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Posted: Sat Dec 01, 2007 6:03 am

this is an awsum song (kind messed up)

go to sleep, close you eyes
and dream of broken butterflies
that tore thier wings against a thorn
you know the pain that they have
borne.

Silver metal shines so bright
scarlet blood feels so right
dream of the blood trickling down
wake up just before you drown

moonlight shining off your tears
as you bleed out your worst fears
so tonight when you start to cry
whisper the cutters lullaby

hushabye baby you almost dead
you have no pulse and your pillow is red
your family hates you and your friends let you bleed
Sleep tight with a knife 'cause its all that you need

rockabye baby broken and scarred
you didnt know life was this hard
time to end the pain that you hid so well
And down will come baby straight to hell

x_me.. just me_x

Posted: Sat Dec 01, 2007 3:38 pm

hmm...I dunno whether to like it or not!
Tis a nice lil emo poem m'dear.
and its neat, with the verses and what not.
no doubt you'll have lil' emo n00bs tellin you how great it is!
well done...I think 0_o

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Posted: Sat Dec 01, 2007 6:15 pm

It's ok, It could be better. the first stanza was fantastic but the rest of it kinda detiriorated...you could've used a different format instead of rhyming couplets.

Posted: Sat Dec 01, 2007 8:50 pm

you should say bore instead of borne
and WRITE SOMETHING HAPPY

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Posted: Sun Dec 02, 2007 1:42 pm

Soviet Mudkipz

you should say bore instead of borne
and WRITE SOMETHING HAPPY

teenagers rarely write happy things m'dear, no matter how much you tell them to!

Posted: Thu Dec 06, 2007 4:57 pm

I love the poem! I think it's really, really, awesome! That's one of the best poems I've read on gaia. biggrin

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Posted: Thu Dec 06, 2007 9:26 pm

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I love the poem! I think it's really, really, awesome! That's one of the best poems I've read on gaia. biggrin

I agree.

Posted: Fri Dec 07, 2007 4:16 pm

You should do more. XD

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Posted: Thu Dec 20, 2007 10:50 pm

that was beautiful.

Posted: Mon Dec 24, 2007 9:27 am

Soviet Mudkipz

you should say bore instead of borne
and WRITE SOMETHING HAPPY

I wrote a happy song once.

Except it was more like a "happy raep tiem" song, does that count? Schadenfreude is still happiness.

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Posted: Tue Dec 25, 2007 10:37 am

That's so good. crying

My friend who on here is called GEMOBOY1 has been said to have committed suicide last thursday.

I really wish that he had heard this song before he went...

*sniff* crying

Posted: Sun Jan 20, 2008 4:53 pm

I like.
Very Intreging.
You should work on it a bit more though.
But I do still like it.
=]

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Posted: Tue Jan 22, 2008 11:00 am

Hosoi-Chan_Angel

That's so good. crying

My friend who on here is called GEMOBOY1 has been said to have committed suicide last thursday.

I really wish that he had heard this song before he went...

*sniff* crying

OMFG!!! FALSE ALARM! HE'S ALIVE!!!!!! biggrin sweatdrop sorry about that lol. we thought he was dead. foe more information please contact Meassface2

Posted: Tue Jan 22, 2008 11:11 am

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this is an awsum song (kind messed up)

go to sleep, close you eyes
and dream of broken butterflies
that tore thier wings against a thorn
you know the pain that they have
borne.

Silver metal shines so bright
scarlet blood feels so right
dream of the blood trickling down
wake up just before you drown

moonlight shining off your tears
as you bleed out your worst fears
so tonight when you start to cry
whisper the cutters lullaby

hushabye baby you almost dead
you have no pulse and your pillow is red
your family hates you and your friends let you bleed
Sleep tight with a knife 'cause its all that you need

rockabye baby broken and scarred
you didnt know life was this hard
time to end the pain that you hid so well
And down will come baby straight to hell

x_me.. just me_x

that's the best lullabye i've ever heard! do you have a tune for it? if u do then u could probably record it and put it on your profile. either way i want that song! domokun

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Posted: Tue Jan 22, 2008 11:15 am

-Isel-

Soviet Mudkipz

you should say bore instead of borne
and WRITE SOMETHING HAPPY

I wrote a happy song once.

Except it was more like a "happy raep tiem" song, does that count? Schadenfreude is still happiness.

Isel are you speaking german?

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