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 Posted: Mon Oct 06, 2008 5:55 pm
Death is an unpredictable force we must all avoid to survive.
Those who have seen death in its wake are forever walking amongst the darkness.
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Posted: Mon Nov 24, 2008 2:17 pm
It needs some work. You have a good idea but you need more to the poem. You need the right spelling and you need to space the poem in lines. Take a look at my signature for an example. I'm not trying to be mean but it really does need work.
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petitefromage Vice Captain
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Posted: Sat Dec 13, 2008 10:43 am
It needs some work, but good job. More lines would be nice.
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Posted: Wed Feb 04, 2009 9:53 pm
you have a really good idea, but you need to add to make it better
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