nano/Phaser Rifle, 10mm laser pistol,Enchanted Silver Longsword, and 12" dagger

Signature Moves: (These are special moves unique to your character.) Righteous Redemption is when multiple sins are ripped out of the target's body ripping out organs, limbs, bones, ect., The Hand of God is when Vom is hurt badly and weaponless, a hand comes down from the sky and grabs him to heal him and make all of his unarmed attacks stronger and hurt more; Smite which uses holy powers to slash Vom's enemy; Rapid Joint Shot is where Vom shoots with his phaser or laser fire rapidly at a joint, although accuracy is lowered the damage will hurt much more.

Background Story: History/bio: Isaac Amor hails from the planet of Elemente (Isaac is unaware of this). His home galaxy was under severe persecution from the evil Galactic Monarchy (GM). He was the leader of the rebellion group the Himmlische Energie (HE). They were losing terribly, in desperation the R & D group found a way to travel from galaxy to galaxy long before the GM did. The HE were searching for advanced races to fight along side them in the last desperate attempt to liberate their once peaceful galaxy. When scanning the earth there was an engine malfunction which caused over half of the flag ship to explode. The "abandon ship" order was sent out being the general of the HE Isaac was the last off the ship when he got into the escape pod he was shot into the earth's atmosphere much of his gear and weapons were destroyed but now he slowly learns to speak again and roams the earth looking for someone to help him find out his past. Now he calls to the name of Vom Himmel which was given to him from the Nomadic tribe that taught him much of what he knows and taught the ways of the paladin.
PostPosted: Tue Jul 06, 2010 1:53 pm


Hm, Alright GT, I understand your new and willing so I'll explain each area, because there are a few area's that are, off.

First thing, Wastelander, what is this exactly? Human? if it is anything but human, you'll need to explain the racial traits in the Racial Traits Section of the profile. I'm presuming its human down to the fact you didn't fill out the Racial traits section but it is only an assumption.

Would you be kind enough to state what units your using to measure your characters weight? pounds, stone, ounces, kilograms, etc. This gives a more firm foundation of what to expect from yoru character on the field, rather then us trying to take a lucky guess.

The Occupation, its acceptable but would you really want that as a character trade? Considering its not an overly helpful one to have (probably could be in the right situation) but you may find it difficult to compete with a few others with that sort of occupation. Perhaps a weapon tinkerer? Such as performs weapon upgrades depending upon your currently level. (just throwing ideas out there)

The Appearance, the picture doesn't work. ^_^; just letting you know so you can fix it up.

Your Skill set is acceptable, if you understand the limitations your placing upon yourself. Holy magic pretty much means your character has focused purely on that area, meaning he wouldn't be able to use the weaponry as affectively as you may want. perhaps a Paladin?

The Weapons carried, now these are the real problem in this profile... although thats down to me failing to include the tech limits within the rules. The Limitations upon starter profiles are 1700s tech, the kind of weaponry your after MIGHT be obtainable later by the god of technology or other means but right now at level one, we can't have someone with such powerful weaponry as lasers. I hope you understand this, its the limitations of the worlds current tech. He could possibly make a weapon that channels his holy magic at a higher level, so a sort of laser. but right now we gotta keep things a little mundane, sorry.

also if your keeping the sword, we'd appreciate a description of how strong it is and the enchantment it has received.

Signature moves, well you'll need to reassess these to probably match your new weaponry. Also it'd be helpful if you separated them up, its a little difficult to know when a description for one move ends and another begins.

as for the moves not including yoru weapons, the first move is a definite no for a level one, to be able to rip someone apart due to their actions upon others seems... well god like.

The second move, is also a no, considering in this roleplay their are many gods, and to actually have one optionally help you so willingly would not be obtainable for a level one, although you can say your character becomes slightly empowered for showing loyalty to a god, probably not heal though, you can do that through holy magic.

a little more description on the Holy Smite move.

Rapid joint shot is a no due to the point of the weapons it requires you aren't allowed to have. (yet)

I apologize for all the reading...

Rorek Orobus
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