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Noche Flor

PostPosted: Thu Nov 08, 2007 4:20 pm


I have to write a poem about reading for my writing class to be entered in a contest. So if you could give me some reviews. I'm the best writer in my class, by the way, so mine is probably going to be far better than anyone else who did the assignment. (8th grade, so don't expect it to be amazing). I just want to see how others will think of it. You can give me some constructive criticism but I will not change the poem because I want it to be my own work. It's already been printed so I won't waste ink and paper by changing it anyways. Thankies.

Three Rings for the Elven-kings under the sky,*

Delve deep into the story hidden in the pages,

Seven for the Dwarf-lords in their halls of stone,*

Let the words caress you with longing,

Nine for Mortal Men doomed to die,*

Smell the sweet fragrance of long dried ink,

One for the Dark Lord on his dark throne*

And feel the warmth of the story.

In the Land of Mordor where the Shadows lie.*

The yellowing crinkled paper is your earth,

One Ring to rule them all. One Ring to find them.*

The reader is your life blood,

One Ring to bring them all and in the darkness bind them*

The flipping of pages, the air you breathe,

In the Land of Mordor where the Shadows lie.*

And the quest is your lost love.

*From J.R.R. Tolkien's “Lord of The Rings”
PostPosted: Fri Nov 09, 2007 2:12 pm


Quote:
I'm the best writer in my class, by the way, so mine is probably going to be far better than anyone else who did the assignment.

not are you the best writer in your class, you're also soooo modest stare

as for the poem, its not bad, but it just doesnt strike my fancy...

Sforzando Poco


xlost-in-a-dreamx

PostPosted: Fri Nov 09, 2007 9:50 pm


its great! .. but it doesnt catch my attention.. great job though! ^^
PostPosted: Sat Nov 10, 2007 7:01 am


kurosaki_rukia
Quote:
I'm the best writer in my class, by the way, so mine is probably going to be far better than anyone else who did the assignment.

not are you the best writer in your class, you're also soooo modest stare



Sarcasm noted.

Noche Flor


Sforzando Poco

PostPosted: Sat Nov 10, 2007 12:22 pm


Dragon of the Stars
kurosaki_rukia
Quote:
I'm the best writer in my class, by the way, so mine is probably going to be far better than anyone else who did the assignment.

not are you the best writer in your class, you're also soooo modest stare



Sarcasm noted.

sorry, couldnt help it domokun
PostPosted: Sat Nov 10, 2007 6:57 pm


kurosaki_rukia
Dragon of the Stars
kurosaki_rukia
Quote:
I'm the best writer in my class, by the way, so mine is probably going to be far better than anyone else who did the assignment.

not are you the best writer in your class, you're also soooo modest stare



Sarcasm noted.

sorry, couldnt help it domokun


nah. I'da done the same thing if anyone else had said that.

Noche Flor

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