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 Posted: Tue Mar 01, 2011 9:20 pm
Mythic:: What can I say? I'm awesome.
Sera:: That's some good story telling you've got there. I was reading through those first two chapters.
Something caught my eye though, if you're writing all that. How did you manage to post such a large number within 10 minutes of each other, and how come there's D&D style Dice rolling points, within the last paragraphs of the second post?
My final question: Did you base all of that off of D&D's Ravenloft setting?
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Posted: Tue Mar 01, 2011 9:21 pm
Edit: Shadow - Really? Sucks.
Well, it's a song about Pizza hut, KFC, and McDonalds.
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Posted: Tue Mar 01, 2011 9:31 pm
Aha, I am pleased that someone managed to notice that.
The stories were actual projects that I had been working on and felt that they were at least half-way decent enough to be posted.
The second chapter is far from finished, they are things I work on when I am not here posting because I just enjoy writing and whatnot.
The campaign was indeed based in Ravenloft and it was of my own devising biggrin It is what me and my friends were doing a few months ago but we only played once because everyone except me is in school...ya know?
And I figured, what better way than to gain writing points than to share what I've already written, you guys are the only ones to have read that.
Oh, the story is actually a superhero based story...the three of them are going to gain powers via governmental experiment and one of them is going to go a little bit wild and become evil xd
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Posted: Tue Mar 01, 2011 9:33 pm
Sera: You've been using chapters you've written from stuff you've been writing? Neat.
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Posted: Tue Mar 01, 2011 9:34 pm
If I could give a shred of advice?
Differentiate what is your RPC here, the character your RPC is reading about, and the reading that the character is reading.
Otherwise it reads like a jumbled mess, and looks like you just threw down some plagerized work from someone else's doing.
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Posted: Tue Mar 01, 2011 9:36 pm
Hrm...you have a point. How would you suggest going about that in those posts?
I figured that I had lead into it fairly well, explaining that he was reading and writing in a book...hrm.
Haruhi, yeah only for the double xp thing. Granted, the 5k post that I did was what I worked on for a few hours...that one, I am not quite sure how good it is...
Reaver, your thoughts on the Gauntlet?
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Posted: Tue Mar 01, 2011 9:39 pm
Sera Trystfall Hrm...you have a point. How would you suggest going about that in those posts?
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Posted: Tue Mar 01, 2011 9:40 pm
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Posted: Tue Mar 01, 2011 9:41 pm
Sera Trystfall Hrm...you have a point. How would you suggest going about that in those posts? I figured that I had lead into it fairly well, explaining that he was reading and writing in a book...hrm. Haruhi, yeah only for the double xp thing. Granted, the 5k post that I did was what I worked on for a few hours...that one, I am not quite sure how good it is... Reaver, your thoughts on the Gauntlet?
And as far as writing it goes, you usually want to figure out a way to indent, or change the way the words are written.
IE: Main text is plain, "inside text"[readings, writings, etc] are italicized.
Stuff like that?
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Posted: Tue Mar 01, 2011 9:44 pm
Hrm...perhaps.
The Gauntlet was the massive post that I did first. It explained a challenge that was created for Phantom Faction members in Skull Valley...I did 5k words on just that biggrin
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Posted: Tue Mar 01, 2011 9:45 pm
Sera Trystfall Hrm...perhaps. The Gauntlet was the massive post that I did first. It explained a challenge that was created for Phantom Faction members in Skull Valley...I did 5k words on just that biggrin
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Posted: Tue Mar 01, 2011 9:54 pm
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Posted: Tue Mar 01, 2011 9:57 pm
Oh! I almost forgot!
Sera, could you read my last post in the Break Wasteland and tell me what you think? The text is kind of tiny but you can read it if you quote it or something.
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Posted: Tue Mar 01, 2011 10:22 pm
It was amusing, this part made me laugh because I love typos. The orange furred car...
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Posted: Tue Mar 01, 2011 10:27 pm
I love typos too, best one I remember is:
"the ground shook open in a furry of power"
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