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Whats this? Tenshi is writing?
I started writing this tonight. It's been on my mind for the past few days. I would have added more but I can only write so much at a time. I'm quite happy with how it is coming along though thus far. Some things do need to be changed a bit. Anyway, what do you all think?

Oh, and yes, this is about Tenshi as I had originaly created her. The angel with the demon's appearance.



Heaven


Beyond the pearly gates lies a great castle. Surrounded by a white mist the castle has some sense of mystery about it. The exterior is composed of flawless white marble that gleams dully beneath the radiant sun of Heaven. There are large windows that have been cut straight from the marble. It can be seen that they are covered from within by a single gossamer curtain. The grounds in front are quite simple. They are nothing more then an elegant emerald lawn that is sprinkled with a few small gardens. The lawn is cut in half by a granite walkway that is lined with white tulips. This walkway leads up the entrance of the castle; a set of heavy and ornately carved wooden doors. Upon entering it can be seen that the interior is also composed of the same white marble. Exquisite chandeliers hangs from the ceiling and give the inside a warm and welcome feeling. The furnishings in the many rooms are quite beautiful but not pertinent to this story. Let us instead go to the back of this majestic home and out to the gardens in the back. As opposed to the front the back lawn is much more interesting to look at. There a great many flowers growing back here, tulips, roses, carnations, and every flower imaginable. In the center of all this is a large fountain. Adorning the top of the fountain is the statue of an angel with wings and arms outstretched in welcome. Another angel may be found at the base of the fountain. No, not another statue, but a real angel. Her name is Tenshi and she is the crown princess of Heaven. However, she is like no other angel that has ever been seen. Without rhyme or reason she had been born with the appearance of not an angel, but a demon. She did not possess the wings of her fellow angels but instead the pointed tail and horns of those that dwelled below her world. Sadly, her birth was not heralded with joy but fright instead. Something such as this had never happened before. Due this rather strange occurrence she had been kept out of the public eye since that day. Her existence was a lonely one as she did not have many others to talk to. Her parents paid little attention to her as they were often busy. Yet they still wished for her to learn the ways of angels.






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Einari
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commentCommented on: Fri Feb 04, 2005 @ 09:12am
I really like it. 3nodding I wish to read the whole story when it's ready. heart


commentCommented on: Sat Feb 05, 2005 @ 12:19am
Wow Tenshi, this is beautiful. Everything is explained in such great detail, I could picture it all as I was reading it. Great job!! ^__^

I want to read more! n_n heart



death cab for miki
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Leunah
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commentCommented on: Sat Feb 05, 2005 @ 04:35am
That is awesomely original. Description is excellent! The only suggestions I have is that the first two sentences sound a bit choppy, and the ending is kind of abrupt. 3nodding

Hmm, I should make an Eow story. whee


commentCommented on: Sat Feb 05, 2005 @ 06:06am
I know. Kei said the same thing about the beginning. =3

It's not finished yet, that just happened to be where I stopped. 3nodding



Amaranthien
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