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 Posted: Wed May 10, 2006 5:43 pm
poor Rogue...i hoep you feel better soon! maybe try sucking on some Vitamin C drops. those are good.
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Posted: Wed May 10, 2006 7:29 pm
There are also vitamin C pills. 500mgs each.
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Posted: Wed May 10, 2006 9:02 pm
I get offline now. Storm incoming. Mum doesn't want me on. Meh. Gnight everyone!
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Posted: Thu May 11, 2006 2:14 pm
I feel special...and this is why laptops rocks. Internal battery, yo.
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Posted: Thu May 11, 2006 11:23 pm
Black Cat Godess I feel special...and this is why laptops rocks. Internal battery, yo.
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Posted: Sat May 13, 2006 5:38 am
im getting mine soon!! yay! ^.^
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Posted: Sat May 13, 2006 7:55 am
so i drank some lemon juice...and it tasted sour of course...but it felt really nice on the throat. so i've some lemon juice in my green tea right now.
weird.
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Posted: Sun May 14, 2006 7:05 am
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Posted: Sun May 14, 2006 7:52 am
I wish I didn't have to be alone... I'm so deeply in love, but it seems to be meaningless...
Why must this happen to me...
Poem:
A Simple Request
by Illiud
All I'm asking
Is for her to be mine
Is it such a thing to ask?
Is such a thing a crime?
To be truly happy
Is all I want to be
I know it sounds real sappy
But she's all the world to me
Let her return to me
I can't take this anymore...
I don't want to be alone!
I don't want to be so free!
I just want her at my door...
Can I please have her back?
She's the most precious thing I've seen
And she's left me all alone...
How could she be so mean?
Does she know what she's done?
She's destroyed my inner sanctum
Shatter my mind, made me undone
Made me lose faith in everyone
I have so very little hope
Such confidence I lack
I feel like such a dope
To believe that she'll come back...
I change my mind at every instance
From faithfulness to roving
Since I see her in the distance
i don't know if she's coming or going!
I need her to return
I need to be repaired
I've taken such a burn
I need to feel the air
Give her back to me...
Must I grovel on my knees?
If so, so shall it be...
Do you see?
How much... you mean to me?
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Posted: Mon May 15, 2006 4:48 am
Pretty nice poem there. Illiud. I think the ellipses are a bit too much though. Tone those down a bit, and I think the overall tone and theme of your poem will come out all that much more. Too many ellipses make a poem sound mopey instead of heartfelt.
Oh, and if you want a truly heartfelt/sad poem, try to avoid rhymes with an "A" sound in them. You'll want to go more for "U" and "O" rhyme schemes, and don't underestimate using the "Ore" rhyme scheme that Poe used in "The Raven". He used it for a reason you know, because he found it to be the sadest sound in the English language.
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Posted: Mon May 15, 2006 5:40 am
-tackles Elimio- that why women suck sometimes...love is full of pain my friend. sorreh to say it, but trust me, you'll get over it in time. As the saying goes, "Time heals all wounds", and pain is only temporary.
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Posted: Mon May 15, 2006 1:53 pm
*Starts dancing to random music*
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Posted: Mon May 15, 2006 4:12 pm
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Posted: Mon May 15, 2006 5:59 pm
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Posted: Mon May 15, 2006 6:40 pm
*Runs through room throwing confetti for no apparent reason...*
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