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machine of life vincent

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Posted: Fri Sep 05, 2008 7:34 pm

One i'm reposting for members who haven't read it. It's suppose to be one of my better poems. the other is older but never posted here in LP.

here the revisited poem:

My World, My Imagination

I live in a world not like yours

I live in a world were right is wrong

And wrong is right

I live in a world were up is down

And left is right

I live in a world were peace is war

And war is peace

I live in a world were the strong-minded find it hard to comprehend

And the weak-minded find it easy to understand

I live in my world

I live in my imagination

here is the new (old) poem:

Death

we cannot see it
we cannot hear it
we cannot feel it
but we know it's coming
and when it comes
we won't run
we can't run
for it is...

Posted: Wed Sep 10, 2008 1:38 pm

Damn I'm glad I reposted My World , My Imagination only three people commented it. XD

Anywho, the reason for reposting it is that I want more comments before deciding to submit it to my school's literature magazine. Luckily the theme is Reality vs. Imagination.

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FalIenGrace

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Posted: Fri Sep 12, 2008 8:24 pm

I like how you live in your imagination and the poem you wrote about it.

Posted: Fri Sep 12, 2008 8:48 pm

Well seeing that I am rather creative compared to others I live and hang around, it is only natural for me to write a poem inpsired about my imagination. Sometimes it really does feel like I live in my imagination.

Oh, and by the way Death mutated from a random little poem I wrote in 9th grade called The Pie. So it's probably crappy for a poem. sweatdrop

Edit: Found The Pie buried in my gaia journal...

The Pie
the end is upon us
the pie shall consume us all
we will fear it
the pie is immortal
we are all doomed
the pie consumes all from within
we cannot hide from it
the pie sees all
we cannot see it
the pie hears all
we cannot hear it
the pie shall rule all
we have no defence against it
the end is upon us

...rather random isn't it. XD

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FalIenGrace

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Posted: Sat Sep 13, 2008 1:22 pm

xd it makes no sense but is hilarious. and yeah the death one sorta was.....not that great. I used to live in my imagination but video games took that from me so I'm trying to get back in touch with it.

Posted: Sat Sep 13, 2008 3:11 pm

Yeah i had gotten done with a poem for my 9th grade english class and i wanted to write another and thus The Pie came about. then over the years it mutatedonce by changing the pie to death and then mutated once again by making it shorter.

I shoild put my stick comic i made around the same time as The Pie. XD

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FalIenGrace

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Posted: Sun Sep 14, 2008 5:24 am

O.O you made a stick comic......wow that should be interesting, in a good way I mean.

Posted: Sun Sep 14, 2008 6:54 am

Sorry it's broken up, stupid photobucket would make it extremely tiny. And I my very first username was mechatamachan6 so yes this is mine.

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FalIenGrace

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Posted: Sun Sep 14, 2008 12:49 pm

lol nice

Posted: Sun Sep 14, 2008 4:27 pm

I had a nice comic making fun of my best freind. It started out with him bragging about being a super warlock and on some person points out that nobody cares. So he decides to smite this person who doesn't care(loking like an idiot) while the person is perplexed on how a hat just appeared on my friends head and changes to different hats in an instant.Finally after a few attempts (and hat changes) he actually smites the person.

In our middle school years my friend said that he was a warlock and stuck to it for a while. XD

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FalIenGrace

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Posted: Mon Sep 15, 2008 6:32 pm

lol nice. I wish I could have seen that.

Posted: Tue Sep 16, 2008 5:38 pm

I wish i still had it. sweatdrop

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