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The Reason For Your Death
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Posted: Fri Aug 10, 2007 6:53 pm
Vampire Generation
Chapter One
Bloody Beginnings
The Morning had risen in the sky David Long Awoke from his bed.He had hoped in a way that it would all just be one bad dream.But sure enough as he awoke he looked over to find the dead body of his wife.He wrapped Her in the blanet from head to toe.He then got the Black Tape off of the corner and taped up the blanket.He then went in the kitchen next door and got a Trash Bag He Put Her wrapped body in the trash bag.As he tied the bag he could barely believe this was the woman he had made love just 24 hours before.He dragged the bag downstairs and out into the downstairs basement.Thier lay another body.This one alsohuman.It was the body of his 17 year old daughter.He stopped but a second to stare at the body.He then drug the trash bag out the basement door which led to the garage.He took the keys from his blood Stained Jacket. He opened the Trunk of the car.He placed the trash bag in the trunk and slammed it shut.He then Briefly went in just to retrieve the body of his 17 year old daughter just to throw it violently onto the concrete garage floor.He tok from his pocket some matches two Bottles of lighter fluid he poured a bottle of lighter fluid on his car. He then poured lighter fluid on the bloody clothes of his daughter he then set both the car and his daughter ablazehe then slowly opened the garage door.As he walked out into the world he at an instance realized that the world would see this and think him a murderer not for a second believing any of the sotry he had to tell.He then smiled and mumbled to himself."They wont think me a murderer if i myself am dead.He at once took from his jacket the last item he had hidden within a single handgun.He put it to his head and pulled the trigger.All at once came a click.Then he remembered he had used all six clips last night.He was sure now he would go to prison.He dropped the gun and fell to his knees as he agian mumbled to himself."They will not believe my story.Not a word i say will they understand."
He then stood up and let out a loud yell." I KILL OUT OF LOVE NOT ANGER"
He then fell back to his knees and agian and spoke talking to himself in a low voice.
"It was him that wretched demon beast of the underworld.I will destroy you Lord Dracula i swear to it!"
To Be Continued
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Posted: Sat Aug 11, 2007 3:28 am
Wow, that sucks. That's not even a page let alone a chapter.
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Posted: Sat Aug 11, 2007 8:20 am
i think its pretty good, although i always enjoy anything having to do with vampires so i cant judge it fairly
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Posted: Sat Aug 11, 2007 8:43 am
Wow, ANOTHER vampire story.....very unoriginal. Grammar is terrible.
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Posted: Sat Aug 11, 2007 9:23 am
did somebody say LESTAT.....
or emily rose... or what ever the ******** her name was
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Posted: Sat Aug 11, 2007 9:35 am
My novel > your novel. And I've only got (at least in my view) a fairly sub-par prologue done.
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Posted: Sat Aug 11, 2007 9:51 am
I could sneeze out a better story than you.
Picture books are more captivating than that crap.
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Posted: Sat Aug 11, 2007 10:11 am
thank you demona.As for the rest of you i didn't askk for your opinion.It was siimply a tpopic for my story
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Posted: Sat Aug 11, 2007 10:14 am
You didn't ask for our opinions because we thought it was s**t...double standard much?
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Posted: Sat Aug 11, 2007 10:27 am
Wow, I actually just read it. I enjoyed the random capitalization and the disregard of commas. Also, it didn't make any sense. I was going to fix all the errors, but I don't want to waste my time on you or your crappy story.
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Posted: Sat Aug 11, 2007 10:29 am
The Reason For Your Death I KILL OUT OF LOVE NOT ANGER ... xd xd xd
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Posted: Sat Aug 11, 2007 10:56 am
Wow eek I must say that this is
s**t.
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Posted: Sat Aug 11, 2007 1:47 pm
"Hi. I just posted this in a public forum, where in a best case scenario 2000 people can see it but I didn't want anyone to comment on it. Well except for Demona, because she likes anything to do with Vampires, even if it is utter crap, like my story is."
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Posted: Sat Aug 11, 2007 1:53 pm
Where's Kronik when we need him?
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Posted: Sun Aug 12, 2007 8:42 am
kronik? the attention whore who comes and say no one cares everywhere?
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