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 Posted: Thu Jan 22, 2009 11:52 am
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Posted: Fri Jan 23, 2009 6:28 am
I like it. Theres nothing you could really improve upon but there is a repeat verse. is this a lyrical poem?
10/10
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Posted: Fri Jan 23, 2009 8:26 am
Yes actually, I wrote and composed it myself. I play guitar so once the tune was set into mind the lyrics kinda just followed. Like I said it was one I did a bit differently, I can always add a few of my other ones on here as well.
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Posted: Sat Jan 24, 2009 9:34 am
aw. i wish i could hear a recording of the song.
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Posted: Sun Jan 25, 2009 12:38 pm
It's a pretty soft song, I can't sing worth a crap or at least I don't think so, of course my girlfriend would say I can sing, I know I must hurt her ears at times. >.> Alas, I do not have anything to record it with. So, there's the only downfall there.
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Posted: Wed Mar 18, 2009 9:33 am
that one is very good. i had a little trouble finding any rythem but thats just me reading it liek a book. its usually easier if the rymes are broken into libes but i actually think it might lookbetter this way. anyway good job.
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Posted: Wed Mar 18, 2009 4:43 pm
Can you guess what that poem is about Neko?
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Posted: Sun Mar 29, 2009 9:40 am
humanity is my best guess. why don't you tell...i dun wanna read it again. is too early in the morning
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Posted: Mon Mar 30, 2009 11:28 pm
Haha, it's about the Bible. Ironically. Though a lot of my poems are about God though I do not believe in one. It's quite odd. I think I am making a mockery of it in my poems or maybe because I am Agnostic that even if there is a God he is making his way through my poems. ~shrugs~ I dunno. I've written a few more since this one. They are pretty good.
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Posted: Thu Apr 16, 2009 5:03 pm
Look at me! Look at me!Sehen Sie mich! Sehen Sie mich!I don't see it. The bible or anything similar The monster inside me has grown so big!
Das Monstrum in meinem Selbst ist so groß geworden!
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Posted: Thu Apr 16, 2009 8:47 pm
I try to keep things hidden in my poems I guess I'm doing a good job. Pretty much, it's talking about people against the bible. And how they don't want to speak of their religion due to feeling either overwhelmed and shunned by the Christian beliefs. The tales it speaks of are the bible in general the topic of how others question it. Missing pieces that make no sense or others that are just flat out unreasonable. I suppose that poems is more or less about myself, fearing to tell my family that I question their God and how I know I will blitzed with discussions. Lo, it has already started. My cousin started the very day I made a facebook and put Agnostic as my religion. He...has not spoke to me the same since honestly. It's like, they pity or something. Anyways that's what it is about. I will post another one soon.
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Posted: Thu May 21, 2009 2:13 pm
any mroe poems? i liek reading yours.
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Posted: Tue May 26, 2009 9:18 am
Really? Well...I have been writing here lately. I guess I could post a few up.
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Posted: Mon Jun 01, 2009 10:26 pm
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