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Should I ?

Uhm, No?	7.1%	[ 6 ]
You SHOULD!	29.8%	[ 25 ]
wait, what the hell are we talking about again?	63.1%	[ 53 ]
Total Votes:			[ 84 ]

[Hello Disaster Piece]

Wow, that's quite a bit of homework. o__o. If it makes you feel any better, I have about 20 assignments to do of the Algebra 2. >.<

Hmm..That's very well written. o.o..Did you write that? As for a name...hmm...I don't have the foggiest idea. >.< Sorry.

[iBrightside]

Hello Disaster Piece

Wow, that's quite a bit of homework. o__o. If it makes you feel any better, I have about 20 assignments to do of the Algebra 2. >.<

Hmm..That's very well written. o.o..Did you write that? As for a name...hmm...I don't have the foggiest idea. >.< Sorry.

I lost my statistics book and wasn't able to do the work. Much of my work will require me to work for like five more minutes. So not that much,

Yes, I wrote it. My friends loved my last horror story. So, I decided to take a more demonic horror story.
I am probably going to name it by closing my eyes and hitting buttons. Or use an adjective or concept for him to embody.

[Hello Disaster Piece]

Oh, that's not good. Haha. My work will take me most of the day...But that's also because I procrastinate a lot. ^^ Such as now.

o:
It's very good. I'd love to read your other horror story. :]

[iBrightside]

It is the final push before I am done with high school.

I will let you read it only if you promise to tell me how much you hate it.

[Hello Disaster Piece]

Ah, well I'm a mere freshman.. :P

What if I don't hate it?

[iBrightside]

I am jealous.

I don't like it when people are nice about my work, makes you become complacent with your mediocrities.

[iBrightside]

I think I scared her off.

[Hello Disaster Piece]

Hmm..I'd trade you places, if I could.

Well, I suppose it has to work that way because I think it was a great story. I didn't expect it to turn into a love story. ^.^

[Hello Disaster Piece]

rofl
You didn't scare me off. I'm a slow reader. I like to take my time and absorb the story. ^.^ Don't wanna miss a single detail.

[iBrightside]

Hello Disaster Piece

Hmm..I'd trade you places, if I could.

Well, I suppose it has to work that way because I think it was a great story. I didn't expect it to turn into a love story. ^.^

As would I.

Thank you. I reread it and saw a few flaws. My teacher won't let the class review it because it is a final draft. I have a little sick romantic mind.

[iBrightside]

BTW: The Demon's name is: Izesxel.

[Hello Disaster Piece]

I can't pinpoint many flaws. It jumps a tad bit, from the killing of Robert to them, in love, killing together. Kind of leaves an empty space.
But that's pretty common in short stories, is it not? o.o

Edit; xD Nice name.

[iBrightside]

Yes, there is a time jump from when she kills him to when they are at the movies. I didn't want to go through all the details. My next story I am going for a poetic feel.

Check it (Wikka Wikka)
"The girl's name was Dradle. In previous times she was beautiful, long brown hair with natural highlights that shown only in the bright sunlight of her hometown. Sun kissed skin from the days dancing with her friends after their work was done in the fields. Her eyes were green as the spring grass.
Now she was a shell of her former self. She knew her highlights would never show again. The sun's kiss has faded from her skin, leaving it as pale as winter moon. Now, no one will ever be able to compare her eyes to the grass again."

[Hello Disaster Piece]

Wow. I love that. o.o
"She knew her highlights would never show again. The sun's kiss has faded from her skin." <--That flows very nicely. :]
Amazing.

[iBrightside]

Update on my life:
Lunch will be lightly browned Tolapia with refried beans and homemade fried rice.