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 Posted: Sat Aug 13, 2005 7:07 pm
I'm writing a story about a high-school girl. Surprise, sursprise. but what makes it better is that it's a romance novel between her and another female student. heart awww. It's so cute. whee
I don't have a basic storyline set. It's still running around in my head. But I've got the character profiles down pretty good:
character one: Faye (no last name yet.. i'm bad at that.)
age: 15
grade: freshman, story begins somewhere during semester 2.
looks like: Violet hair( 3nodding ), greenish grey eyes, tall, thin.
trait: has an ADD problem xd
andd.....
character two: Madeline (also no last name.. has to be something French.)
age:15
grade: freshman also :3
looks like: pale, black hair, dark brown eyes, tall, thin.
trait: artistic, just moved over from France to America over the Christmas holiday
Okay, so there are the profiles.
Basic overview: Faye had always automatically assumed that she was straight, until her freshman year in high school. She started questioning it, but didn't really give it that much thought, until the day Madeline catches her eye. ( heart whee heart ) [foreshadowingggg! ^^]
Madeline was always a lesbian. She'd known it for years now, and had had a horrible break up a year ago with her long-time girlfriend in France. Nothing since then. Madeline had to move to America because her family was very poor and she had grandparents in the states. She decided it would be best, because her parents could barely get enough money to feed the three of them. So two would be easier, she figured, and her parents consented to letting her move out. Madeline hadn't had many friends in her hometown anyway. More enemies than friends.
This is what I've got so far:
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She was the new girl at my school. A high-school freshman girl, like me.
I was sitting in the over-air-conditioned classroom for Algebra during second period, ignoring quadratic equasions and square roots, just sneeking peeks to my left at the girl sitting alone in the corner in the room. She was avidly taking notes of the lessons from what I could see. The girl wore a red T-shirt with a black heart stitched on the front, blue jeans with patched knees, and her black hair was up in a messy bun. She paused her pen to blow a red hair ribbon out of her face, and her dark brown eyes flickered up and I casually pretended to be fascinated by the wall on that side of the room. I turned back to my own notes. Or, lack thereof. Still tuning out the teacher's lectures on factoring, my ADD kicked into gear and my mind started wandering. Why was that girl sitting by herself? She's only been here a week, sure, but shouldn't someone be able to make at least a few friends by then? Was she anti-social, or one of those scary keep-away-from-me people who'd bite your head off if you made any sudden movements?
Whoever she was, she had a pretty outfit today. . . . I wondered whether or not she'd sewn the heart on her shirt on her own or bought it like that. Which soon turned to my realization that I'd probably suck at sewing anything at all. And then I found out that so much as smiling in Algebra was a mistake.
"Do you find factoring amusing, miss?" I could almost hear every pencil in the room stop writing simultaneously so the students could all turn to me and see what was going on. I always hated when that happened.
"Oh, um, but. . ." Okay, Faye, time for a smooth reply. . . I thought. "But I love Algebra and I was overcome with joy and couldn't help myself!" I stopped. Crap. That was far from a believable answer. Faint laughing rippled across the people seated around me, and my face started getting red. The teacher fell silent, shook her head, rolled her eyes, and sighed the sigh that says, "Oh, God, my students are all morons this year. . .".
I let out a breath that I guess I had been holding in the whole time and looked down, continuing to pretend to be writing. Along comes Mr. ADD, giving me a good round-house kick in the brain. My pale blue-gray eyes ventured to the left again, settling on that girl. She was looking back at me this time. Too late for a smooth cover-up, so I smiled and waved at her. Her eyes showed a small flicker of surprise, then she smiled back at me and offered a small wave. Yay, she seems nice. . . I thought as I turned back around. Just in time to copy down the homework assignment.
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Pretty nifty, ne? I'm happy with it... so far. >_< I'll probably do revising later on but oh well.
NOW FOR THE REASON I'M EVEN POSTING THIS. mrgreen
I need a girl to help me write this story! My idea was, we can email it back and forth(or maybe just Gaia PM it back and forth) See, I'd write one part, she'd do the next, then send it to me again, and so on.
Anyone interested?
REQUIREMENTS:
-need to be willing to STICK WITH THIS.
-need to be a LITERATE writer with some imagination :3
-need to NOT be one of those anti-romance rebellios people. Because if you are, this story isn't for you, hun. xd
NOTE: This forum is to get someone who I think would be good at this. I may not choose the first person. I need proof that you meet my requirements, okay?
NOTE NOTE NOTE: This forum is NOT for the continuation of the story! So don't try writing the next part yourself here >_< There's something admirable about someone who actually takes time to read a whole thread starter post before responding, haha.
RATING: PG-13 at the most, please. eh, no heavy sex scenes on your part of the story if you happen to be chosen. =__= That just kinda ruins the cuteness of it.
Feel free to ask questions
okay, I'll check back soon to see if I've got any takers on this offer! ^_^ until then, ja ne!
heart 3nodding
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Posted: Sat Aug 13, 2005 7:12 pm
I read that and liked it alot! I hope you continue it! Is it going to be one of those "WAFF" storyes? (stands for: Warm And Fuzzy Feeling) I like those..
