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 Posted: Tue Apr 22, 2008 12:27 pm
Well, remember back in elementary school when your teacher would have everybody sit in a circle and tell a story sentebce-by-sentence? Well, this is kind of like that, only you write it paragraph-by-paragraph!
Paragraphs have to be 1-6 sentences long. They also have to make sence.
EXAMPLE:
Good Paragraph:
Sakura happily skipped into her best friend, and greatest rival, Ino's flower shop, she was wearing her best dress and had pulled her hair back with green clips to match her eyes; She had just had the greatest idea in the history of the earth! She was going to bring Sasuke flowers in the hospital: surely he would like her then!
A good paragraph should be descriptive and have relatively good grammar.
Bad Paragraph:
Joe Boband Norm had a cool-as idea! they were gonna go get high behind the old gass station! so, joe Bob adn Norm ran like ed edd and eddy and got some pot outta their garden, then they ran behind the gas station and got high! but all the sudden, Tsunade came out and kicked their asses! LETS-GET-HIGH-NO-JUTSU! THE END!
Thats a baaaaaad paragraph.
1: It has NOTHING to do with the Naruto series. Not the past, present or future.
2: We don't even know what Joe, Bob and Norm look like.
3: People can't just appear. If they use that apperating jutsu, then make it sound believeable, like:
All of the sudden we heard a loud crack behind us! Oh crap, I thought as I turned around and his the book behind my back. To all of our horror, we saw Kakashi-sensei behind us, he was so mad he was red in the face!
"Where. Is. My. Book."
"N-no where sensei! We haven't seen it since we saw you last, right guys?"
"Yeah!"
People just CAN'T randomly appear.
4: Lets-get-high-no-jutsu? No, people shouldn't make up random jutsu unless it's believeable, and relavent.
One more thing:
You can't just write somthing like:
Then Kakashi-sensei did a set of all-too-famillar hand seals, "1000 Years Of Pain!" He shout--- Oh HI MAN!!! --- ed...
If you want to say hi to someone, PM them, or if you know them in real life, call them or somthing. Not here.
And if you have any questions, write your paragraph, then ask/answer questions.
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Posted: Tue Apr 22, 2008 12:29 pm
This Story begins in the midst of a struggle; a young boy by the name of Shaku was being closely followed by another with eyes as pale as the moon. “Why do you chase me, I have done nothing to you!” panted Shaku. “I cannot let a demon such as yourself into Konoha,” says the pale eyed boy, “yes I can see the chakra of the hell hound within you.” Shaku stared back in shock, “Wh- who are you!?” he asked. “My name is Neji of the Hyuuga Clan, remember it well!” replies Neji.
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This is the beginning of a story i made up, i wanted to see where others could take it, but don’t butcher it too much, Shaku isn't evil, he is the kind who would sacrifice his life 2 save his friends.
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Posted: Wed Apr 23, 2008 4:10 pm
samuraikizu This Story begins in the midst of a struggle; a young boy by the name of Shaku was being closely followed by another with eyes as pale as the moon. “Why do you chase me, I have done nothing to you!” panted Shaku. “I cannot let a demon such as yourself into Konoha,” says the pale eyed boy, “yes I can see the chakra of the hell hound within you.” Shaku stared back in shock, “Wh- who are you!?” he asked. “My name is Neji of the Hyuuga Clan, remember it well!” replies Neji. ___________________________________________________________ This is the beginning of a story i made up, i wanted to see where others could take it, but don’t butcher it too much, Shaku isn't evil, he is the kind who would sacrifice his life 2 save his friends. Hiro had just defeated a rock ninja in the Rock Village itself. He noticed the kid in trouble, so naturally, he turned his head and walked away minding his own business.
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