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 Posted: Wed Oct 10, 2007 2:15 pm
I wrote this while listening to Apocalyptica's Hope, the instrumental one, and Rammstein's Feuer und Wasser. This is what came out, lol. It kind of sucks...but yeah. Even in our darkest hour, we can still dream. Even in the midst of terror and grief, the light of joy can outshine the rest.
And we call this becon Hope.
Hope has saved mankind from madness an eternity over. We owe it our lives, and yet it asks for nothing but an open mind and a single thought, a thought of pure satisfaction and nothing more. We cherish Hope, and bring it to us in a time of our need. Never do we think that Hope is what brings us through, or that Hope is what keeps us going. We take it for granted, as do we many things. We are pigs, and take what we need but give nothing back. We take a part of Hope, use it for our own selfish doings, and then toss it aside as if we did everything ourselves.
So prideful are we that we must take something so precious and cast it away like garbage? So prideful are we that we care for nothing but ourseleves?
In these days I watch for Hope. Her becon, a dim light in the distance. She knows I will need her soon, and she comes, calling my name softly. Comforting me with her calls. I need not fear, but still. . . It is so difficult.
The cursing of their tongues at the slightest wrong.
I wish to tell them. . . But they would drive their stakes to my very soul, and tear out my last vestiges of life. They have berated me to my very core, I stand on the verge of insanity. Is loving your sister so wrong?
I take the solid piece of metal in my hands. It feels heavier than ever.
Hope stands by me now, her soft breath tickling my skin as she whispers my name. All fear has left me, I know what I must do.
I am the nightmare of my fathers, the king of all degenerates, and the god of pigs.
These names they have called me, and these names they will never speak again.
Loading the pistol, I creep into their room.
They are the ones with forked tongues.
Pulling back on the lever, I lick my dry, cracked lips.
I am the Saint, they are the demons.
The trigger, I lay it upon my finger.
They belong in hell, I in the highest heavens.
Hope is holding my arm steady, the soft skin of her hands upon my own.
They are the nightmare. And me? Nothing more than an ordinary boy.
I look into their sleeping faces and wish them well.
"Good riddance." And I let the bullets fly.
Blood splashes upon Hope's glowing cheek. I wipe it away. She smiles at me and I know she must go. I wish for her to stay longer, but she has others to tend to. A mothers touch in a child's hand. I kiss her gently, and see her off. That glowing beauty fades into the night and I am again alone.
Though this time, I clung to the part of Hope I borrowed. Never again will I truely be alone, for she will always be by my side.
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Posted: Wed Oct 10, 2007 10:47 pm
I liked it, the flow of it was nicely done, and it was very well detailed.
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Posted: Thu Oct 11, 2007 3:05 pm
At the part where the boy mentions loving his sister, could you figure it was incest? Or was that not plain enough?
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Posted: Thu Oct 11, 2007 4:42 pm
It was kind of obvious, though some people wouldnt see it. I guess it takes a perverted mind to see the bigger picture?
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Posted: Thu Oct 11, 2007 7:57 pm
Ok, well those that don't get it can just read this and then they'l get it, lol. Because people with sick minds are so much smarter. mrgreen
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Posted: Sat Oct 13, 2007 10:09 am
yes we are mrgreen Nice I liked it alot, very dark and um..... killy yeah that's a word right sweatdrop so all in all it was very good and you even got a new word outta the deal.....hehe killy. You should show this off to other people too, like in the main writeing forums get fans and drag em back here mrgreen
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Posted: Sat Oct 13, 2007 1:26 pm
Lol, killy. That's almost as good as dis-began: (verb) The action of not beginning.
Nah I'll just keep this here...
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Posted: Sat Oct 13, 2007 7:23 pm
Selene...did you really write that? That was amazing! It was like a story, but it read like a poem. It was twisted, and creative, and made you think. How'd you come up with it?
So...any chance the Book of the Moon might be resurrected if you get enough praise?
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Posted: Sun Oct 14, 2007 4:35 pm
Selene Blackledge Lol, killy. That's almost as good as dis-began: (verb) The action of not beginning. Nah I'll just keep this here... lol nice I've been dis-begainning alot lately mrgreen you should try I posted my stuff out there and some people liked it, and my writeing sucks mrgreen
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Posted: Sun Oct 14, 2007 6:12 pm
I'm refusing to answer your pole because it does not have the option of "I thought it was a wonderful contributation to the world's literature today and completely support you in your creative delves”
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Posted: Sun Oct 14, 2007 6:56 pm
Wynd Resrect Selene...did you really write that? That was amazing! It was like a story, but it read like a poem. It was twisted, and creative, and made you think. How'd you come up with it? So...any chance the Book of the Moon might be resurrected if you get enough praise? Like I said, I was listening to Rammstein. I get crazy ideas when listening to them. Feuer und Wasser is all about a guy trying to rape a girl and this is what I came up with.... And no, that thing is dead. I hated it from the start.
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Posted: Wed Oct 17, 2007 4:08 pm
I will say it needed some improvement, but the storyline itself was pure genius!
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Posted: Wed Oct 17, 2007 7:16 pm
Not at all actually. I took it frome a book I read when I was kid, with some plot twists, but yeah. It was about a group of kids living in the woods with men trying to kill them for a crime they didn't commit. Of course the Father was NOT trying to rape his daughter, I don't even think it was the dad...but yeah. Not original at all.
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Posted: Thu Oct 25, 2007 4:12 pm
(b***h slap) If I say it's original, it is!
(jk)
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Posted: Thu Oct 25, 2007 5:20 pm
Gatta love the love in this guild.
Anyways, I would like to see more from you.
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