Shadowed Scourge

Deep blue eyes were narrowed to slits. He heard the cat's command, the prisoners cry.
"Take me to what will scourge this leaders land." The blue eyes narrowed even further. So the young she-cat won. Those were the words that told him. He hid in the shadows, glaring as three cats came to his den. Bone led the two cats to him. "I have put out the fire. All that is left now is to wait to kill the tiger who will return to the scorched battlefeild." You could almost not see who had talked.
But Bone smacked the small cat with his paw and screeched, "How dare you speak aloud, without permission from your leader!" The prisoner flinched with fear as the blood from the small cat splattered across his face. But his own paw came out from the shadow and hit Bone. He collapsed, panting with fear.
"How dare you lie!" The hidden cat screamed. "How dare you act without command! You deserve worse than the punishent I have just given you! Yet you think YOU can command a cat with no leader?!" Bone lifted hid bleeding head slowly.
"I-I am sorry... I did not kno-" Bone broke off as the cat rose from the shadow, then revealed himself to the prisoner. He saw doubt flicker across the eyes of the flame-orange cat. He padded over to the prisoner and pinned him to the ground with a simple flick of his paw.
"So, this is Firestar?" he asked. He heard shuffling as Bone scrambled to his paws, blood still dripping from his head. The small she-cat nodded.
"This is the cat. He was easy to earn trust from, easy to manipulate. I am honored that I could be the one to capture him, Scourge." The small she-cat's eyes sparkled with pleasure, then shifted to Bone as he spat at her.
"How dare you show no respect for your leader, how dare you speak his name-" Bone broke off again at a cold look from Scourge.
"Thank you, Bone, for that interruption. I thought I had shown you the minimum I could punish you with." Scourge snarled. He turned back to the prisoner, Firestar. "You thought this girl was on your side. But no. She was a loner, and still is. She has no leader. but she was on my side. The winning side."
"Plaguedpaw- Plaguedscorpion!" Firestar choked to the she-cat. "Help- Help me!" Firestar looked at her with pleading eyes. Scourge laughed at his plea.
"Plaguedscorpion, eh? What a nice name for her. Plague must be honored." Plague grinned, then with permission with Scourge by a nod of his head, padded over to Firestar, unshealthing her claws as she walked. "Firestar. We need you to give us information. Help us, you could say." Firestar's pupils dialated with fear. Plague's eyes flashed with delight when she stood next to him, her claws easily the same size as Scourges- huge, reinforced with sharpened, deadly dog's teeth.
 "C-cour..." Firestar started to speak, but slowly stopped as Plague raised a bloodstained claw. Scourge's tail swept over Plague's shoulder, then padded over to Bone.
'I'll leave you to it, then. Tell me what he knows." Scourge's shadow remained longer than he did, gone before the words could echo around his alley in the Twolegplace. Firestar's eyes were now fear and confusion mixed. Plague grinned evily, towering over the Thunderclan leader who lay cowering on the ground.
"What... What is it you want, Plaguedscorpion?' Firestar managed to meow. "Why have you brought me here, why are you threatening me?" Firestar looked so helpless in the Twolegplace. Plague couldnt help but laugh.
"You are going to tell me EVERYTHING you know about your friend. Because, once we're rid of you, we'll kill him." Firestar's eyes grew huge.
"F-friend? Who...?" Firestar spluttered, his mind racing. He thought of his best friend, Greystripe, and his mate, Sandstorm... But his thoughts were interrupted when he felt a blow to his head. The next moment, he lay sprawled on the ground, his neck fur growing damp and heavy with sticky, reeking blood. Plague snarled at the defenseless leader. He choked, he spat blood onto the ground in front of him, then muttered a name. "Cou-" He broke off, hacking, choking and spitting more blood to his feet. "Couragepaw." The name came out clear, and Plague's eyes looked glossy.
"Sh... Shut up! I don't care, he doesnt care- Tell me about Tigerstar!" Plague shreiked. She stood next to Firestar, dug her claws into his neck, and wrenched his muzzle next to hers. "TELL ME! Or I will kill you!"


This is what I have so far. I have posted this in the chat thread, so most of you have already read this. I either will add more in this post, or will make new posts continuing this. Plz tell me what you guys think! 3nodding

yeah i posted this on the wrong thread. I am a tooo'aaal nooooooob. >_>