Kitsuta
I think it's good that you went one step further and infused symbolism into your photography -- the willingness to go the extra mile in your work makes the difference between producing good art and producing GREAT art.
Thank you so much! The teacher thought so as well. I got an A+ for this one.
Kitsuta
Just a few nitpicks -- my monitor can handle very dark colors, and I did look at the full view, and I came to the conclusion that the hands get a bit too dark. Especially the 'closed' hand; I see what you were trying to do with the harsh lighting, but it blends in too much with the black matte you have around the two photographs and confuses the eye quite a bit, especially on the smaller version. I would recommend you give the hand more space like you did with the 'open' hand. I know you probably wanted to give the closed hand more emotion by making it bigger, but IMHO tranquility is just as strong of an emotion as anger/violence. It's up to you. If you can't/don't change it, that's fine.
I have two monitors and one is older so I can understand the problem of it looking too dark. But trust me. Face to face the piece's contrast is right on. The problem in this case is a technical one because of the hardward used to view it.
On the sizing... I hate to say this but... well, it just happened like that. I think it is mainly because the 'angery' hand is comming at us i.e. it is for-shortened. Where-as the other hand is resting at a different angle is is to the side.
I felt the balance was fine between them. I think the problem you are having with the closed fist might be because it is right up against the edge of the viewing area. Trust me, with the side borders it looks more like it is slamming into them adding to the effect.
Kitsuta
Another thing.. the black matte is all well and good, but it makes the piece look a little unfinished for two reasons. One is that it's uneven for no discernable reason -- why is there more black on top? Why isn't there any black on the sides? It doesn't make sense. I know your school project might constrict you on this, but I would love some kind of title on the bottom to make this piece a little more polished.
I'm sorry you feel it loses something because of the matting.
The matting was done by hand per the instructer's specs.
The label is on the back. We have a particular label we must
use and a certain spot on the back of the piece where it
must be placed.
I am a Communication Design major at TSU and our teachers
are professionals in their individual fields. They all take presentation
compleatly seriously and all student work is not only expected,
but
required to meet industry standards.
This was done for my first ComDes Foundation's course.
So he was the most easy going on the mouting as
it is going to get for me. He broke it down to the basic
steps. I.E. We were not required to put on a 'cover flap'
which is trasparancy paper that covers the front, perfecty
to size and shape, with a 2'' tapered back that must be
attatched with white masking tape. With the tape the corners
must be trimmed to contenue the vertical that the tapered
back of the transparency paper creates.
And thats not getting into dimentions. The norm for dimentions
is 2'' top and sides and the 3'' bottom. For this he had different
dimentions for the piece. Though, I believe that the side edges
are actually 2'' ea. at least... maybe 3''? I am at work right now
so I will let you know later. In anycase, I believe that the edges
were trimmed off due to the limited size of my scanner. If you
think it is seriously detrimental I can photograph the piece,
or maybe add the border in again digitially as photographing
a piece instead of scanning usually loses something.
Thank you so much for the feedback!
I hope to see more people not only respond to my stuff,
but start posting their stuff as well!
