I really need some one to proof read and criticize this as harshly as they can please.

First kisses should be spontaneous. Unexpected. Right? That’s how I felt. I always felt that way, but when it came down to it I wanted my first kiss with Ned to happen right then and there. I’m not really sure why, but I wanted to kiss him in front of everyone at the Halloween Park, but we weren’t even dating yet and that would be totally wrong. As time went on and we finally became a couple we still hadn’t kiss. I wasn’t sure why not, I mean it seemed like everyone else had kissed their boyfriends on their first date, then again, I’m not like most people. It was homecoming night when we first kissed. The music was blaring and we had just finished a slow dance. We were standing near the door up against the gym wall mats. I was talking to him one minute and the next minute we shared our first kiss. After he kissed me he simply said “You talk to much.” I was smiling a lot. After all, my first kiss was spontaneous and unexpected.