Oh but I carn't help you i'm afraid. I'm a crap writer... good luck though! ^-^
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Posted: Sat Aug 13, 2005 7:15 pm
neoncode I read that and liked it alot! I hope you continue it! Is it going to be one of those "WAFF" storyes? (stands for: Warm And Fuzzy Feeling) I like those.. Oh but I carn't help you i'm afraid. I'm a crap writer... good luck though! ^-^
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Posted: Sat Aug 13, 2005 7:17 pm
IDEA! 3nodding
The story will be posted chapter-by-chapter for others to read at www.fictionpress.com
Once the first chapter is up, I'll get a link up here.
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Posted: Sat Aug 13, 2005 7:17 pm
Duct-Tape-chan neoncode I read that and liked it alot! I hope you continue it! Is it going to be one of those "WAFF" storyes? (stands for: Warm And Fuzzy Feeling) I like those.. Oh but I carn't help you i'm afraid. I'm a crap writer... good luck though! ^-^ Meh and a bit of angest never hurt anyone. Oh and I heart your sig BTW. I think I said that already but I carn't rember where...
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Posted: Sat Aug 13, 2005 7:21 pm
neoncode Duct-Tape-chan neoncode I read that and liked it alot! I hope you continue it! Is it going to be one of those "WAFF" storyes? (stands for: Warm And Fuzzy Feeling) I like those.. Oh but I carn't help you i'm afraid. I'm a crap writer... good luck though! ^-^ Meh and a bit of angest never hurt anyone. Oh and I heart your sig BTW. I think I said that already but I carn't rember where...
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Posted: Sun Aug 14, 2005 12:07 am
Doode, I'd SO love to help you write this!!!
If you want a sample of my writing... umm... well, I'll PM it to you!
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Posted: Sun Aug 14, 2005 8:04 am
LibidinalCatharsis Doode, I'd SO love to help you write this!!! If you want a sample of my writing... umm... well, I'll PM it to you! Oh c'mon! Be brave and post it here!
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Posted: Sun Aug 14, 2005 1:56 pm
I'll have to make a new thread for it... I've been posting it in another guild in installments. It's called Bruises, look for it!
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Posted: Sun Aug 14, 2005 3:55 pm
Aw, that's cute.
I wouldn't have any time to write it with you or anything (plus you've already got a nibble ^_^), but I'd like to help edit the finished product.
A few beginning suggestions though - try to be a little more exciting with the descriptions. It's cute, but it's so generic. Use your own words, describe from the heart rather then the eyes. Also, some of the grammer could use a little more structure. Good grammar really makes a story seem...not just professional, but truthful and the reader is far more willing to suspend their disbelief if it sounds like the author knows what they're doing. For example - "I turned back to my own notes. Or, lack thereof." Should be more like, "I turned back to my own notes, or, lack thereof." Little things like that make a difference. Oh yeah! Another thing would be to stop mentioning ADD o.O I'm quite certain that if she really had ADD, she wouldn't realize when she was "slipping out of focus." It's not a concious thing, from what I understand.
Just a few tips...that became many tips xP
Good luck and keep us updated!
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Posted: Sun Aug 14, 2005 10:50 pm
rurica Aw, that's cute. I wouldn't have any time to write it with you or anything (plus you've already got a nibble ^_^), but I'd like to help edit the finished product. A few beginning suggestions though - try to be a little more exciting with the descriptions. It's cute, but it's so generic. Use your own words, describe from the heart rather then the eyes. Also, some of the grammer could use a little more structure. Good grammar really makes a story seem...not just professional, but truthful and the reader is far more willing to suspend their disbelief if it sounds like the author knows what they're doing. For example - "I turned back to my own notes. Or, lack thereof." Should be more like, "I turned back to my own notes, or, lack thereof." Little things like that make a difference. Oh yeah! Another thing would be to stop mentioning ADD o.O I'm quite certain that if she really had ADD, she wouldn't realize when she was "slipping out of focus." It's not a concious thing, from what I understand. Just a few tips...that became many tips xP Good luck and keep us updated!
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Posted: Sat Oct 22, 2005 10:10 pm
Good luck! What you have so far is really good, a real pageturner! I also like to write, mainly fanfiction, but one or two of my own. The only thing is, i'm a real procrastinator when it comes time to type it. Writing is a great way to express one's self. I'll bbe watching your story closely, and I hope that the rest is as good as this bit! Great story idea by the way!
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Posted: Sun Oct 30, 2005 8:20 pm
Please, please don't write a sad ending!!! That would undermine the cuteness and make me so very sad.
I really liked this. Are you going to be posting the whole story here (or a link to it) when you find someone to write it with?
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Posted: Sat Nov 05, 2005 4:12 pm
I'm a writer too.
I would love to help you write it...If you'd like.
^.^
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Posted: Thu Jan 12, 2006 3:07 pm
I'm a writer (or mostly aspiring) and would love to help as well. My work is on fictionpress under the name of serahikari if you wanna check it out.
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