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The thoughts of a corrupted sexslave.
Oh yeah~
The Maze
Darkness approaches, descending upon my path, obscuring my view and distorting my future.
Shadows flicker, vanish, then reappear, each a vision. A spectre. A dream.

Each a possible outcome to the labyrinth that is my life. The twisting passage ways that incorporate my being.

Twisting, winding, unforgiving.
Shrouded in confusion.
Disorientation lingering like a mist, enveloping my spirit and consuming my essence.






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S l O P A O
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commentCommented on: Sat Mar 17, 2007 @ 08:53am
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that's powerful....

i could describe it as a pithy poem... [short; but packed with substance...]

i love it... ^^


commentCommented on: Tue Mar 20, 2007 @ 07:25pm
WOW that's..powerful..
ok..for a name it should be a dark name..i can't think of what though
lol..hehe



XxSoraStrifexX
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Nakka-sama
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commentCommented on: Tue Mar 20, 2007 @ 08:01pm
Wow! I like it! It somewhat reminds me of a labyrinth...


commentCommented on: Tue Mar 20, 2007 @ 09:28pm
wow..i feel like im in it..^_^ that is awesome!!!!!!!!!!! kinda sad too...



XxHidden Mist NinjaXx
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Artixano Arcana
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commentCommented on: Tue Mar 27, 2007 @ 04:58am
That sounds like something from Dreams Made Flesh
It's a great book, and what i'm talking about is called 'The Twisted Kingdom' from that book.
Great work! 3nodding


commentCommented on: Tue Mar 27, 2007 @ 04:33pm
Hmmm... Very interesting. It made me feel as if I were lost in the maze of darkness... I like that feeling. It really shows lots of feelings and understanding. I really like how you worded it. Your words are long and agreeable and they make sense. Usually people put long words in their poems and they make no sense at all. My favorite quote from your poem would have to be.... "Disorientation lingering like a mist" I really love that part because it paints a really big picture in my head that I would love to get out on paper. Please keep writing more!!! I would love to read longer ones also. The shorter ones are really good I would like to see how you would do on longer ones. Please let me know when you have another posted, so I can give you more comments!! I love commenting on your poetry because I don't have to say anything negative. Everything I have read from you has a positive comment from me!!!



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XPsycopathic JuggaletteX
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commentCommented on: Fri Mar 30, 2007 @ 09:12am
nice


commentCommented on: Fri Apr 20, 2007 @ 07:07am
WOW!!
eek
did u actually write that??
its awesome i love it!!kwl
:3 mrgreen



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Ceres666
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commentCommented on: Sat May 05, 2007 @ 01:47pm
wow nice poem its deep 3nodding


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