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Name: Dionne Hazel

Nicknames: Di, Dede. Her parents will refuse to call her anything but Dionne, as she's named after her great great grandmother, a family heroine who first started up the florists that her family still runs successfully to this day.

Age: 15

Birthday: April 19th

Sign: Aries, the sturdy ram

Blood Type: A+

Fav. Food: Fillet Steak, with a light sprinkling of paprika, cooked medium-well and with chunky chips and baked beans on the side.

Hated Food: Anything that isn't cooked to her high standards, ready-meals.

School: Meadowview

Hobbies:

Cooking ;; Dionne is actually a very good cook, and is tipped to be an amazing chef one day if her talent continues to improve at the rate it has been. She has full access and use of the large kitchen in her family's home, and her mother has long since given up trying to cook something that Dionne finds acceptable. Instead, she's been given charge of cooking all meals in the house, and catering for her parents and her two younger siblings. She doesn't mind, however - cooking isn't her favourite hobby, but she's good enough that she can usually get away with watching TV, or reading a book on the use of acrylics, without the quality of her food deteriorating.

Flower Arranging ;; Working at her parents' florist part time, Dionne has picked up the hobby of flower arranging. Its something she gets paid for, and it isn't particularly difficult to do. As well as the flower arranging she'll also man the cash machine and water the plants.

Art ;; Whereas cooking is where her talents lie, drawing and sketching is what Dionne truly enjoys. The annoying thing? She's no-where near as talented at drawing as she is at cookery. Di will draw a large majority of objects, although her true passions are animals and flowers, and she'll use a variety of materials. Pencil, acrylics, oils, pastels (which are her favourite medium) and watercolours are among the different materials she's used. As well as larger pieces, she also keeps a sketch journal which she keeps on her person at all times, should she suddenly be struck with inspiration.

Trumpet ;; Dionne plays the trumpet. It's something she picked up recently, and as such she's only a beginner. She hasn't progressed far enough to be invited to join an orchestra yet, and as such merely has her private lessons, twice a week.

Gemstone: Diamond

Virtues:

Passionate;; Dionne is a loving girl, who tries her best to get along with everyone. When she's committed to a cause she's committed to it fully, and will always put 110% into everything she does. She's the type to not commit unless she actually wants to do it, and as such her passion will always shine through in the activities she does partake in. Raised to learn the difference between right and wrong as if it were as clear as black and white, Dionne is very opinionated, and very passionate when it comes to these opinions, defending them fiercely, even if she realizes they're flawed half-way through. For example

Adaptable ;; What's that, the cars broken down? Well, she'll just have to drag that old scooter of hers out of the shed. Oh, you threw that away? ...Maybe that old bike of her dad's will still work! ...That got so rusty you sold it for scrap metal? Oh, how unfortunate...well, looks like she'll be strapping a saddle to her German Shepherd, then! Needless to say, Dionne is a very adaptable girl, able to find a solution to practically every solution. This comes in particularly handy in the kitchen, where she's able to make up for any missing ingredients or equipment quickly and without much trouble. She's good at improvising, meaning awkward situations don't happen often around this girl as she's always quick to interject with some story, or some invitation.

Genuine ;; Dionne doesn't try to be anyone but herself - that's the way she was born and brought up, and she isn't going to change. Anything she says you know is her genuine, truthful belief, and in general she tries to make it a habit not to lie unless absolutely necessary. And rarely is it 'necessary' in Dionne's eyes - she isn't the type to lie just to spare someone's feelings.

Flaws:

Picky ;; Ick, is that a tiny, miniscule little portion of uncooked meat she can see on the very corner of her plate? That isn't acceptable; she can't eat any of it. And argh, that handbag would be absolutely perfect for her, were it not for the buttons being blue. Take it back, get her another. Dionne is an extremely pick girl, who knows what she wants and why, and won't settle for anything less. She's fairly demanding, and if you don't get it right first time she'll be sure to let you know so you can fix it, or get it right next time. Should you then forget what she's told you and make the same mistake again...well, she won't tell you quite as politely.

Argumentative ;; Despite her hobbies being fairly serene, calming activities, Dionne is actually an extremely fierce person. Get her riled up and it will take her a while to come down, and she'll argue against anything and anyone. She's right, you’re wrong, and sorry but that’s the way it is. It doesn't matter if you argument makes more sense, or if she suddenly realizes that in fact she is wrong halfway through, she'll keep arguing anyway. To get on with Dionne, you have to be able to accept that you're not going to agree on everything, but that her opinion is automatically superior to yours. That's just...how it works.

