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 Posted: Sat Jul 07, 2007 9:22 am
Let's liven this forum up! This is an... odd drabble, one which I would very enjoy some critique on the flow, and what I could do to improve it.
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“Someday, will I be as tall as that tree?” The oak ascended stately to the blue, leaves tinged the delicate green of spring, the gnarled trunk which suffered harsh times, enduring through them all.
Tiny feet rose on tiptoes, wobbly legs with scrawny knees stretched their full length, the small torso arched back, arms reminiscent of twigs shot straight up, small hands with thin fingers marked an imagined line in the air, and a face blissfully imagined what it would be like to be as tall as that tree.
“Taller, my little imp.” Though the pointed ears begged to differ.
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Posted: Sun Jul 08, 2007 8:43 pm
I don't really understand it, there isn't much more than a couple paragraphs worth of story.
It does have a nice ominous feel to it though. I like imps, they're funny, scary, and short, just to add to both of the previous qualities! I think I might write a story about an imp now!
Maybe... if I have time, sorry I haven't been on at all, I've just changed jobs and have taken on a contract to paint some models for a friend of mine. I'll do my best to get back on here and kick this place's notch up a bit!
the Lion
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Posted: Fri Jul 20, 2007 9:53 am
Interesting section. This seems like the prose equivalent of Haiku poetry--a simple scene is painted with a few words, and those words become the seed for an entire scene or story. Perhaps we could even make some kind of contest out of this--what large scene can you create starting from this simple root? What story can you imagine that begins with this simple glimpse?
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Posted: Tue Jul 31, 2007 10:25 am
3nodding Exactly, KK. A single moment is more important when you have a 100-word limit than linear plot.
There has been some contests by ivydoll and cafebrulot. They've seemed to work well...
After the ginormous August challenge maybe we could do a drabble contest? I'll sponsor! lol
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