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 Posted: Mon Oct 01, 2007 12:59 pm
I was surprised that at the length of this piece, how complete it seemed. At any rate, any thoughts or criticism are welcomed.
"A Love of No Escape"
Pain, I felt, when we could not be
A feeling I wished you just could see.
I tried to go, just run away
Yet in my mind you were content to stay.
Pain, 'tis said, makes us know what is real.
Is this the price that must be paid to feel?
In my mind, I see you, simply standing there
I try to let you begone; yet I know not to where
I raise the knife in the dark of that thought
Blade strikes down, to redeem the pain wrought
Even in dream, my hand doth freeze, I still choose not to hate
Is it wisdom I have found? Will the pain finally abate?
Pain sears me again, yet even in dream, I could never harm thee.
Have I found another cruel truth of life, or graven image of me?
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Posted: Fri Oct 19, 2007 2:35 pm
It's really beautiful. I love the image, I could see a person just sitting in their room, then all of a sudden clutching their heart in extreme pain. It is quite the lovley visual.
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Posted: Sat Oct 20, 2007 10:25 pm
wandering_poets_soul It's really beautiful. I love the image, I could see a person just sitting in their room, then all of a sudden clutching their heart in extreme pain. It is quite the lovley visual. Thank you. I don't remember exactly the process I went through in writing it, but I wasn't thinking and merely wrote. Those things fueled by emotion are the most powerful works of writing.
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Posted: Fri Oct 26, 2007 2:41 pm
Shinta Hitokiri wandering_poets_soul It's really beautiful. I love the image, I could see a person just sitting in their room, then all of a sudden clutching their heart in extreme pain. It is quite the lovley visual. Thank you. I don't remember exactly the process I went through in writing it, but I wasn't thinking and merely wrote. Those things fueled by emotion are the most powerful works of writing. I agree completley. Some works are without feeling, and are just... .
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Posted: Mon Dec 10, 2007 6:48 pm
this is very well written. love the imagery.
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