Loud ;; Oh, what's that, you don't believe her opinion? WELL MAYBE IF SHE SHOUTS A LITTLE LOUDER YOU'LL REALIZE JUST HOW FLAWED YOUR OPINION IS AND HOW DIONNE'S IS CLEARLY BETTER IN EVERY WAY POSSIBLE. Even if everyday life, and just normal conversations, Dionne often has to be reminded that she doesn't need to shout. She can't help it; she's a naturally loud girl.


Physical Description:

Complete design up to Shaz?

Why would Zeus accept Dionne?
Zeus wouldn't really have much of a choice with accepting Dionne (see below), but after spending a short time in her mind she'd realize not everything is so bad. Whilst Dionne and Zeus are almost completely contrasting personalities, Dionne's ability to cook excellent meals and her adaptable nature are useful traits Zeus could very well use, and as such she'll be content in Dionne's body for the time being. She also hopes to perhaps 'calm' Dionne down a little, making the teen her 'project'.

Why would Queen Nehelenia choose Dionne?
It won't have been a secret that Queen Nehelenia and Sailor Zeus didn't get on in the Black Moon Court. Zeus' bossy, over-bearing, fussy nature will have constantly gotten on the Queen's nerves, and as such she'll try to find a personality she very much gets along with to try to counter this. Whilst Corinna and Dionne would likely clash over many things, and get into many arguements, it will be clear from the off that Dionne is a strong, opinionated personality who may be able to wrestle some 'sense' (aka make her less annoying/fussy/bossy) into Zeus.

How would Corinna and Dionne get along?
From what I've read of Corinna's role-plays and profile template, I think her and Dionne would have a sort of mutual respect for each other, but not necessarily get along and agree with one another on everything. Dionne would be impressed with Corinna's determination and confidence, but would not quite agree with her beliefs that she's better than sliced bread. Yeah, perhaps she's a queen in some other life, but here at Meadowview, she's just any other student. I imagine Dionne's passion and adaptability might be the things to draw Corinna to her - I like to think their first meeting would quickly deteriorate into a heated arguement, in which neither side will back down.

More may come - suggestions for anything you'd like to know?

Eeeh... I believe Eliza Marshall is an established character. Nothing else to report other than that Zeus has her own personality as well, just to make sure you're aware.

Okay...got most of the info filled in. Just Zeus' flaws and some more on reasons/relationships to flesh out.

But now open for crits, so feel free to crit on what's been written so far! <3

The first issue I have is with the hobbies. At first I thought they were a bit too much, too over the place, but I noticed the limits you put on them - beginner at trumpet, more enthusiastic/passionate about art than she is talented. And I was going to nod and continue on, until my re-read of that top section had two particular words jumping out at me: amazing and 15. No matter how innately skilled they are, or how much practice they've had, I do not see any fifteen year old being an AMAZING cook. Good, yes. Great potential or innate talent, yes. Amazing... not so much. How old would she have been when her parents let her use the stove, oven, sharp knives, etc. on her own. At least early teens? And in just a few years, she's gone from 'beginner' to 'amazing', all while undergoing the horribly gangly teenage growth spurts? I think to be at all realistic, you either need to shift her age up ( around 18 ) or her skill level down.

The other hobbies, I love, particularly all the limits, as I said before. And I feel Dionne's pain that her biggest love isn't her biggest talent to match.

I think Passionate needs rewording to make it clearer, and to also focus on the positive side. You start by saying how she's loving, but later how she'll keep arguing just for the sake of it. Some revising will remove the contradictions. You also keep saying that she's passionate, but not showing HOW she is passionate. Make this personal and specific. Right now, that description could easily describe several other characters as well - make it about Dionne, not any generically 'passionate' or argumentative person.

Genuine isn't coming off as very personalised, either. Still very generic and not explaining how Dionne comes off as being genuine. The only thing I take away from that is that she's so truthful it can hurt, except for when she lies.

Run spellcheck and grammar check over your flaws, please. Your writing suddenly deteriorates, which makes it harder for me to get through.

Have you also realised the HUGE contradiction between being Genuine and being Argumentative just for the sake of arguing? If you are, and you wanted her to have this hypocrisy, that's fine. Just making sure you're aware of it.

Attacks are looking good except for one thing - "Thunder Clap" is the name of one of Jupiter's canon (English/dub) attacks.


... May I suggest changing that last to 'laundry'? I had a brief horrified moment where I thought she was trying to bathe teenage senshi :S


Please revise and resubmit.