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 Posted: Tue May 26, 2009 2:21 pm
Please, feel freeto look, read, and tell me what you think. I write stories more than poetry, but I want to do some Sonnets right now ^^
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Posted: Tue May 26, 2009 2:26 pm
~[currently untitled]~
I wish I could find something in this place
That could show me that it is all worth it;
Show me happiness and a little grace,
So I could dig myself out of this pit.
Feeling like a zombie every day;
Knowing that there is nothing for me here.
All of these prices I've had to pay,
And now I'm so full of this terrible fear.
The only thing keeping me sane is you,
But even that is begginning to fail.
I feel like I am being torn in two,
And my chances to be happy seem pale.
I have found that there is no place to run.
Now I go out ith the sound of a gun.
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Posted: Wed May 27, 2009 5:56 pm
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Posted: Fri May 29, 2009 1:49 pm
lol yeah, I know. I wanted to see if I could make my friend Marco feel sad, and I managed to, so I thought I would post it here.
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Posted: Sat May 30, 2009 6:07 pm
Last two lines were really depressing but i think i might kind of love them...
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Posted: Mon Jun 22, 2009 1:34 am
whoa.... nt quite sure what to think....
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Posted: Sun Apr 25, 2010 5:50 pm
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Posted: Wed May 19, 2010 6:34 am
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Posted: Thu Jun 24, 2010 8:17 pm
Nicely done, Roland. The only bit of critique I have is the syllable usage, but that's one of the hardest aspects of a poem to incorporate. You really worked the rhyme scheme, though, not many people are able to pull off sonnets well.
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