Maria-Lin
It's bad. Sorry for saying that but it's true. The story lacks descrption and I can already tell for whom is Shanon looking - Kai, isn't it? You plan to make them fall in love, don't you?
Better give it up, or at least re-write it seven times before posting.
Blah, I so hate being mean, but I can't really say anything good.
It's your opinion. ^^ but, how can you now that it's Kai who she's looking for? It can be Ray too.... awh, who am I kidding? It's Kai. XD lol
fall in love? Kai? never.... .____." or maybe.... keep reading this. XD
I'll continue this now!
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"Huh? And who?" Tyson asked.
"Kai Hiwatari... do you know where I can find him?" Shannon asked.
"Hum, I have his phone number", said Kenny and called to Kai and then he did same to Ray. He asked them to come to Tyson's.
"Kai's coming, Ray too", Boss-named boy said and Shannon smiled.
"What shall we do while we wait for them?" Max asked.
"Hey, do you want to see my beyblade?" girl suggested.
"HUH?! YOU HAVE A BEYBLADE?!" boys yelled. Shannon nodded and took her beyblade out of her pocket. It was yellow blade little gold in it. Tyson already noticed that the blade had bit-beast in it. But he couldn't know what bit-beast and what power was in it.... and... he wondered, was Shannon good blader?
Oh, is she? And what for she asked Kai to come to Tyson's? U'll know if u want...
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