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 Posted: Tue Jun 03, 2014 1:48 pm
gray reaper KogaP Elinoi KogaP Looks like I picked a good time to come online today, huh? Would seem like it P:
Saw you came on after I posted haha.
I'm supposed to be working out right now, but I figured I'll eat lunch first and then workout, and while I'm eating I might as well do a little rping. sorry to remark on this topic, but you can actually gain morer injuries if you eat before a work out. also my character is done i think may you please review to see if i have errors. Some believe that, but it's just cardio training for Kendo today, so it's nothing important.
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Posted: Tue Jun 03, 2014 2:57 pm
Not Koga and hopefully not stepping on toes once more, but I'd highly recommend fixing some of the coding errors... You should probably be linking pictures as an url rather than posting the image directly. And putting the primary image link for your character near the top. So it reflects how the profile is intended to look. The code being [ imgright ] malformedurl <-insert the url for the picture here [ /imgright ]
Its near the top under character name.
Linking an url with a description looks like [ url= ] [ /url ]
Also the character quote is under where it should be... "character quote here" means you delete the text in between and throw your quote in there. Gehenna isn't spelled correctly in the profile. And there is a number of places where you've put information in wrong sections entirely: weight section contains both height AND weight for example. You refer to Zombie Warrior meister type simply as "Zombie" which is incorrect :> Additionally you've a choice of a rune OR 3 pieces of equipment. One or the other- not neither. Finally, the expertise section should have THREE bulleted points, no more no less, with descriptions of why your character excels at the particular area- be it gained due to the skill being apart of a strong family tradition, years of fist fighting or whatever. But there is a reason why your character is good at something, right? Bullet points are created by typing [ * ]
Remove the spaces to get the actual codes (:
Not related to coding but you really should elaborate on personality and other sections where your given the option to talk about things in depth. Right now doesn't look like you've put much effort into the profile.. Which even with the sloppy coding isn't complete. You haven't even filled in what your character is a kin of... By that I mean which demon lord he is in some form related to.. The demon lords have lesser demons of their kind, so you aren't directly related to Satan or something. Your character has to be kin to one of the six demon lords. Check out the Demonology post in the Demon creation guide forum.
If your unsure you can always check another approved profile to get the gist of what should be done for yours.
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Posted: Tue Jun 03, 2014 3:06 pm
Elinoi Not Koga and hopefully not stepping on toes once more, but I'd highly recommend fixing some of the coding errors... You should probably be linking pictures as an url rather than posting the image directly. And putting the primary image link for your character near the top. So it reflects how the profile is intended to look. The code being [ imgright ] malformedurl <-insert the url for the picture here [ /imgright ]
Its near the top under character name.
Linking an url with a description looks like [ url= ] [ /url ]
Also the character quote is under where it should be... "character quote here" means you delete the text in between and throw your quote in there. Gehenna isn't spelled correctly in the profile. And there is a number of places where you've put information in wrong sections entirely: weight section contains both height AND weight for example. You refer to Zombie Warrior meister type simply as "Zombie" which is incorrect :> Additionally you've a choice of a rune OR 3 pieces of equipment. One or the other- not neither. Finally, the expertise section should have THREE bulleted points, no more no less, with descriptions of why your character excels at the particular area- be it gained due to the skill being apart of a strong family tradition, years of fist fighting or whatever. But there is a reason why your character is good at something, right? Bullet points are created by typing [ * ]
Remove the spaces to get the actual codes (:
Not related to coding but you really should elaborate on personality and other sections where your given the option to talk about things in depth. Right now doesn't look like you've put much effort into the profile.. Which even with the sloppy coding isn't complete. You haven't even filled in what your character is a kin of... By that I mean which demon lord he is in some form related to.. The demon lords have lesser demons of their kind, so you aren't directly related to Satan or something. Your character has to be kin to one of the six demon lords. Check out the Demonology post in the Demon creation guide forum.
If your unsure you can always check another approved profile to get the gist of what should be done for yours.
ah i see ill be editing shortly and returning to under construction.
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Posted: Tue Jun 03, 2014 5:46 pm
Elinoi you are 100% correct, and in addition to what she has said, I'm going to suggest that you actually start your profile over. If you would like help I will be more than happy to help you one section at a time.
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Posted: Tue Jun 03, 2014 8:04 pm
I don't know what kind of Meister to make. Problems.
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Posted: Tue Jun 03, 2014 8:12 pm
That's not good, at all. Try really hard to make someone you want to become Paladin one day.
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Posted: Tue Jun 03, 2014 8:38 pm
KogaP That's not good, at all. Try really hard to make someone you want to become Paladin one day. If that was directed at me my character would be the worst paladin ever based on the personality I'm giving him xD
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Posted: Tue Jun 03, 2014 8:44 pm
Then make something you will enjoy fighting with.
