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kaliska-rayne

PostPosted: Thu Jan 15, 2009 12:24 am


Welcome to Rayne Fall


Okay, so the title of this place is a little goofy but I wanted something creative and that was all I could think of. If I come up with something better I'll change it.

I'm not much of a writer but I do need a little bit of a creative outlet and I'm trusting my clan not to stone me for my crappy attempts at writing. Usually when I write, it's whatever comes to mind so this place is going to have very random things in here.
PostPosted: Thu Jan 15, 2009 12:25 am


The following poem was written in the mindset of one of the main characters in the book I am writing. In the scene she has her enemy at gunpoint having just shot him in the leg to keep him from running and the poem is what's going through her mind. Sadly, I don't have a title.

Click, BANG!
The sound of a gun,
so familiar.
The feel of cold steel
as I hold it in my hand,
the scent of gunpowder
and smoke rising from the barrel
as my victim, you,
crying and writhing on the floor
blood flowing from the disabling wound.
the reveling in your pain and fear.
So familiar, too familiar.

It didn’t used to be this way,
I had it all, a loving family,
friends, a home, and a man who loved me.
I wasn’t rich, I wasn’t poor.
I had it all but in a heartbeat,
it disappeared.

On your orders,
They took my family.
They took my friends
and my beloved.
I was left alone in an empty house
to fend for myself.
What I own, I had to earn.
For what I lost, I wanted revenge.
So I took up the gun,
more like the gun took me.

Childlike face hiding
the monster I’ve become.
Am I doing what’s right?
Or have I simply become
what I set out to destroy?

But as I remember,
remember the faces of my family
the faces of my friends,
the face of my beloved,
filled with pain.

I raise my gun,
cold faced,
with careful aim
I watch you squirm
begging forgiveness and mercy.

Icy hearted.
Did you listen?
Did you listen as they asked for mercy?
No. You didn’t.
They had done no wrong,
but you signed for their imprisonment,
and ultimately their death.

I am the angel of Vengeance.
I am the angel of Justice.
I am the angel of Death.
I have come for you.
Click, BANG!

kaliska-rayne


elffromspace
Crew

PostPosted: Thu Jan 15, 2009 3:34 am


Nice! I'm not much of a poetry person normally but it can really be effective at times! This is a great sight into your character!
PostPosted: Thu Jan 15, 2009 4:39 pm


Awsome poem! ^^ So sad though. T.T But still, great poem! ^^

starlett2ya


kaliska-rayne

PostPosted: Fri Jan 16, 2009 2:03 pm


Thanks. Usually when you see movies when they have seems like this I rarely see reluctance in the killer or the person getting revenge. So I just did that.
PostPosted: Fri Jan 16, 2009 2:03 pm


Home

The trees whisper a welcome as
a hawk circles above the lush meadow.
Sparkling lake barely touching the grasses.
The strong scent of pine in the air
and the sunlight filtering in through the trees.
The air is cool and refreshing.
The water is icy cold but still so inviting.
This beautiful relaxing place, for me,
is home.

kaliska-rayne


kaliska-rayne

PostPosted: Fri Jan 16, 2009 2:16 pm


Okay so this isn't writing but it's very rare that I'll take a picture that I'm proud of.

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PostPosted: Fri Jan 16, 2009 3:55 pm


Great poem and pic! ^^ On the picture, I like how the sun's rays go through the trees and reflect the water! ^^

starlett2ya


kaliska-rayne

PostPosted: Mon Jan 19, 2009 6:52 pm


Thanks Starlett. It was fairly early in the morning when I took this picture. I was surprised I was actually able to capture that with a camera, usually I can't.
PostPosted: Mon Jan 19, 2009 9:41 pm


No title, the following is pretty crappy but that's how I'm feeling right now.

I never meant to fall for you
but I did, and fell hard.
I was to stay away from you
but I did not, I stayed by your side.
When all others abandoned you I remained.

At first I could not stand you.
Your cocky attitude.
Your tendency to brag and show off.
Then I got to know you
and see a side hidden from the rest of the world.
A side that was kind,
one that was vulnerable and unsure.
A side that was human.
A side that was somebody I could be friends with.

