RussianBiPolarBear
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“Run!” Derek screeched, sprinting into the clump of shrubs that effortlessly covered his tracks. Both Merek and Barnet hastily mimicked his escape pattern. The lengthy limbs of fir pine trees worked well in concealing their route. Some of your word choice seems too fancy, which makes it seem like you're trying too hard to be a super writer by flaunting your vocabulary. It's (hopefully) just the way you write naturally because every writer has a different way or writing. However, a word like "mimicked" seems out of place in this context. Consider connotation in context of the scene, and pick a word that best conveys the atmosphere you want to create.
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Rose didn’t need to be told twice and bolted for dear life. She could care less as sharp twigs ***scratched against her soft flesh and pierced into her fragile skin.*** (Too lazy to format.) In between the asterisks I added, I'd suggest slimming down this phrase. "...scratched and pierced her soft, fragile skin" would have been sufficient in conveying this image. It's wordy as is.
Other than these few things that recurred throughout this blurb, good job.