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 Posted: Tue Jun 08, 2010 8:02 am
Sharons Poetry
I'm helping my Girlfriend get some of her poetry online, she always talked and dreamed about it. please read and lemme know what u think!! :>
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Posted: Tue Jun 08, 2010 8:08 am
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Posted: Tue Jun 08, 2010 1:02 pm
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Posted: Tue Jun 08, 2010 1:06 pm
soft, for your word and rhymes have touched my heart
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Posted: Tue Jun 08, 2010 1:06 pm
I have to honestly say . . . . "GOOD JOB MY FRIEND! YOUR GIRLFRIEND HAS SOME TALENT!" :3
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Posted: Tue Jun 08, 2010 4:52 pm
heart heart rofl wahmbulance
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Posted: Wed Jun 09, 2010 4:23 am
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Posted: Wed Jun 09, 2010 4:35 am
Not bad, I particularly like "there goes the light in the hallway," but it seems to me that there could be room for improvement.
Unfortunately, I am not really that knowledgeable with regards to poetry, so I don't think I can give a good in-depth critique, but they did seem to be rather lacking flow(I used to know what it was properly called, but I've forgotten now).
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Posted: Wed Jun 09, 2010 1:06 pm
her fav poem already draws amazingly quck positive responses!! Thanks : smile xd rofl 4laugh
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Posted: Sat Jun 19, 2010 5:05 pm
They're pretty. I kind of cried while reading the first one.
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Posted: Tue Jul 06, 2010 10:59 pm
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Posted: Wed Jul 07, 2010 12:02 am
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Posted: Fri Jul 30, 2010 1:54 pm
Oh my gosh..her poems are so true and deep. She really got 2 me and I'm happy 2 say tht she is lucky 2 have such a kind & loving boyfriend. smile cry TEARS OF JOY.
The first one was so true and sad...I kinda felt my heart ache and my tears ready 2 fill up.. -_-. sad . cry .Its so beautiful and the rythm is just right. mrgreen . xp .
"THERE GOES THE LIGHT IN THE HALLWAY" is so desperately,agonizingly painful. =(. I kno how it feels 2 have such a cruel father and this am also saying for the Untitled onw bout her Dad. *_*. ninja cheese_whine sad surprised .
Lastly,I wud like 2 say,tht ur girlfriend has true talent and an understanding heart. heart xd 3nodding . I hope she continues 2 improve her poetry and may ur relationship stay stable & well.
-CLAPS- Bravo! I hope I can generate some poetry like tht sumday but for now,I can only hope,dream,and KEEP ON BELIEVING. xd 3nodding =D.
Sincerely Yours, SweetSpiritSprite12 heart xd mrgreen cheese_whine
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