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KB

Roleplaying: 2/3

Tactics: 1/3

Conciseness: 2/2

Damage: 1/2

6/10

Bonus Points

Consistent Posting: 1/1

Point Deductions

OOC Bashing: -0/5

Violation of Profile: -0/5

Absence: -0/3

KOed: -3/3

Killed Opponent: -0/5

Total: 4/10

Comments:

The roleplaying was simple, so it wasn't bad, but it could be a bit better. Good for what the character was, but not all that exciting in terms of the fight from his viewpoint. But not much was happening other than fighting at mid range till the end of the fight.

Fighting wise, I expected a more intelligent fight considering the Feathertouch ability. I could see him wielding the sword on his back while he poked from a distance. Spears are very good for what they do, and he shouldn't have gotten in so easily as you made him do. Especially during the moment when he dodged and punched in to stab at your character's arm. You could have said NOPE, and kept the distance skirted and punished him for it. I just think this fight could have went better. Even if your character is being played as an inexperienced fighter, he's still fighting. But I can't get on you for keeping to that to begin with.

Also, don't use afterburn like that anymore. Afterburn is there specifically to allow someone to use an ability immediately then take the consequence of it after using said ability. You can't charge an afterburn in the same matter as a normal charge, and putting them together doesn't work in that situation. Afterburn is also more for people specifically putting it in their profiles so we can make sure it's used right with specifical abilities.

Tres

Roleplaying: 1/3

Tactics: 1/3

Conciseness: 1/2

Damage: 2/2

5/10

Bonus Points

Consistent Posting: 1/1

Point Deductions

OOC Bashing: -0/5

Violation of Profile: -2/5

Absence: -0/3

KOed: -0/3

Killed Opponent: -5/5

Total: -1/10

Comments:

Well, the first thing to note is the Grease ability. We specifically got rid of it in the final profile. We allowed you to keep the "body grease" part of it, but the Spit ability was removed, so that put a -2 on Profile violation for your score. The kill is self explanatory.

Your roleplaying is still written very technical. Even when you threw flavor text into it, it almost felt artifical rather than natural. This is mostly because of the way you write. When I read your posts, it sounds like everything is so jagged and black and white. One moment it's like I'm reading a fighting instructional book. The next, there's something completely non technical thrown in before going back to being specific in explaining the fight movements piece by piece.

Why would your character switch to using a rapier against someone with a heavy weapon? It doesn't even matter if you're trying to take advantage of them using a more tactical reach weapon. A rapier is the worst weapon to use against someone with a larger weapon to begin with. You were better off at least with a blade similar in size to fight against it. It was only fortunate that KB was rping an actual kid with little fight experience cause only little kids would lose against a rapier with a superior weapon in their hands. You respected the attacks from your opponent well, but I still don't believe that your character, who committed to a diving punch from above using a boost ability to propel him further could quickly shift his left punch into a right cross. Then trying to "pull" its power when you already were shooting at him like a rocket is downright illogical.

Winner: KB