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 Posted: Sun Feb 21, 2010 5:55 pm
Upon entrance there is a desk that stood out from everything else.
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Posted: Sun Feb 21, 2010 5:59 pm
The doors slammed open as the child like head captain entered. Clapping steps echoed through the room until Ryuta reached his desk and took his seat. "We have to keep your identity hidden from him so just stand next to me to make it look I like have authority over you." Ryuta raised a hand as a hell butterfly flew in, "Relay my message to Hunter Frey." The butterfly fluttered out the window to go locate the shinigami.
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Posted: Sun Feb 21, 2010 6:05 pm
Diesel grunted his acceptance and shoved his prisoner to the ground so he was panting on the ground "Stay there. Ryuta, this kid better be worth it and he better have a tough stomache. I'm not going to play nice just cause he's a kid."
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Posted: Sun Feb 21, 2010 6:09 pm
Ryuta stared at the prisoner, "What exactly did you bring that thing for?" Ryuta looked down at the pathetic creature. Signaling at a unseated shinigami of the first squad Ryuta ordered him to bring tea for his guest and himself.
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Posted: Sun Feb 21, 2010 6:36 pm
"It's a secret." Diesel sniffed, ignoring the prisoner at his feet. The man could barely function being close to Diesel and sitting right next to him was slowly driving the man insane, causing him to dribble and mummble incoherently "He'll have his use and prove it once that 2nd arrives."
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Posted: Sun Feb 21, 2010 6:38 pm
"Ok im here captain". Kneels before you and the unfamiliar man. Adjust my Zanpakuto so it doesnt pull on my jacket.
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Posted: Sun Feb 21, 2010 6:45 pm
Ryuta frowned, "I just hope this is ethical."
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Posted: Sun Feb 21, 2010 6:50 pm
Diesel snorted as the applicant for squad 2 arrived, looking over the boy as he knelt Huh...this is the guy that wants to replace her? He didn't speak, letting Ryuta take control of the situation for now. He nudged his prisoner and the man twitched to fall forward on the ground, eyes wide and vacant that focused on the newcomer "And you are?" Diesel addressed the knealing man.
((Hey jack. Can you use quotations when your character is talking? ^^ Its a little confusing to me. And Diesel is dressed as an unseated not the captain of squad 0 so change that a little bit.
^^' that would be awesome.))
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Posted: Sun Feb 21, 2010 7:02 pm
((Yeah, only myself knows of the Squad 0 Captain. You don't know of the Royal Guards existence as well. As far as you can tell he is a member of central...))
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Posted: Mon Feb 22, 2010 3:26 pm
Stands to adress myself. "My name is Hunter Frey, and i would like to try out for the position of squad 2 captain. Notices this mans spiritual pressure and thinks to myself who could he be.
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Posted: Mon Feb 22, 2010 3:35 pm
Diesel stared down at the man for a moment then took his prisoner by the neck, dragging him to drop before Hunter "You want to be head of the punishment squad?" he drew his own zanpakuto, keeping it in its unreleased state, and set the blade on the prisoners shoulder "Then perform your duty. Kill this creature." Ryuta might be pissed about the blood stain but I'll pay him back for it. he tapped his blade on the prisoner's shoulder "Kill him."
((One more thing, and this is purely optional, but could you write with a mix of 3rd person/1st person? Kinda like l2yuta and I do. It makes it easier for everyone to understand what's going on.
but like I said. Purely optional ^^))
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Posted: Mon Feb 22, 2010 3:40 pm
I look at the man with the sword on his shoulder. "What has he done that he deserves to die"? Waiting for your reply Hunter realizes that this could be a test. Whipers "I am sorry for this" swings the blade and cuts the neck just deep enough that he passes out from the pain. "I have decided not to kill this man until you tell me what he did to deserve this".
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Posted: Mon Feb 22, 2010 3:43 pm
Ryuta merely observed, "I honestly do hope that prisoner was scheduled for an execution..." Disgust lingered in his voice as he looked at the three. Well this brings back memories.
((She has a good point. If you write like that your chances will increase. Also Diesel is an expert at kido like myself so you can't tell he has a lot of spiritual pressure just a normal amount.))
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Posted: Mon Feb 22, 2010 3:53 pm
Hunter looks back and forth at Head Captain Kyoya and the prisoner. "So what did he do to deserve to die" Hunter said with a deep expressionless face. He walks over to the prisoner who's cloths are now stained with bright red blood. "Captain Kyoya" I say quickly. "This man only has minutes left to live...." I stop mid sentence and finishes the man off with a quick blow to the back of his neck. Hunter then walks to the wall and leans on it with his hands in his pockets.
(( Im sorry if this takes a little bit of practice for me im used to having role play battles in a chat site where everything moves quicker, also im used to text talking so if some things I say dont fit in right with the text it would be very appreciated if you could just kinda let me know. Thanks for the tips on 3rd person/1st person posting im think im starting to get it))
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Posted: Mon Feb 22, 2010 3:56 pm
((Here is an example of what we are talking about.
Your post:
I look at the man with the sword on his shoulder. "What has he done that he deserves to die"? Waiting for your reply Hunter realizes that this could be a test. Whipers "I am sorry for this" swings the blade and cuts the neck just deep enough that he passes out from the pain. "I have decided not to kill this man until you tell me what he did to deserve this".
Better written:
Looking down at the lowly prisoner with a sword rest upon his shoulder, I redirect my attention to the Head Captain and the other man. "What has he done that he deserves to die for?" Hunter questioned the intentions of this meeting and test. Standing waiting for an answer he had a sudden realization, could this be a test? Hunter picked up the sword and whispered at the man on the floor, "I am sorry about this." Swinging the blade the edge split through his neck deep enough for him to pass out from the pain. "I have decided not to kill this man until you tell me what he did to deserve this." He stood defying the order curious as to why.))
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