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 Posted: Sat Oct 01, 2005 2:20 pm
As i make my way to watch the Corpse bride I leave you all with this 
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Posted: Sat Oct 01, 2005 2:23 pm
see I dont find dead things disturbing
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Posted: Sat Oct 01, 2005 2:25 pm
it just looks like a taxidermist on the job...
And who hasn't watched a misquito?
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Posted: Sat Oct 01, 2005 2:35 pm
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Fractured Moonlight Captain
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Posted: Sat Oct 01, 2005 2:37 pm
*hears generic rising sun music* xd
And I burned my finger...I need that for posting... crying
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Posted: Sat Oct 01, 2005 2:39 pm
can i give you an honest, but slightly harsh, review?
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Posted: Sat Oct 01, 2005 2:43 pm
of course you can, and I won't be offened.
Actually, I've already gotten a thorough chewing out from my BF. He really dug into me aobut how the story was "cliched" and 12-year-old-ish. Well, that is until I explained the entire story to him...
Anyway, point being, yes. go ahead.
stare but if it's about my bad spelling...yeah..I know.
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Posted: Sat Oct 01, 2005 2:47 pm
Overall, i find it very amusing but there a couple things i would like to point out:
1) you need some dialouge or narration on the first page, to draw the reader in
2) She needs more shading on her tunic on page two when she wakes up leaning against the tree. Under a tree there is no way she would be all one color
3) On the bottom of page threee, where she is mumbling a spell her knee is at a very frightening angle
There you have my nit-picking. Otherwise I quite liked it, and I still think you are an excellent artist.
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Posted: Sat Oct 01, 2005 2:56 pm
Hahahaha! Wow, is that it?
1) No dialog on the first page. This has already been discussed to great length with several people. I want the beggining to be confusing as hell. Plus, if people only look at the first page of a comic book to be interested, I don't want them to keep reading. biggrin
2) Shading, I agree. And I actually have gone back and added shading, I just haven't re-posted the pictre. Initially, I was going to do the whole thing with line, then I realized how confusing that was. Cuddos for noticing.
3) I was going for a cocked knee postition. But when working on a slant, and without a modle or reference...yeah that turned out pretty shitty.
And nit picking is fine. Really, I don't have a lot of experiance illustrating. All i've really done is character design, one pose, one time. It's tought to make all of the frames interenetsing
Thanks alot though. Usually all anybody says is "Ra is so cute."
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Posted: Sat Oct 01, 2005 2:58 pm
Well he is cute.
And I don't pick at peoples work because everyone has their own style of things. Like my style is that soft look that I don't like at times. xp
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Posted: Sat Oct 01, 2005 3:00 pm
you all are tempting me to try my hand at the web comic thing.
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Posted: Sat Oct 01, 2005 3:03 pm
Mine's not webcomic. It's just a photo hosting site. I draw them in my book, then take digi pictures. Yeah that's why the loks so bad...digital pictures.
Style and technical application are two different things Frac.
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Posted: Sat Oct 01, 2005 3:04 pm
go for it, comics are great!
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Posted: Sat Oct 01, 2005 3:05 pm
I'll need to get a photoshop copy first heh. and then I can use front page...hmm..construct my own website, my dad server can host it...hmm..
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Posted: Sat Oct 01, 2005 3:10 pm
Hell, I'd host it if you sent me the pics.
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