|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
 Posted: Fri Aug 08, 2008 6:03 pm
Mirabelle Jade was supposed to be a case that the hospital workers had seen hundreds of times. She was supposed to be a mother’s tradgedy… but Mirabelle Jade wasn’t a normal girl.
When she was born, her heart was weak. Too weak. Nothing could be done to save her, and it was told to her mother that her baby girl was guaranteed to die. It was for this reason that they let her hold her.
They told her she would only live an hour or so, if that. But Mirabelle Jade did not die within the hour. Nor the next, or the next… she continued to breath and the more she did, the stronger her heartbeat.
Many have sworn that as the hours passed they saw a light around her, but only for a moment. By the next morning, anyone who had not seen her progress would have thought she was a normal baby. But that morning, the baby girl’s mother only just dared enough to whisper her name… “Mirabelle”.
|
 |
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Posted: Fri Aug 08, 2008 6:14 pm
whew. i hope you like it. It took me long enough....
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Posted: Fri Aug 08, 2008 6:22 pm
Hmm...
I like how the baby girl's name is Mirabelle.
Because it sounds likes / reminds me of miracle.
Which is pretty cool, considering what she overcame.
I don't know if that was intentional or not...
but, yeah, very cool still.
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Posted: Fri Aug 08, 2008 7:11 pm
It was, Izzy. IT was. *nodnod*
hrmm...it's kinda melodramatic. too, like...soap opera. Cliche. But I like where that prologue was going...if you could just write it in a way that didn't make the narrator sound like a total douche (talking all fancy and dramatically and all) then it would be kickass.
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Reply