If your not going to enjoy battling with your character your not going to enjoy yourself here.
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Posted: Tue Jun 03, 2014 8:44 pm
KogaP Elinoi you are 100% correct, and in addition to what she has said, I'm going to suggest that you actually start your profile over. If you would like help I will be more than happy to help you one section at a time. understood, i will remake my profile. idk when it will be ready.
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Posted: Tue Jun 03, 2014 8:56 pm
Just take your time, and try and put yourself in the actual position of the character. Take my character for example...he's actually like my double. Personality wise at least.
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Posted: Tue Jun 03, 2014 9:02 pm
KogaP Just take your time, and try and put yourself in the actual position of the character. Take my character for example...he's actually like my double. Personality wise at least. i understand but that was what i attempted to make. in rl im a boxer im use to fighting close and not over thinking so the whole idea of magic is difficult for me to grasp. also i have never been in a guild that was so in depth for character creation.
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Posted: Tue Jun 03, 2014 9:07 pm
gray reaper KogaP Just take your time, and try and put yourself in the actual position of the character. Take my character for example...he's actually like my double. Personality wise at least. i understand but that was what i attempted to make. in rl im a boxer im use to fighting close and not over thinking so the whole idea of magic is difficult for me to grasp. also i have never been in a guild that was so in depth for character creation. Well this guild is meant for Semi-literate and above members, but we accept members whom are under the semi-literate level in order to help them achieve a higher literacy level in Gaia as well in their everyday life. Words hold power and being able to utilize them freely and directly will place you in a higher position than others whom can't convey their thoughts and feelings appropriately to a given situation.
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Posted: Tue Jun 03, 2014 9:10 pm
KogaP gray reaper KogaP Just take your time, and try and put yourself in the actual position of the character. Take my character for example...he's actually like my double. Personality wise at least. i understand but that was what i attempted to make. in rl im a boxer im use to fighting close and not over thinking so the whole idea of magic is difficult for me to grasp. also i have never been in a guild that was so in depth for character creation. Well this guild is meant for Semi-literate and above members, but we accept members whom are under the semi-literate level in order to help them achieve a higher literacy level in Gaia as well in their everyday life. Words hold power and being able to utilize them freely and directly will place you in a higher position than others whom can't convey their thoughts and feelings appropriately to a given situation. i agree and welcome the chance to expand my knowledge of linguistic skill. is there any way i can design a character who does not use qi but merely focuses on unharmed to armed combat?
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Posted: Tue Jun 03, 2014 9:52 pm
gray reaper KogaP gray reaper KogaP Just take your time, and try and put yourself in the actual position of the character. Take my character for example...he's actually like my double. Personality wise at least. i understand but that was what i attempted to make. in rl im a boxer im use to fighting close and not over thinking so the whole idea of magic is difficult for me to grasp. also i have never been in a guild that was so in depth for character creation. Well this guild is meant for Semi-literate and above members, but we accept members whom are under the semi-literate level in order to help them achieve a higher literacy level in Gaia as well in their everyday life. Words hold power and being able to utilize them freely and directly will place you in a higher position than others whom can't convey their thoughts and feelings appropriately to a given situation. i agree and welcome the chance to expand my knowledge of linguistic skill. is there any way i can design a character who does not use qi but merely focuses on unharmed to armed combat? Qi is something that is used in all life, ignoring Qi is like saying your character is already dead, and even then the dead have their own form of Qi.
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Posted: Tue Jun 03, 2014 9:54 pm
KogaP gray reaper KogaP gray reaper KogaP Just take your time, and try and put yourself in the actual position of the character. Take my character for example...he's actually like my double. Personality wise at least. i understand but that was what i attempted to make. in rl im a boxer im use to fighting close and not over thinking so the whole idea of magic is difficult for me to grasp. also i have never been in a guild that was so in depth for character creation. Well this guild is meant for Semi-literate and above members, but we accept members whom are under the semi-literate level in order to help them achieve a higher literacy level in Gaia as well in their everyday life. Words hold power and being able to utilize them freely and directly will place you in a higher position than others whom can't convey their thoughts and feelings appropriately to a given situation. i agree and welcome the chance to expand my knowledge of linguistic skill. is there any way i can design a character who does not use qi but merely focuses on unharmed to armed combat? Qi is something that is used in all life, ignoring Qi is like saying your character is already dead, and even then the dead have their own form of Qi. ah i see. :p hmm from the show there were only a few who could really use special abilities. ill take it into consideration tho i am rather discouraged over the difficulty i am having.
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