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But her mom isn't mad at her. She is home alone because her mom is at work, and she came home from school. Jennifer only sneaks a peak at the message because she is nosey, and well... I need something to start off the story.
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Don't neccisarily discard the whole mad thing....conflict is a good thing
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By the way, I feel your pain!! I hate writing intros to stories, they're so damn hard...
You need to draw the reader in. Here is how I would start....
You've Got Mail! Jen jerked out of her daydream as her mom's computer screen started flashing. She stared at the message, wondering who it could be from. She checked the sender. Anonymous. That was peculiar. Jen went to delete it, but held back, curiosity a living thing in her mind. What could it hurt, she thought. Her mother wasn't going to be home for another couple of hours, and it was probably spam anyway.
"It is my civic duty to open it," she said to herself, dragging the cursor across the screen. It finally reached the flashing mailbox icon. "Here goes" she whispered, giving the mouse button a hard click, leaving no room to turn back.
Ya, that is how I would start....and if you want to use it, you can...I'd be honored
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Ya, that is how I would start....and if you want to use it, you can...I'd be honored
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((thinks* my god that sounded pompous...))