That friendship turned to like
like turned to...
something more.
Time I spent alone with you was treasured
but I never let that show.
Scared of being rejected
scared of losing a friend I was silent.
Waiting, hoping you would come to see me
as something more than a friend.
wanting you to see me the way I see you.
You fell for my best friend.
I was crushed and willing to let you go.
Lying to myself saying that I was happy with just friendship.
She fell for another and broke your soul.
She told me of you wanting suicide.
I cried, pleading for you to stay.
You did. Assuring me you wouldn't ever do it.

I realized my feelings. My courage gathered.
I went to tell you the truth.
My heart was broken.
You fell for another so I stepped down yet again.
To see you so happy I couldn't bring myself to do more.
At one point truth was told,
once you felt for me the way I do for you.
Pain filled my heart once more.
Missing my chance as I had
fear holding me back.
never again did I want that.
But as you were taken, I could not speak.
She betrayed you and shattered your heart.
I sat with you as you cried. Inside I cried for you.
I helped you begin to pick up the pieces and move on.
You hadn't been able to do so, you were still on the rebound.

Then you met her. The signs were clear to all.
You liked her. It was plain to see.
You like her and it pains me.
She's thin, pretty, sweet, funny.
I don't fit the first two categories.
Still I watch from the sideline
and try to let you go.
Telling myself your happiness is all that matters

You've known the truth,
the feelings that I have for you,
when they were fresh and new to me
and even now as I wait for you again.
At one point truth was told,
once you felt for me the way I do for you.
Pain filled my heart once more.
Missing my chance as I had
fear holding me back.
never again did I want that.
But as you were taken, I could not speak.

Somehow I keep fooling myself,
believing one day you will again see me
as I see you.
That is the lie, life's cruel ruse.
Letting me be the good friend
to both you and her.
Her, the girl I want to hug for healing you
and hang for the place she holds within your heart.

Not knowing if there is no chance was the worst of it all,
the blind cruel hope for something I will never see.
No matter how I tell myself it will never be,
somehow that cruel little hope remains
some stupid and strange flicker that refuses to die.
Break that hope, extinguish that light.
Tell me now I have no chance in hell,
end my heartache,
shatter my spirit so I can be born anew
and move on from you, if I can.

kaliska-rayne


starlett2ya

PostPosted: Tue Jan 20, 2009 8:56 am


Aww.., that is so sad. sad It's a great one though! ^^ The first couple of stanzas reminds me of a couple of characters from a show. XD

kaliska-rayne
Thanks Starlett. It was fairly early in the morning when I took this picture. I was surprised I was actually able to capture that with a camera, usually I can't.


Your welcome! ^^ And that's ok 'cause you still took a really good picture. ^^
PostPosted: Wed Jan 21, 2009 12:23 am


I LOVE the photo!!!! I have a thing for woods and streams and photos anyway, but that is well composed and it's pretty awesome how you caught the light! It's hard to catch that kind of thing, camera's can betray you. But the composition is all you!

elffromspace
Crew


kaliska-rayne

PostPosted: Wed Jan 21, 2009 9:46 pm


I'm almost afraid to ask this but which characters from what show? Just curious.

Thanks Elf, that was one of my favorite places to stay as it's pretty secluded. Only thing there in walking distance is one restaurant, the lodge/general store, Ice cream shop, the creek and the River. The photo is of Union Creek, Oregon.
PostPosted: Sat Jan 24, 2009 10:21 am


Well, if it makes you feel any better, I'm almost afraid to say, but the characters are Sprx and Nova from a show called Super Robot Monkey Team Hyperforce Go (long name, I know but we call it SRMTHFG for short) (look at my sig). XD Sorry if it's not the answer you expected, although it is a good show. ^^"

starlett2ya


elffromspace
Crew

PostPosted: Sun Jan 25, 2009 3:06 am


kaliska-rayne
I'm almost afraid to ask this but which characters from what show? Just curious.

Thanks Elf, that was one of my favorite places to stay as it's pretty secluded. Only thing there in walking distance is one restaurant, the lodge/general store, Ice cream shop, the creek and the River. The photo is of Union Creek, Oregon.


I've only been to Oregon once and I LOVED it. I'd totally live there ;_;
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