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 Posted: Wed Mar 03, 2010 6:03 pm
I'm sorry, beloved FAN. xD But I had to take the old poetry off. I was thinking of getting published, so I had to delete the things that I may publish.
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Posted: Thu Mar 04, 2010 3:17 pm
that was amazing i write poems but i cant rhyme to save my life
here is one of mine
one tear was all it took
to make him look away from me
to make my world crumb
one tear
why this tear
a tear that was not my own
i tried to get him to come back
he wouldnt even turn
no longer did he want to see my face
that made the tears form in my eyes
what had i done to him
why would he leave for the tear that was his own
i want to know what i did
what i did to make him cry
but in my heart i know
i should let him go
let him finish on his own
but i know those tears
and when they are done
he is done
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Posted: Fri Mar 05, 2010 4:20 am
Well, your poetry is something that doesn't have to rhyme. My poems only rhyme when I feel like converting my feelings into lyric. Yours is pretty good, too. ^_^
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Posted: Fri Mar 05, 2010 1:15 pm
thanks but even if i want my poems to rhyme i cant get them to cuz i am just bad at rhyming and i have been writing for like 5 years now. so i have to say i like ur better cuz u can rhyme and when u rhyme it makes sence and it speaks to me
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Posted: Mon Mar 08, 2010 3:19 pm
i loves those i have to say that the last one is my fav it is soo like me srry i dont have one for u today cuz i have to go take a friend back so next time i will share another with u but keep it u i love ur work it speaks to me
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Posted: Wed Mar 10, 2010 2:43 pm
nightmares_that_scream i loves those i have to say that the last one is my fav it is soo like me srry i dont have one for u today cuz i have to go take a friend back so next time i will share another with u but keep it u i love ur work it speaks to me Well, thank you so much. I'm glad it speaks to someone. As for the last one, it is me as well...
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Posted: Thu Mar 11, 2010 1:36 pm
well i hope it has u in it, it is ur writing after all and i think it should have something related to the writter in some way, dont u?
well here is a poem i hope u will like.
DO NOT FORGET
there i sat
in the cold moon lit night
waiting for you
i waited for days
waited for nights
hoping to hear your voice
you said we would runaway together
just meet at midnight
under the old willow
but you still have not come
it has been days
months
years
still you have not come for me
have you forgotten me
forgotten the promise to me
i have not
i can not
i will not
forget
im still waiting for you
one thousand years
and three days
so have you forgotten me
forgotten the promise
i have not
can not
will not
forget
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Posted: Thu Apr 01, 2010 11:28 am
nightmares_that_scream well i hope it has u in it, it is ur writing after all and i think it should have something related to the writter in some way, dont u? well here is a poem i hope u will like. DO NOT FORGET there i sat in the cold moon lit night waiting for you i waited for days waited for nights hoping to hear your voice you said we would runaway together just meet at midnight under the old willow but you still have not come it has been days months years still you have not come for me have you forgotten me forgotten the promise to me i have not i can not i will not forget im still waiting for you one thousand years and three days so have you forgotten me forgotten the promise i have not can not will not forget This is very interesting, that I cannot deny. ^_^ I like the thought behind it. One tip: Don't put too many words in to get your point across. It just confuses readers. >.< But other than that, I love it.
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Posted: Thu Apr 01, 2010 2:21 pm
yea i have a habbit of tryin to use soooo much detail cuz all my readers have no imaginations so i have to describe everything carefully
but i will try to and i still love ur work i wanna read more
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Posted: Fri Apr 02, 2010 7:01 pm
aha i just started poetry around this year i guess but the both of you write poetry that kinda speaks to me. It's almost like my life but written out
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Posted: Sat Apr 03, 2010 7:51 am
thanks i try to connect it to real life but i dont think i always get it unless i connect it to my life
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Posted: Sun Apr 04, 2010 12:03 am
nightmares_that_scream yea i have a habbit of tryin to use soooo much detail cuz all my readers have no imaginations so i have to describe everything carefully but i will try to and i still love ur work i wanna read more I will have more, trust me... I have tons.. Just not alot typed out yet...
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Posted: Sun Apr 04, 2010 12:05 am
cookiemunsterx3 aha i just started poetry around this year i guess but the both of you write poetry that kinda speaks to me. It's almost like my life but written out I'm always touched when my work reaches someone else... It's for them that I write.
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