It's bad, I know this, help would be nice

[Enraptured By The Sky]

So we're back to this?
We're back to casual conversation,
Meaningless gestures,
Empty words and promises.
All I wanted.
No, all I needed,
Was for you to be there.

You never were.
You never are.
Dare I suppose,
You never will be?

How can we keep doing this?
This dance around each other.
Each afraid of getting too close,
Becoming too dependant...
Yet, both of us want this.

Why won't you make the effort?
Why won't you drop everything for me,
Like I see you do for others...
Am I not worth the time?
Have I shamed you this badly?

Please, dear father...
Explain to me what it is you want,
What it is you need,
You know I'll give you the world.
It's just a shame that you won't
Return the gesture...  

[The Name of the Rose]

I think it's pretty good actually. It does that business of making you think it's about one thing when it's another very well.  

[Enraptured By The Sky]

The Name of the Rose

I think it's pretty good actually. It does that business of making you think it's about one thing when it's another very well.

Thank you. biggrin  

[Sikorka]

The Name of the Rose

I think it's pretty good actually. It does that business of making you think it's about one thing when it's another very well.

I agree, and it's at the same time very beautifully written and moved me heart  

[Enraptured By The Sky]

Sikorka

The Name of the Rose

I think it's pretty good actually. It does that business of making you think it's about one thing when it's another very well.

I agree, and it's at the same time very beautifully written and moved me heart

Really? Wow, thank you so much!  

[War Resistance]

u really don't give urself enough credit for your work, its really good, i love it even though it doesn't rhyme throughout the poem heart  

[KityKatt27]

it is very good.
i love the idea
you should never think what you write is bad,
it makes it impossible to fix whatever you end up not liking
heart Katt heart