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Love/Hate

Love
Warmth, passion
Kissing, hugging, holding
Hearts, doves, enemy, bully
Despising, hurting, loathing
Shame, plague
Hate



Boy Scout Ferret

There once was a black ferret
Who tried to get his merit
But the task was too hard
So he slumped through the yard
What a sad little ferret.


Poem for mexican dude....

My Secret

I see you from afar
With your girlfriend in hand
You thinking that you are in love
I burn inside
Knowing that is not me next to you

What you don’t know
I am hurting myself everyday for you
No matter how much I hurt
You will never know
That my scars are for you






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Squeaky8864
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commentCommented on: Mon Apr 30, 2007 @ 12:35am
It's funny, you know? How love, such a pure emotion, can be twisted, molded, and transformed into hate, the strong emotion that causes war, desperation, and pain. You know the perfect reverse to that? Hate to love? KOUGA AND KAGURA! *coughs* Anyway, very nice poems. I give them 8.7 because I love long ones. Ones that you sit there and read over and over because you keep forgetting what the first line was. But you can't really make a long one out of those styles, so there's nothing against you. You should put more up.
Oh, and you should use punctuation and not capitalize every line. It seems more emotional to me, that the person writing it feels so hurt, and so chopped up that they made the form of their poem that way as well. (Mind you I'm a tough critic.)


commentCommented on: Mon Apr 30, 2007 @ 02:19am
Why thank you Squeaks!
I embrace your critism....lol.



lilylacs
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Squeaky8864
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commentCommented on: Mon Apr 30, 2007 @ 08:56pm
Lol. That's a change. "OMG U D0NT NO POETRY DIS IZ DA BEST TING EVR!!!11one!!!!eleven!"


commentCommented on: Mon Apr 30, 2007 @ 09:32pm
Youish odd? lol.



lilylacs
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