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 Posted: Sun Nov 11, 2007 4:59 am
This is very bizzare, and I would like to know what others think of it please.
Yeah...
Prepare for some major head-scratching.
I guess the title is...The Beauty and the Beasts. other title ideas would be accpeted gratefully.
I perosnally think it isn't that great, partly because I don't really understand why I wrote it...
I'll stop blabbling.
Here you go:
In the roaring waterfalls, I witnessed my birth
Was I weak? Nay,
For I was alive for the journey of all time
And dreams
If I dream one night, what will I see?
Death? Hope? Pain?
A lifetime loneliness, or a lifetime of ignorance?
I know not, but I know I will brave the future, and dream my past.
With the beauty of Beasts.
A I grew, I became aware of the shadow
The shadow, with the face of God,
Always watching, even when the strongest light
Thinks to purge the darkness
In the light, do I fall to cast another shadow?
Will the world laugh, if I weep?
Will anyone laugh, if I weep?
There is a shadow in the world,
My soul is a cold, quiet thing
Of ice, for to truly be dead,
Need you no longer breathe?
The Ever Dream of my path
Became an Ever Trail of my hope
Leading me though the light and dark,
For it is my Sin,
To live and lie without love,
To be without being,
It is my imaginary Immortal life.
Which began with what?
With a Dream.
Is dying, really killing the pain?
Do we live on after our deaths?
Or is our only chance this feeble existence?
This is my life,
My tourniquet,
So I will lie here,
Forevermore.
In the Night-side of Eden,
The devils dance and the angels play,
Lust and sin reigns free,
And I fear it,
For the hell may consume me,
I long for a saviour,
On a chariot of fire,
To remove my blindness,
Of life and Death,
And everything in-between,
For everything is a reflection of the simple question;
Is Heaven too far away?
In the last dream, I saw you dancing in the moonlight,
I saw your heart breaking,
Withering, for the love of others finally touched you,
You danced for the world, and the world danced for you,
A star in the dark abyssal of time,
Trapped by mortal pain,
A fallen angel - Wings shattered like glass,
Dying for all of eternity,
Never to know the joys of yonder,
As a phantom of this silent stage show.
And now I am a ghost of our love,
A ghost of you,
Guiding my purpose,
Guiding my past,
Upon the night black wings of fate,
My soul wishes to heal the world
And so I will try
But every time I heal one wound
Another is cut, just as deep as the last.
Is it worth giving up, to lie to one side?
It seems so.
But now, at the end,
Where is the love from before?
Or has that also become a forbidden sin?
In death, are we freed from pain?
Or are we left with it?
I know not,
But my questions resonate with a bitter truth
Time,
Time will only ever give us our graves
For without love the world is nothing
A cross, is mere iron and wood
Hope is a mere vision of what we wish for
And the soul is nothing but a name
Without love
So my child, I bless thee
With the hand of knowledge, and a mind that knows no fear.
Go now,
For that is the nature of Beauty
And Beasts.
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Posted: Tue Jan 01, 2008 8:51 pm
Oh wow, that's amazing! It's so...deep. And imagery-containing. And overall very very cool.
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Kitty_Katastrophe Vice Captain
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Posted: Thu Jan 03, 2008 7:56 pm
I'm sorry, I read this awhile ago and forgot to comment. Dx
It's very deep and dark, but it isn't all about that cliché emo stuff that people are writing about. It's very good. I like the imagery you used and the rhythm of the poem very was interesting.
The end was especially eye-catching. After all of the contemplation of death the narrator has been doing, it ends with a blessing and words of wisdom.
I like it a lot. Good job. <3
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