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Ike: *Oblivious to the action upstairs, Ike spins around slowly in his computer chair in his room. He was contemplating over sending a message to Marty. It was hard to trust the airwaves now a days.*

Reaper: "what new guy?"

"Rp your posts or there will be some action taken against you. Most likely, you will be suspended." Ginji says as he sees a new mission laying on the floor by his feet.

For the love of Allah (or the Flying Spaghetti Monster), please do not use so many "~~~~~~~~~~" without having a space. It stretches the page and makes it very difficult to read for everyone.

I do not like this mission. Mostly because it is in script format and seems very choppy. I will pass it this time though. BUT next time, be sure to make your mission not so choppy and possibly in regular format, or I will fail it right off the bat. I'm feeling both generous and mean, so push me the wrong way of this one and there will be repercussions.

((Brian, Ike, or anyone who can grade missions may want to double check my work on this one, just because I'm having second thought on actually passing this one. So... Passed until further noticed.))

"RP YOUR POSTS!" Ginji yelled as he was angry.

Ike: *Makes it to the common room and sees Ginji steaming red with anger* ... sweatdrop Deep breaths, Ginji. That's the key.

*A Sticky note mysteriously appears on the graded mission*

~~Or for Saint Blaargen~~~~~

I agree with Ginji on all counts. One perk of being an Aqua Chief is the power to edit other people's posts. In this case, I trimmed back all the tildes. (One of the responsibilities of being an Aqua Chief is to use editing powers with discretion. cool )

A reminder for future use: If you want to use a line of tildes ("~~~") to mark the mission body, try this format:
This will center the marks in your post, and you won't need as many.

For the mission itself, it's good for your first attempt. You fixed up the continuity problems I pointed out when I graded it, and you put Abra's talents to good use by teleporting out of a sticky situation. But Ginji's right about the choppiness. It may help to read a mission back to yourself and see how well it works.

One last note for Ginji: It's okay to be lenient on level 1 missions. They're intended to help new members build both their pokemon roster and their writing quality. I like offering suggestions on how they can improve.

*In their lavish office, Amarube and Yura are having a little meeting*

Charming man from Goldenrod: "Honestly, how do you expect me to do my job with HoennTV sniffing around everywhere? I'm just lucky they haven't turned their noses on me."

Mr. Ames: "That fool Archie has no idea the mistake he's made today."

???? [A man standing in the shadows. He sounds like he may be very large]: "Do you want me to take care of this?"

Yura: "Thank you, no."
Amarube: "An affront of this calibur must be dealt with personally."

????: "As you wish."

Ames: "I think you should take an escort. As foolish as Archie is, he still commands a great many subordinates."

Yura: "Agreed. Reaching Archie will be easier if his grunts are... indisposed."

Charming man: "Ah, the things we resort to when diplomacy fails. I think it's time I got back to work. I have a lot of people who need persuading again." He leaves the room.

????: "I'll gather my men. I can have a squad ready by dawn."

Amarbe: "Too soon. I want Archie to know we mean business. Even if it takes a few days to make our point."

????: "As you wish. I'll get as many of our peons as possible." He leaves.

Ames: "We must be as discreet as possible. If Team Aqua catches wind of this, their interference is assured." He leaves too.

Amarube: "Let Team Aqua come. If Archie wants them destroyed, we can grant him a last request."
Yura: heart "Oh, darling, I love it when you're scheming."