Can i get some feedback

[Black Scratch]

on the first few "chapters" of my Dramione fanfiction? They're really short chapters bc that's all I have patience for right now. Just published an hour ago.
here

[Sunny Scribbles]

Read through the first chapter, and it was cute. whee
However, I relate more with characters when they are put in the third person, not first. Having a character say "I" a lot is some what distracting and can block you from describing the full scene. To me, it's easier to use the third person to give details about the whole interaction between characters, I don't know.

But nice job, and points for being brave enough to write and publish something.

[Angelic Reprobate]

I actually really like it. You have a great style.
I don't even like Dramione and I kinda wanna read more.
Good job.

[Angel_TsukiAkari]

Definitely interesting, though it may be easier to follow multiple characters if you use thrid person. biggrin